Challenges— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, accuracy and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and articles, and avoid unnecessary words. Use one or two specific reasons with linking words. For example, say 'I find mathematics the most challenging because it involves many numerical problems and a variety of techniques.'

例: I find mathematics the most challenging subject at school because it involves many numerical problems and a wide range of techniques. For instance, solving calculus problems requires understanding multiple steps and applying different formulas, which can be time-consuming.

提案: Reduce hesitations and make sentences concise and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect reason and example. Replace fillers like 'uh' and avoid repetition. Provide a clearer example showing cause and effect.

例: Yes, I enjoy challenging myself because it increases my energy and improves my concentration. For example, when I face a difficult task, I become more focused and work steadily until I solve it.

提案: Clarify your opinion and support it with coherent reasons. Avoid absolute statements like 'nobody' unless you mean it; instead use 'I don't think many people would.' Correct grammar (e.g., 'it builds up stress' not 'attentions') and use linking words to explain consequences.

例: I don't think many people want a life full of constant challenges because it can build up stress and harm mental well-being. For example, continuous pressure at work may lead to anxiety and reduced productivity.

提案: Make the strategy description clear and use correct word order and verb forms. Use linking phrases to list steps and include a short example of the approach in practice. Avoid repetition of 'calmly'.

例: I usually tackle challenges by concentrating on one task at a time and staying calm to think through possible solutions. For example, when I have multiple deadlines, I prioritize the most urgent task, break it into small steps, and work steadily until it's finished.

× 'In my opinion, the most challenging subject at school was a MA math because it have so many numerical problems and many techniques will be used.'

✓ 'In my opinion, the most challenging subject at school is MA math because it has so many numerical problems and many techniques are used.'

'Subject-verb agreement (ID 27) and tense consistency: The student used past tense "was" and incorrect verb forms "have" and passive "will be used." The question asks generally about what subject is most challenging, so present tense is appropriate. Use singular verb agreement with singular subject "MA math": "is" and "has." Change passive future "will be used" to simple present passive "are used" to indicate habitual fact. Suggestion: keep general statements in simple present and match singular/plural verbs to their subjects.'

× 'Yeah, I like to challenge myself because, uh, it helps me to boost my energy level and also concentration will be developed.'

✓ 'Yes, I like to challenge myself because it helps me boost my energy level and develops my concentration.'

'Subject-verb agreement and word choice (ID 27 and 13): "Yeah" is informal; use "Yes" in a formal response. "It helps me to boost" is acceptable but more natural without "to." "Concentration will be developed" uses future passive incorrectly for a habitual effect; use active present "develops my concentration." Suggestion: use simple present to describe habitual benefits and prefer active voice for clarity.'

× 'For example, when when something is challenging come to a part, then more focus will be only in.'

✓ 'For example, when something becomes challenging, I concentrate more on it.'

'Sentence structure errors (ID 26) and verb form issues: The original repeats "when," uses incorrect phrase "come to a part," and awkward passive "more focus will be only in." Reconstruct as a clear conditional: "when something becomes challenging, I concentrate more on it." Suggestion: simplify clauses, use "become" for a situation changing, and place the subject and verb clearly.'

× 'I think nobody like, uh, a life that has a lot of challenges because it build up attentions and also, uh, uh, mentally unstable, it pressure a lot to the person.'

✓ 'I think nobody likes a life that has a lot of challenges because it reduces attention and makes a person mentally unstable and puts a lot of pressure on them.'

'Subject-verb agreement (ID 27) and pronoun/use and word choice (ID 12 and 13): "nobody like" should be "nobody likes". "build up attentions" is ungrammatical; likely means "reduces attention" or "makes it hard to concentrate." "mentally unstable" needs a verb: use "makes a person mentally unstable." "it pressure a lot to the person" should be "puts a lot of pressure on them." Suggestion: use correct verb forms after subjects, choose appropriate verbs for expressions ("put pressure on"), and use gender-neutral pronouns like "them." Keep clauses parallel.'

× 'I usually deal with challenges in my daily life by focusing on only one thing which helps to solve the problem and also by being calmly and thinking calmly the challenges and how can I improve also.'

✓ 'I usually deal with challenges in my daily life by focusing on one thing that helps solve the problem and by staying calm while thinking about the challenge and how I can improve.'

'Sentence structure errors (ID 26) and incorrect word forms (ID 13 and 8): "focusing on only one thing which helps to solve" is wordy; use "focusing on one thing that helps solve." "being calmly" is incorrect; use adjective "calm" or adverb "staying calm." "thinking calmly the challenges" is ungrammatical; say "thinking about the challenge." "how can I improve" should be declarative order "how I can improve." Suggestion: simplify structure, use correct adjective/adverb forms, and use appropriate clause order for indirect questions.'