Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific example. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct article/noun agreement (e.g., 'a thoughtful gift' not 'a thoughtful gifts').

例: Yes, I think I'm good at giving gifts because I try to choose items that are meaningful and useful. For example, I once gave a friend a custom cookbook based on their favorite recipes, which made them feel appreciated.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence, fix grammatical errors, and use linking words to add details. Be specific about timing and give one brief example. Avoid fragmented phrases.

例: I usually give gifts on occasions such as birthdays, weddings, anniversaries, or when someone achieves something. Additionally, I sometimes give small surprise gifts to cheer up friends; for instance, I recently brought flowers to a friend after their exam to celebrate.

提案: Open with a clear topic sentence and list specific factors using linking words (for example, 'first,' 'also'). Correct verb forms and articles, and finish the sentence with a complete thought about the result of your choices.

例: I consider the person's interests, hobbies, and current needs when choosing a gift. For example, if someone enjoys gardening, I might buy useful tools or rare seeds so the gift feels personal and shows I care.

提案: Answer directly, correct singular/plural forms and tense, and add a specific detail about the item's effect. Use one or two linking words to show sequence (for example, 'for example' or 'because').

例: Yes, I have. For example, I made a handmade greeting card and a small photo collage for a friend's birthday, and they appreciated it because it felt personal and showed how much I care.

提案: Give a clear opinion in the first sentence and follow with reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Correct grammar (singular/plural, articles) and avoid fillers like 'uh'. Provide a brief example to support your view.

例: No, I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better, because the thought and effort behind a gift matter more. For instance, a handmade letter or a carefully chosen book can convey emotions more genuinely than an expensive item.

× Yes, I think I am a quite good at giving gifts because I always try to choose something meaningful and useful for others I believe.

✓ Yes, I think I am quite good at giving gifts because I always try to choose something meaningful and useful for others.

The phrase 'a quite good' is incorrect because 'quite' is an adverb modifying 'good' and does not need the article 'a'. Also the clause 'for others I believe' is redundant and misplaced; remove it to improve clarity. Suggestion: use 'quite good' without the article and place opinions in a separate sentence if needed.

× I believe a thoughtful gifts can make can make feel special and appreciated.

✓ I believe a thoughtful gift can make someone feel special and appreciated.

There are multiple issues: 'a thoughtful gifts' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'gifts' (singular/plural error) and 'can make can make feel' repeats and lacks an object. Correct to singular 'a thoughtful gift' and add the object 'someone'. Suggestion: ensure number agreement between article and noun and include the object of 'make'.

× Giving gifts. Giving gifts always.

✓ Giving gifts always makes people feel appreciated.

Fragment sentences lack a main verb and object. Combine ideas into a complete sentence with subject and verb. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments; use a full clause like 'Giving gifts always makes people feel appreciated.'

× I usually give gifts to others on occasions like birthday parties, weddings, anniversaries or achievements.

✓ I usually give gifts to others on occasions like birthdays, weddings, anniversaries, or achievements.

'Birthday parties' is acceptable but 'birthday' is more natural as plural 'birthdays' in a list. Also add a comma before 'or' for clarity. Suggestion: use parallel plural forms in lists.

× Sometime I also give small surprise gifts to my friends and family make happy.

✓ Sometimes I also give small surprise gifts to my friends and family to make them happy.

Use 'Sometimes' (adverb) not 'Sometime'. The clause misses 'to' before 'make' and lacks the object 'them'. Suggestion: include 'to' plus the correct pronoun and use the adverb form 'sometimes'.

× I think giving gifts is a thoughtful and meaningful express to way my to way.

✓ I think giving gifts is a thoughtful and meaningful way to express myself.

Word order and word choice are incorrect: 'express to way my to way' is ungrammatical. Use the noun 'way' followed by the infinitive 'to express' and the reflexive pronoun 'myself'. Suggestion: use 'way to express myself.'

× When choosing a gift, I usually consider a person's interest, hobbies, and needs so that the gifts feel meaningful and personal.

✓ When choosing a gift, I usually consider a person's interests, hobbies, and needs so that the gift feels meaningful and personal.

'Interest' should be plural 'interests' to match 'hobbies, and needs', and 'the gifts' should be singular 'the gift' to agree with 'a gift' in the clause. Suggestion: keep number consistent within the sentence.

× I always try to choosing something meaningful and useful.

✓ I always try to choose something meaningful and useful.

After 'try to' use the base form of the verb ('choose'), not the -ing form. Suggestion: use 'try to' + base verb (infinitive without to when 'to' is present) correctly.

× I I believe uh meaningful gives to feel uh, care, affection and.

✓ I believe meaningful gifts make people feel cared for and appreciated.

Multiple issues: repetition 'I I', filler 'uh', incorrect noun 'gives' instead of 'gifts', and incomplete phrase 'care, affection and'. Rephrase to a clear sentence: 'meaningful gifts make people feel cared for and appreciated.' Suggestion: remove fillers and complete the object phrases.

× Yes I have given handmade gifts to my friends and family on a special occasion.

✓ Yes, I have given handmade gifts to my friends and family on special occasions.

If referring to multiple experiences, use plural 'occasions'. If singular, specify 'on a special occasion' and perhaps which one. Suggestion: choose singular or plural to match intended meaning; add commas after introductory 'Yes'.

× I once made a handmade greeting cards and small photo collage for my friends birthday and they really appreciate it.

✓ I once made a handmade greeting card and a small photo collage for my friend's birthday, and they really appreciated it.

Use singular 'a handmade greeting card' and add article 'a' before 'small photo collage'. 'Friends birthday' needs possessive 'friend's'. Tense consistency: 'they really appreciate it' should be past 'appreciated it' to match 'I once made'. Suggestion: use correct articles, possessive form, and consistent past tense.

× I think had made gifts more personal and they show our love and care for for person.

✓ I think handmade gifts make things more personal and show our love and care for a person.

Original mixes tenses 'I think had made' (incorrect past perfect) and repeats words 'for for'. Also 'they show our love' is unclear—use 'show' with clear subject. Suggestion: use present simple for general statements and correct repetition and articles.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts express your feelings better?

Adverb 'better' should follow the verb phrase. Place 'better' after object or verb: 'express...better'. Suggestion: position comparative adverbs in standard order.

× No, I don't think so. Expensive gifts express feelings better.

✓ No, I don't think so. Expensive gifts do not express feelings better.

The student first negates 'I don't think so' then follows with 'Expensive gifts express feelings better' which contradicts; likely intended 'do not express'. Make the second sentence negative for consistency. Suggestion: ensure sentences convey the intended meaning consistently.

× I believe a thought, uh efforts and emotions behind a gifts are more important than its price.

✓ I believe the thought, effort, and emotions behind a gift are more important than its price.

Use 'the' to refer to specific abstract nouns. 'Efforts' should be singular 'effort' for general concept, 'a gifts' incorrect article+noun number; use 'a gift' and then 'its price' matches singular. Suggestion: use consistent singular forms for abstract nouns and correct articles.

× Even a simple and meaningful gifts can feel uh, can express our feeling uh for person better.

✓ Even a simple, meaningful gift can express our feelings for a person better.

Mix of singular/plural: 'a simple and meaningful gifts' should be 'a simple, meaningful gift'. Remove redundant 'can' and filler 'uh'. Use plural 'feelings' and include article 'a person' or 'someone'. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches article and avoid redundancy.