Stories— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng nên tránh dùng câu quá dài và nên chia nhỏ câu để tự nhiên hơn. Ngoài ra, bạn có thể thêm một vài từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I loved stories during my childhood because they taught me valuable lessons in a fun way. For example, fairy tales like Cinderella and cartoons like Wings taught me about friendship and kindness, which I really appreciate.

提案: Bạn nên tránh dùng câu không hoàn chỉnh như "Which I can hear them talking in a hilarious way." và nên dùng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, nên dùng cấu trúc so sánh chính xác hơn.

例: I prefer listening to stories rather than reading them because I find listening more realistic and funny. For example, I can hear the characters talking in a hilarious way, which makes the story more enjoyable.

提案: Câu trả lời chưa hoàn chỉnh và thiếu mạch lạc. Bạn nên tránh dùng câu chưa kết thúc và nên mở rộng câu trả lời với các chi tiết cụ thể hơn.

例: No, I never wrote a story when I was a child. However, I had the chance to write a song because I enjoy singing, and it allowed me to express my feelings creatively.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp như "hard tools". Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, mạch lạc hơn.

例: I prefer cartoons and TV shows because I find them very entertaining. Moreover, watching TV shows helps me relax and relieve stress after a long and busy day of studying.

× I prefer listening to stories than reading them because I find it realistic and funny.

✓ I prefer listening to stories to reading them because I find it realistic and funny.

The correct preposition after 'prefer' when comparing two activities is 'to', not 'than'. The phrase should be 'prefer A to B', not 'prefer A than B'. This is a common preposition error.

× Which I can hear them talking in a hilarious way.

✓ I can hear them talking in a hilarious way.

The sentence fragment 'Which I can hear them talking in a hilarious way.' is incorrect because it starts with 'Which' without a clear antecedent and creates a sentence fragment. It should be rephrased as a complete sentence without 'Which'.

× No, I haven't ever written a story when I was a child.

✓ No, I never wrote a story when I was a child.

The use of present perfect 'haven't ever written' is incorrect with the specific past time 'when I was a child'. The simple past tense 'never wrote' should be used for actions completed in the past at a definite time.

× However, I have a chance to write a song because I like singing and.

✓ However, I had a chance to write a song because I like singing.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly with 'and'. Also, since the context is past, 'have' should be changed to past tense 'had'. The sentence should be complete and clear.

× I prefer cartoons and TV shows most because I find TV shows is really useful.

✓ I prefer cartoons and TV shows most because I find TV shows really useful.

The phrase 'TV shows is' is incorrect because 'TV shows' is plural and requires the plural verb 'are' or no verb if rephrased. Here, removing 'is' makes the sentence correct.

× Moreover, hard tools really helps me to relax and relieve stress after a long day of studying and busy day.

✓ Moreover, hard tools really help me to relax and relieve stress after a long and busy day of studying.

The verb 'helps' should be 'help' to agree with plural subject 'tools'. Also, 'long day of studying and busy day' is awkward; it should be 'long and busy day of studying' for clarity and correct adjective order.