Plants— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, umm), correct vocabulary (seed not seat; tarragon is an herb), and provide one specific supporting detail about care or use. Keep to 2–4 sentences and use linking words like “so” or “therefore.”

例: Yes, I have some plants at home. Last month my girlfriend gave me tarragon seeds, so I started growing the herb for cooking. I water it twice a week and keep the pot on a sunny windowsill so I can harvest fresh leaves for salads and sauces.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence and give precise, grammatically correct supporting details. Remove hesitations and incorrect phrases (e.g., “a plants”, “giant plant”). Use linking words like “then” or “after that” to show sequence and give a specific timeframe and reason for the activity.

例: When I was young, I grew green beans at kindergarten. We planted seeds to learn about the life cycle, and after about two to three months the seedlings developed into tall bean plants, which helped me understand how plants grow over time.

提案: Answer directly with clear, accurate vocabulary (use “healthy plants,” “fertilizer” or “nutrients,” not “giant parts” or “vitamins”). Avoid fillers and be specific about care routines and reasons. Use linking words like “first,” “also,” and “because.”

例: Yes, I do. First, you need to water plants regularly and provide nutrients or fertilizer. Also, they should get plenty of sunlight because light is needed for photosynthesis and healthy growth.

提案: Provide a clear, complete opinion with specific examples and avoid incomplete sentences and fillers. Correct vocabulary (plants, not plans). Use linking words like “for example” or “sometimes” and give cultural context or occasions when plants are given as gifts.

例: I think it depends on the occasion and the giver. Sometimes people give plants as gifts for housewarmings or to show friendship; for example, poinsettias or lucky bamboo are common presents because they symbolize good luck and a fresh start.

× Yes I do, last month my girlfriend uh, gave me a seat of the uh, tarragon which is a herbs for cooking umm, So I uh, have been growing the plants since uh, she gave me the seeds so I could grow umm, freshly herbs.

✓ Yes, I do. Last month my girlfriend gave me a set of tarragon, which is an herb for cooking. I have been growing it since she gave me the seeds so I could grow fresh herbs.

Errors: incorrect article usage ('a seat' -> 'a set'; 'the uh, tarragon' -> 'tarragon' or 'the tarragon' depending on context), plural/article with 'herbs' ('which is a herbs' -> 'which is an herb'), and awkward word forms ('freshly herbs' -> 'fresh herbs'). Suggestions: use the correct noun ('set' not 'seat') and correct articles (use 'an' before vowel sound 'herb' if singular), keep pronoun reference consistent ('it' for the plant), and use 'fresh herbs' as the correct adjective+noun form. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Well, I remember during kindergarten, I was given a seed of green beans to grow to learn about the life cycle of a plants.

✓ Well, I remember during kindergarten I was given a seed of green beans to grow to learn about the life cycle of a plant.

Error: incorrect singular/plural ('a plants' should be singular 'a plant') because 'a' requires a singular noun. Suggestion: match article 'a' with singular noun and keep noun form consistent with context. Grammar problem type ID:1

× And uh, it talks about two to three months to from, uh, growing into seed into a giant plant.

✓ It takes about two to three months to grow from a seed into a large plant.

Errors: awkward structure and unnecessary words ('it talks about', 'to from', 'growing into seed into a giant plant'). Suggestion: use 'take(s) ... to ...' for duration and a clear prepositional phrase 'from a seed into a large plant'; use 'large' instead of 'giant' for natural collocation. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I do know that, uh, in order to successfully to grow a healthy and giant parts, uh, I have to give water and nutrition to the plants frequently and it has to be exposed into the sunlight so it could absorb the, uh, vitamins.

✓ I know that, in order to grow healthy, large plants, I have to water them and give them nutrients frequently, and they must be exposed to sunlight so they can absorb the vitamins.

Errors: incorrect verb forms and participles ('successfully to grow' unnecessary 'to'; 'giant parts' -> 'large plants'); incorrect use of 'give water and nutrition to the plants' (more natural: 'water them and give them nutrients'); incorrect passive phrasing 'it has to be exposed into the sunlight' and modal mismatch 'so it could absorb' -> 'so they can absorb'. Suggestions: remove redundant words, use correct plural nouns and pronouns, use 'exposed to sunlight', and use 'can' for general ability in present tense. Grammar problem type ID:10

× Entry. In my opinion, it depends on the people who send their gifts. If there there are someone who want to express their love, umm to another person, they will give uh, some special plans. Especially uh.

✓ In my opinion, it depends on the person who is sending the gift. If someone wants to express their love to another person, they will give some special plants.

Errors: extraneous word 'Entry'; subject/verb agreement and pronoun errors ('there there are someone' incorrect structure; 'someone who want' should be 'someone who wants'); 'plans' is a misspelling for 'plants'. Suggestions: remove unnecessary words, use correct subject-verb agreement ('someone wants'), use singular/plural consistency ('person' vs 'people'), and correct the word to 'plants'. Grammar problem type ID:26