Stories— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“which attracted me until”不完整，且句子结构不够清晰。建议注意时态一致性，避免句子碎片，使用更准确的词汇表达人物性格。

例: Yes, I loved stories when I was a child, especially Disney tales. Each princess has her own unique personality, which fascinated me and made me want to learn more about their stories. My favorite is Cinderella because she is kind and gentle to everyone.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，如“picture the sense”应为“picture the scenes”，“reading it me to exchange”表达不明确。建议加强句子连贯性，使用正确的短语和词汇。

例: I prefer reading stories because it allows me to use my imagination more freely. When I read, I can picture the scenes in my mind and feel like the story belongs to me personally, which makes the experience more special. Also, reading helps me understand the details better than just listening.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，如“not used to write story”应为“not used to writing stories”，且表达不够自然。建议注意动词形式和时态，避免重复和不连贯的表达。

例: Not really, because I wasn't very good at reading and didn't have much creativity. So, I wasn't used to writing stories when I was a kid. However, I enjoyed reading stories created by others because they made me happy.

提案: 回答中存在严重拼写和语法错误，如“very tired”应为“fairy tales”，“real wood”应为“real world”，且句子结构混乱。建议加强词汇准确性和句子连贯性。

例: I like fairy tales the most because they allow me to escape from the stressful real world. In these stories, I can imagine magical worlds and learn important lessons about kindness and bravery. Reading them makes me feel relaxed and happy.

× Each Princess has her own unique personalities, which attracted me until.

✓ Each princess has her own unique personality, which attracted me.

这里的主语是单数的“Each princess”，所以谓语动词和后面的名词也应该用单数形式。'personalities'应改为单数'personality'。

× Make me want to explore their story more deeply.

✓ It made me want to explore their stories more deeply.

该句缺少主语，导致句子结构不完整。应加上主语'It'，并且时态应与前文一致，使用过去式'made'。

× I like the Cinderella most because she is so kindness and gentle to everyone.

✓ I like Cinderella the most because she is so kind and gentle to everyone.

'kindness'是名词，句中应使用形容词'kind'来修饰主语。此外，'the Cinderella'中的冠词'the'不必要，应去掉。

× When I read the story, I can picture the sense in my mind and feel like a story belong to me personally which make the experience more special.

✓ When I read the story, I can picture the scenes in my mind and feel like the story belongs to me personally, which makes the experience more special.

'sense'应为复数形式'scenes'，'belong'应为第三人称单数形式'belongs'，'make'应为第三人称单数形式'makes'，以保持主谓一致。

× Also reading it me to exchange to understand the details better than just listening.

✓ Also, reading it helps me to understand the details better than just listening.

原句中'it me to exchange to understand'结构混乱，缺少谓语动词。应改为'reading it helps me to understand'，使句子通顺。

× So I'm not used to write story when I was kid.

✓ So I wasn't used to writing stories when I was a kid.

'used to'后应接动名词形式'writing'，且时态应与句中时间状语一致，使用过去时'wasn't'。'story'应为复数'stories'，'a kid'前应加冠词。

× But I like to reading the story that others create 'cause when I read the good stories, it's made me happy.

✓ But I like reading the stories that others create because when I read good stories, they make me happy.

'like to reading'应改为'like reading'，'story'应为复数'stories'，'it's made me happy'时态错误，应为'they make me happy'。

× I like very tired most because they allow me to escape from the stressful real wood.

✓ I like fairy tales most because they allow me to escape from the stressful real world.

'very tired'应为'fairy tales'，且'tales'为复数，'wood'应为'world'。

× Fair in this stories, I can imagine magical words at l'important lessons about kindness and bravery.

✓ In these stories, I can imagine magical worlds and important lessons about kindness and bravery.

'Fair in this stories'应为'In these stories'，'words'应为'worlds'，'l'important'应为'and important'，修正介词和拼写错误。

× This made me feel relaxed and happy when I read them.

✓ This makes me feel relaxed and happy when I read them.

句中描述的是现在的感受，应使用一般现在时'makes'，而非过去时'made'。