Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity, accuracy and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the place, use correct verbs and vocabulary, avoid repetition, and give one or two specific supporting details linked by conjunctions. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: I went to a beach town with my family for my last holiday. We spent three days relaxing on the sand, soaking up the sun and eating fresh seafood, so it was a great chance for us to unwind.

提案: Reduce repetition and use natural phrases. Give a clear topic sentence and then two supporting reasons with linking words (for example, because / so). Replace awkward expressions like 'check my battery' with 'recharge my energy'.

例: Yes, I definitely like holidays because they let me take a break from my heavy workload and recharge my energy. For example, I usually sleep in and spend quality time with my family and friends.

提案: Be specific and correct grammar. Name the holiday clearly (for example, Tet or National Day) and explain why you prefer it with one supporting detail. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' and correct subject-verb agreement.

例: My favorite public holiday is Tet, which is the longest vacation in Vietnam. I like it because I can travel back to my hometown and gather with my extended family.

提案: Answer directly and avoid unclear phrases. Begin with a topic sentence stating typical activities, then give contrasting examples for long and short breaks using linking words ('if', 'whereas'). Keep sentences complete and concise.

例: It depends on the length of the holiday. If it's a long break, I usually go on a trip with friends to explore new places, whereas for short holidays I stay at home to rest and catch up on sleep.

提案: Make the answer relevant and grammatically correct. State clearly whether you like staying at home and give one specific reason and one example activity. Remove unrelated phrases and repetitions.

例: Yes, I enjoy spending days at home because it is relaxing and inexpensive. For example, I often tidy my room and listen to my favorite music in a quiet environment.

提案: Clarify preference and use correct vocabulary. Say which you prefer and give two concise reasons connected by 'because' and 'so'. Avoid unclear words and incorrect forms.

例: I prefer a leisurely holiday because I want to relax and recover from work, so I enjoy sleeping in and taking long walks.

提案: Good clear answer and relevant details. To improve, tighten the language and add a brief example or contrast using a linking word like 'rather than'. Avoid informal fillers like 'to be honest' unless sparingly used.

例: I prefer a peaceful holiday rather than an exciting one because it allows me to relax and sleep without an alarm; for example, I like lounging on the beach instead of visiting crowded tourist sites.

× For my last holiday, I escaped to fall asleep with my family.

✓ For my last holiday, I escaped to the beach with my family.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and uses incorrect verbs and phrase 'fall asleep' which doesn't fit context. This is a sentence structure error (Type 26). Use a clear verb phrase that matches meaning; 'escaped to the beach' or 'went to the beach' conveys a holiday trip.

× We spent fewer days on there catching sunshine, illness while sand beaches and eating fresh seafood.

✓ We spent a few days there enjoying the sunshine, walking on the sandy beaches, and eating fresh seafood.

The phrase 'fewer days' is inappropriate; 'a few days' fits countable short duration. 'on there' is incorrect preposition and order. 'illness while sand beaches' is nonsensical. This is primarily quantifier and sentence structure error (Type 14 and 26). Use correct quantifier and parallel verb forms and correct prepositions.

× Is it a perfect place for us to unwind and escape also and also?

✓ It was a perfect place for us to unwind and relax, wasn't it?

The original is repetitive and awkward. 'Escape also and also' is incorrect. Use 'unwind and relax' and add a tag question if confirming. This is sentence structure error (Type 26).

× Yes definitely. I really like holidays because they give me a chance to take a break from from the heavy workload.

✓ Yes, definitely. I really like holidays because they give me a chance to take a break from the heavy workload.

There is a duplicated word 'from from' and missing comma. This is a present tense statement but error is duplication and punctuation; classify as present tense / sentence structure error (Type 6 and 26). Remove duplicate and add comma for natural speech.

× I believe it is a perfect way for me to to check my battery, sleep in and spend a quality time with my family and friends.

✓ I believe it is a perfect way for me to recharge my batteries, sleep in, and spend quality time with my family and friends.

Double 'to' and awkward phrase 'check my battery' are wrong. 'Recharge my batteries' is idiomatic. 'Spend a quality time' should be 'spend quality time' (no article). This is verb/form and article usage error (Types 8 and 22).

× My favorite public holidays is the third holiday.

✓ My favorite public holiday is the third one.

Mismatch between plural 'holidays' and singular verb 'is', and unnatural phrasing. Use singular 'holiday' to match 'is' and add 'one' for clarity. This is subject-verb agreement error (Type 27).

× It is the longest vacation in the year in Vietnam.

✓ It is the longest vacation of the year in Vietnam.

Preposition 'in the year' is awkward; use 'of the year'. This is a present-tense descriptive sentence with incorrect preposition (Type 6 and 11).

× I believe it give me a perfect excuse to travel back from my hometown and gather with my extended family.

✓ I believe it gives me a perfect excuse to travel back to my hometown and gather with my extended family.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it' requires 'gives' (third person singular). Preposition 'from my hometown' should be 'to my hometown' for returning home. This is third person singular and preposition error (Types 2 and 11).

× Absolutely, it depends on on duration of the property.

✓ Absolutely, it depends on the duration of the holiday.

'D depends on on' duplicates 'on'. 'Duration of the property' is wrong noun; use 'duration of the holiday' or 'how long it is'. This is preposition and word choice error (Type 11 and 26).

× If it's a long break, I refer to setting off on a trip with my friends to explore new places.

✓ If it's a long break, I prefer setting off on a trip with my friends to explore new places.

'refer to' is incorrect here; 'prefer' expresses choice. This is modal/verb choice error (Type 4/26) but categorized as incorrect verb usage.

× On the other hand, during the short vacation I just want to stay put and catch up. My favorite.

✓ On the other hand, during a short vacation I just want to stay put and catch up; that's my preference.

Fragment 'My favorite.' is incomplete. Add a clause to complete the sentence. This is sentence structure/fragment error (Type 26).

× Yes, absolutely. Spending on time is a great question and why without breaking the bank, I every everywhere to tidy up my room or listen to my favorite music in a peaceful environment.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Spending time at home is great because, without breaking the bank, I can spend my time tidying up my room or listening to my favorite music in a peaceful environment.

Original has many issues: 'spending on time' wrong preposition, 'every everywhere' gibberish, missing modal 'can'. This is primarily preposition and sentence structure errors (Types 11 and 26). Use 'spending time at home' and correct verbs and modal.

× To be honest I learnt a word to leisurely holiday because I believe for cautious should be all relaxation and I love to do things blouse I enjoy too sleeping.

✓ To be honest, I prefer a leisurely holiday because I believe a holiday should be all about relaxation and I love to do things I enjoy, like sleeping.

Many errors: 'learnt a word to leisurely holiday' and 'for cautious' and 'blouse' are incorrect. Recast sentence to convey preference for leisurely holiday and reasons. This is sentence structure and word choice error (Type 26).

× To be honest, I prefer a peaceful holiday. It lets me spend more time relaxing and sleeping without an alarm, just chilling out instead of visiting crowded tourist sites.

✓ To be honest, I prefer a peaceful holiday. It lets me spend more time relaxing and sleeping without an alarm, just chilling out instead of visiting crowded tourist sites.

This sentence is correct as written; no grammatical correction needed. Explanation: present tense preference is appropriate and verbs are used correctly. No error (Type 6).