Websites— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答有明确主题，但存在语法和表达重复问题，句子过长且有冗余。建议：1) 用一到两句直接回答并用连接词补充原因；2) 注意时态和冠词（e.g. “the whole day”可改为“all day”）；3) 避免重复短语（如“I often visit… the whole day”和“I scroll my phone whole day”重复）。可练习将两句合并并使用过渡词。

例: I often visit social media sites such as TikTok and Instagram because my job involves communicating with overseas influencers. As a result, I check these apps several times a day to find and contact potential collaborators.

提案: 回答清晰且有例子，但语言可更自然、具体。建议：1) 改用更地道的词汇（例如说 'XiaoHongShu' 或 'Red' 如果适用，并说明具体功能）；2) 用连词衔接理由和例子，避免“you”泛指，改为具体个人经历；3) 控制句子数，保持简洁。

例: My favourite website is Redbook (Xiaohongshu) because it combines shopping reviews and user-made tutorials. For example, I learned a new recipe there by following a step-by-step cooking post, which helped me prepare the dish successfully.

提案: 回答包含信息但语法错误严重且结构混乱。建议：1) 先给出总述句，然后用一两句解释具体变化和影响；2) 修正语法（例如 'the layout has changed' 后接具体内容）；3) 使用连接词如 'for example' 或 'as a result' 来组织句子。

例: Yes, the layout has changed recently. For example, the settings button used to be on the right side, but now it is hidden in a menu, so I often need a few extra minutes to find it.

提案: 回答结构明确但有词汇和搭配错误，细节不够具体。建议：1) 注意单复数和搭配（'learning websites' 用复数，'on them' 指代明确）；2) 提供更具体例子或对比，如提及流行内容类型或用途；3) 用连接词改进连贯性并避免模糊表达（例如 'share their data' 应改为 'share updates or photos'）。

例: Children usually use educational websites because they offer video lessons and worksheets, while young people prefer social apps like Weibo and WeChat to share updates and chat with friends. For example, students often use online platforms to access homework resources.

提案: 回答表达了对比但句尾不完整且用词略僵硬。建议：1) 用一两句直接表明偏好并给出清晰对比；2) 修正不完整句（如最后一句应完整表达 'importance' 的对象）；3) 使用连接词 'however' 合理衔接并给出具体原因或例子。

例: I prefer getting information from websites because they provide up-to-date facts quickly. However, I still value books for deep insights and new ideas, especially when I need well-researched background information.

提案: 回答直接但有语法和表达小错误以及可扩展的理由。建议：1) 用更自然的短句表明立场并解释原因；2) 使用正确的单复数和名词搭配（'website' 单数，'technical skills' 替代 'technique'）；3) 若可能，提出替代方案如请专业人士帮忙，显得更完整。

例: I haven't really considered it, but I don't think I'd create my own website because it requires technical skills that I don't have. If I needed an online presence, I would probably hire a developer or use an easy website builder.

提案: 回答内容具体且有实例，但有语法和措辞小问题。建议：1) 用更准确的表达（'I learned some useful tips'）；2) 调整例句时态和搭配（'a post that talked' → 'a post that explained'); 3) 可以扩展说明结果或感受以增强说服力。

例: I have learned many useful tips from websites that help in daily life. For example, one post explained that adding a little salt while boiling corn can enhance its sweetness, and I tried it with good results.

× Because of my work, I need to communicate with these overseas influencers and I often visit these websites the whole day.

✓ Because of my work, I need to communicate with these overseas influencers and I often visit these websites all day.

使用“the whole day”在这里不太自然，通常用“all day”或“the whole day”可放句尾，但“visit these websites the whole day”更常改为“visit these websites all day”。建议使用惯用搭配“all day”。

× I scroll my phone whole day to find the influencers.

✓ I scroll my phone all day to find the influencers.

同样地，英语中通常用短语“all day”表示整天。原句缺少“all”，且“whole day”前通常需加限定词（e.g. the whole day）。因此改为“I scroll my phone all day...”更自然。

× For example, I used to learn how to cook a new dish by finding a cooking post on it.

✓ For example, I learned how to cook a new dish by finding a cooking post on it.

原句使用“used to”表示过去常做但现在不做的习惯动作。如果说曾经通过这个网站学过一回，使用一般过去时“learned”更合适；若想表达过去常常做，应保持“used to learn”但语境更像举例一件事，故改为“learned”。

× Yes, the layout has changed the lay the setting buttons were used at the right of the website, but after the change I have to spend minutes to find the setting buttons.

✓ Yes, the layout has changed: the settings button used to be on the right of the website, but after the change I have to spend minutes finding the settings button.

原句结构混乱，时态和短语使用不当。将句子分为两部分并使用“used to be”表示过去的状态；“spend minutes to find”应改为“spend minutes finding”或“spend minutes to find”更常见为“spend X minutes doing”。同时“setting buttons”改为更常见的“settings button(s)”。这些修改使句子逻辑和语法更清晰。

× For kids, they prefer visiting the learning websites because they can find all kinds of learning materials on it.

✓ For kids, they prefer visiting learning websites because they can find all kinds of learning materials on them.

这里主语是复数“kids”，指代的网站也应复数，因此应使用“websites”和代词“them”。原句中代词“it”与复数不一致，属于单复数不匹配问题。

× For young people, they prefer visiting social media websites like Weibo and WeChat because they can communicate with their friends on them.

✓ For young people, they prefer visiting social media websites like Weibo and WeChat because they can communicate with their friends on those platforms.

原句中“on them”语法可用但略口语且可能引起指代模糊，建议改为“on those platforms”更清晰，同时保持复数一致。此处也涉及指代与复数一致问题。

× For example, people can share their data.

✓ For example, people can share their data (or their posts/updates).

单句可以，但“data”在社交媒体语境下不太准确，通常说“posts”或“updates”。这属于词类使用不当的细微问题。建议根据语境用更准确的名词。

× Well, I prefer getting information from websites because I can gain access to a lot of information in a short time by visiting websites.

✓ Well, I prefer getting information from websites because I can access a lot of information in a short time by visiting them.

“gain access to”虽可用，但冗长且“visiting websites”重复，改为“access”更简洁；同时“them”用来代替前文复数名词，避免重复。属于时态/用法改进与指代简化。

× However, I think reading books can give me some new ideas and I totally understand the importance to.

✓ However, I think reading books can give me some new ideas and I totally understand their importance.

原句末尾“the importance to”缺少宾语或不完整，导致没有完整动词短语或宾语。改为“their importance”使句子完整，意思为“我完全理解它们的重要性”。

× Actually, I haven't thought about this question before, but I don't think I would like to have my own websites because I know building the websites needs a technique and I don't know anything about computers.

✓ Actually, I haven't thought about this question before, but I don't think I would like to have my own website because I know building a website requires technical skills and I don't know anything about computers.

这里“websites”应为单数“website”与“my own”搭配更自然；“building the websites needs a technique”表达不当，改为“building a website requires technical skills”更符合英语习惯。涉及单复数和词汇搭配错误。

× I learned some tips from websites and I find it quite useful in my daily life.

✓ I learned some tips from websites and I find them quite useful in my daily life.

代词“it”与前面的“tips”（复数）不一致，且时态混合问题不大，但需将“it”改为“them”来匹配复数。属于单复数/代词错误。

× For example, I found a post talked about how to cook corns.

✓ For example, I found a post that talked about how to cook corn.

“a post talked about”缺少连词或关系代词，应为“a post that talked about”或“a post about”；同时“corn”在此不可数，通常不加复数形式“corns”。故改为“a post that talked about how to cook corn”。

× It said you can add some salt then it will taste sweeter.

✓ It said you can add some salt, and then it will taste sweeter.

原句缺少连接词和标点导致衔接不顺。增加“and”及逗号能更好地连接两部分，符合时态和语法。