Stories— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: คุณควรตอบคำถามโดยตรงและชัดเจนมากขึ้น ใช้ประโยคที่สมบูรณ์และหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำ เช่น คำว่า 'when' ซ้ำสองครั้ง และควรอธิบายเพิ่มเติมเกี่ยวกับความทรงจำในวัยเด็กและความสัมพันธ์กับครอบครัวอย่างชัดเจน

例: Yes, I loved stories when I was a child because they helped me bond with my family. Listening to stories together created happy memories and brought us closer.

提案: ควรใช้ประโยคที่ชัดเจนและหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำ เช่น 'to to' และ 'of of' รวมถึงใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'catch' แทน 'cash' และอธิบายเหตุผลให้ชัดเจนว่าทำไมชอบอ่านมากกว่า

例: I enjoy both listening and reading stories, but I prefer reading because it helps me catch the main ideas more easily and understand the story better.

提案: ควรตอบให้ชัดเจนและใช้ประโยคที่สมบูรณ์ หลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำและคำที่ไม่สมบูรณ์ เช่น 'I I' และ 'when I would watch tie' ควรอธิบายเพิ่มเติมเกี่ยวกับการเขียนเรื่องราวและจินตนาการของคุณ

例: Yes, I used to write stories as a child because I loved using my imagination. After watching movies or reading books, I would create my own stories inspired by them.

提案: ควรใช้ประโยคที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'it makes me cry' และอธิบายเหตุผลให้ชัดเจนและมีรายละเอียดมากขึ้น เช่น การเรียนรู้จากเรื่องราวและความรู้สึกที่ได้รับ

例: I like drama stories because they often move me to tears. I believe crying is a way to express deep emotions, and these stories also teach valuable life lessons.

× I think this is the first thing that you remember when when I was high.

✓ I think this is the first thing that you remember from when I was young.

The phrase 'when I was high' is incorrect in this context; 'high' is not used to describe age. The correct word is 'young' to refer to childhood. Also, 'remember when when' has a repeated word, which should be corrected.

× I think this is a good thing for making a bond with your family.

✓ I think this is a good thing for making a bond with your family.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× I love both, but actually I prefer reading more because I like to to read because I can cash off the main idea of the story of of the main idea and make me to have a idea to.

✓ I love both, but actually I prefer reading more because I like to read as I can catch the main idea of the story and it helps me to have an idea too.

The phrase 'cash off' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'catch the main idea'. Also, repeated words like 'to to' and 'of of' should be removed. 'Make me to have a idea to' is awkward; it should be 'helps me to have an idea too'. The article 'a' before 'idea' should be 'an' because 'idea' starts with a vowel sound.

× Did you ever write a story when you were a child?

✓ Did you ever write a story when you were a child?

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× Yes, I did. I love to I I love to have imagination. When I when I would watch tie, I like to read after I leave, I like to I like to write a story that I.

✓ Yes, I did. I love to have imagination. When I would watch TV, I like to read. After I leave, I like to write a story.

Repeated words like 'I I' and 'when I when I' should be removed. 'Watch tie' is a typo; it should be 'watch TV'. The sentence 'I like to I like to write a story that I' is incomplete and awkward; it is corrected to 'I like to write a story'. Also, 'leave' may be contextually incorrect but kept as is since no clear context is given.

× Drama. I like drama because it's make me cry.

✓ Drama. I like drama because it makes me cry.

The contraction 'it's' (it is) should be followed by 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. 'Make' is incorrect here because the subject is singular; it should be 'makes'.

× I want to cry a lot because I think this is a way to express something that you love or like.

✓ I want to cry a lot because I think this is a way to express something that you love or like.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× And moreover, you need to learn anything from them.

✓ Moreover, you need to learn something from them.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is generally informal and unnecessary here. 'Anything' is incorrect in this positive context; 'something' is appropriate. 'Moreover' already serves as a conjunction, so 'And' is redundant.