Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện độ tự nhiên và ngữ pháp: tránh lặp từ, dùng thì và cấu trúc đúng, và giữ câu súc tích tối đa 3 câu. Thêm liên từ để mạch lạc. Ví dụ: sử dụng 'I usually try to find out their hobbies and preferences so I can choose a suitable gift.'

例: Yes, I am. I usually try to find out my friends' or family's hobbies and preferences, so I can pick a gift that suits them.

提案: Cải thiện rõ ràng ý và ngữ pháp: trình bày mạch lạc thời điểm và cảm xúc, tránh từ không rõ ('UMM'), dùng từ chính xác và câu ngắn gọn. Ví dụ: nêu rõ dịp như 'birthdays' hoặc 'special occasions'.

例: I usually give gifts to close people like my best friend or family on special occasions, especially birthdays or when we go on trips together, and it makes me really happy.

提案: Cải thiện từ vựng và diễn đạt cụ thể: tránh từ sai (ví dụ 'Sir', 'youthfulness'), nói rõ tiêu chí (màu sắc, hình dáng, mục đích sử dụng) và dùng ví dụ cụ thể, ngữ pháp đúng. Giữ 2–3 câu.

例: When I choose a gift, I consider the color, shape and how useful it will be. For example, I might give a practical book that helps them take notes or keep a journal.

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và trôi chảy: loại bỏ tiếng lắp và 'ever' không cần thiết, sử dụng thì hoàn chỉnh và liệt kê ngắn gọn. Nói rõ tần suất và ví dụ cụ thể (loại thủ công).

例: Yes, I have. I sometimes make handmade craft items or draw pictures for my close friends and family as personal gifts.

提案: Cải thiện rõ ràng lập luận và từ vựng: trình bày quan điểm có cấu trúc (topic sentence + lý do + ví dụ), tránh từ thừa và nói rõ hơn cách thể hiện tình cảm qua món quà phù hợp/chân thành. Giữ 2–3 câu.

例: No, I don't think so. I believe a thoughtful or personalized gift shows feelings better than an expensive one, because it reflects how much the giver knows and cares about the recipient.

× When I give something to my to my best friend or to my family, I usually to find out their hobby, their favorite, to choose a suitable gift for them.

✓ When I give something to my best friend or to my family, I usually find out their hobbies and favorites to choose a suitable gift for them.

The sentence contains unnecessary infinitive marker 'to' before 'find' and incorrect singular nouns. Use 'find' (base form) after 'usually' and pluralize 'hobby' and 'favorite' to match 'their'. Suggestion: remove extra 'to' and make nouns plural for agreement. Grammar problem type ID:10

× It's time when I have an excursions or UMM in their birthdays, I will choose a suitable for them and I really happy to do it.

✓ When I have an excursion or an event around their birthdays, I choose a suitable gift for them and I am really happy to do it.

Errors: incorrect pluralization 'excursions', misuse of 'It's time when', inconsistent tense with 'will choose', missing noun after 'suitable', and missing verb 'am' before 'really happy'. Correct by using singular 'excursion' or 'an event', present simple 'choose' to describe habitual action, add 'gift', and include 'am'. Grammar problem type ID:5

× When I select A gift, I usually think through the color through shape Sir youthfulness of the item I want.

✓ When I select a gift, I usually think about the color, the shape and the youthfulness of the item I want.

Errors: incorrect capitalization 'A', wrong preposition 'through' repeated, unclear insertion 'Sir', and missing articles before nouns. Use 'a gift', 'think about', and 'the' before listed attributes for clarity and correctness. Grammar problem type ID:22

× It is really helpful to my object.

✓ It is really helpful for the recipient.

The phrase 'helpful to my object' is unnatural and uses incorrect noun 'object'. Use 'helpful for' and a proper noun like 'the recipient' or 'them'. Grammar problem type ID:14

× For example, a book which can help them to note informations and make they they journals.

✓ For example, a book that can help them take notes and make their journals.

Errors: 'which' is acceptable but 'that' is more natural here; 'help them to note informations' is ungrammatical—use 'help them take notes'; 'informations' is uncountable so use 'information'; repeated 'they they' and wrong possessive 'their'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Yes, I have ever I want to spend my time uh, to my close friends or my family.

✓ Yes, I have. I want to spend my time with my close friends or my family.

Errors: 'have ever' is incorrect auxiliary use; use 'I have' to answer; use preposition 'with' not 'to' after 'spend time'. Maintain present tense intention 'want'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× So sometime I want to umm, make some craft items for them.

✓ So sometimes I want to make some craft items for them.

Error: 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb of frequency). The rest is fine; keep base verb 'make' after 'want to'. Grammar problem type ID:8

× For example, I can umm, I can Draw Something, I can draw them some pictures umm.

✓ For example, I can draw something; I can draw some pictures for them.

Errors: unnecessary capitalization 'Draw Something', awkward structure. Use base verb 'draw' and include 'for them' to show recipient. Keep consistent verb forms. Grammar problem type ID:10

× Umm, because when someone, uh, sends a gift to others, they want to express their feelings. They, umm, care to them.

✓ Because when someone sends a gift to another person, they want to express their feelings and show that they care about them.

Errors: 'care to them' is incorrect preposition; use 'care about' or 'show that they care about them'. Also 'others' is vague; 'another person' or 'someone else' is clearer. Grammar problem type ID:12

× So they just need to, umm, send some.

✓ So they just need to send something.

Sentence is incomplete and vague 'send some' needs an object. Use 'send something' to complete the thought. Also remove filler words for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:26