Stories— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to form complete and grammatically correct sentences. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases. For example, say "Yes, I loved stories in my childhood. My mom used to read me stories before I went to sleep, which helped me fall asleep more easily."

例: Yes, I loved stories in my childhood. My mom used to read me stories before I went to sleep, which helped me fall asleep more easily.

提案: Avoid repeating words and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas clearly. For example, "Currently, I prefer listening to stories because I don't want to buy paper books, and I also want to avoid looking at screens."

例: Currently, I prefer listening to stories because I don't want to buy paper books, and I also want to avoid looking at screens.

提案: Focus on correct verb tenses and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain your answer. For example, "Yes, I wrote some stories when I was a child. However, they were often childish and not very well written."

例: Yes, I wrote some stories when I was a child. However, they were often childish and not very well written.

提案: Complete your sentences and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain your preferences clearly. For example, "I like stories about animals because they help me learn about the habitats and behaviors of different animals."

例: I like stories about animals because they help me learn about the habitats and behaviors of different animals.

× Absolutely yes, I love story and before I sleep my mum will.

✓ Absolutely yes, I love stories and before I sleep my mum will.

The noun 'story' should be plural 'stories' because it refers to multiple stories in general, not just one. Using the plural form is appropriate when talking about stories in general.

× I love story and before I sleep my mum will.

✓ I love stories, and before I sleep, my mum will.

The conjunction 'and' connects two independent clauses, so a comma is needed before 'and'. Also, commas are needed to separate clauses for clarity.

× My mum will read some stories to make me in to enable me easier in sleep.

✓ My mum will read some stories to help me fall asleep more easily.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect structure. 'To make me in to enable me easier in sleep' is incorrect. The corrected sentence uses 'to help me fall asleep more easily' which is grammatically correct and clear.

× Currently I prefer listening the story because.

✓ Currently, I prefer listening to stories because.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before the object. Also, 'story' should be plural 'stories' to match general preference.

× Currently I prefer listening the story because.

✓ Currently, I prefer listening to stories because I don't want to buy paper books and I also don't want to look at a screen.

The original sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. Completing the sentence provides clarity and correct structure.

× Because I don't want to buy the paper book and I also don't want to see the screen.

✓ Because I don't want to buy paper books and I also don't want to look at screens.

'Paper book' should be plural 'paper books' to indicate general books. Also, 'see the screen' is better expressed as 'look at screens' for natural English.

× Yes, I I wrote some stories when I was a child, but at that time I often write a childish childish story and not very literacy.

✓ Yes, I wrote some stories when I was a child, but at that time I often wrote childish stories that were not very literary.

The verb 'write' should be in past tense 'wrote' to match the past time frame. 'Childish childish' is repetitive; one 'childish' is enough. 'Not very literacy' is incorrect; 'not very literary' is the correct adjective.

× I often write a childish childish story and not very literacy.

✓ I often wrote childish stories that were not very literary.

The noun 'story' should be plural 'stories' to match 'often' indicating multiple instances. Also, 'literacy' is a noun; the adjective 'literary' is appropriate here.

× I like the story that about animals because it can it because it enabled me to know about to learn about the habitat of this animal and.

✓ I like stories about animals because they help me learn about the habitats of these animals.

The original sentence is repetitive and incomplete. 'The story that about animals' is incorrect; it should be 'stories about animals'. 'It can it because it enabled me to know about to learn about' is redundant and confusing. The corrected sentence is clear and grammatically correct.