Websites— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and clearer in structure: start with a topic sentence stating the main type of website, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid small grammar slips (e.g., "many types of results and records created by" → "many results and records of").

例: I often visit the Major League Baseball homepage. For example, I check player statistics and historical records for athletes like Ichiro Suzuki and Randy Johnson, which makes me feel nostalgic because I loved watching baseball as a child.

提案: Keep the answer natural and within 3–4 sentences: give a direct topic sentence, then two concrete reasons with linking words (e.g., "because", "also"). Reduce repetition ("when I was a child... Even now").

例: My favourite website is YouTube because it has many sports videos that I enjoy. I used to watch baseball, rugby and American football as a child, and I still watch highlights and documentaries when I feel bored or lonely before bed.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity: begin with a clear topic sentence about noticing changes, then specify 2 concrete changes using linking words like "for example" and "also". Correct phrasing: "I have noticed dramatic changes" and "recommendation algorithm" instead of "recommendation control".

例: Yes, I have noticed dramatic changes to websites I use. For example, YouTube has updated its user interface and subscription options, and it has also changed its recommendation algorithm, which affects what videos I see.

提案: Provide a clearer, direct answer about popular website types in your country, then give specific examples and avoid unfinished comparisons. Use linking words like "for instance" and include a brief reason why they are popular.

例: Social media and streaming services are very popular in my country. For instance, many young people use platforms such as X, Instagram, YouTube and Netflix because they offer easy entertainment and ways to connect with friends.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your current preference, then contrast with the past using linking words. Correct grammar: "use websites and generative AI for information" and give one specific example of when you use each source.

例: I prefer getting information from websites and generative AI now because they are fast and efficient. When I was a student I enjoyed reading books for relaxation, but for quick facts or summaries I now use online sources and AI tools.

提案: State your main point clearly, then give two concise reasons with linking words. Improve phrasing: "I don't want to run my own website" and explain alternatives and benefits of social media briefly.

例: I wouldn't like to run my own website because keeping it updated and attracting visitors would be difficult. Instead, I prefer using social media platforms like X and Instagram because they are easier to manage and reach more people quickly.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence about what you learned, then give specific examples and effects using linking words. Tighten the wording: "statistics and historical information about players" and explain how that helped you (e.g., improved knowledge or enjoyment).

例: I have learned a lot from the Major League Baseball official website. For example, reading player statistics and historical information has increased my understanding of the game and made watching matches more enjoyable because I can appreciate players' records and achievements.

× I often visit the Major League Baseball homepage because I can see many types of results and records created by famous athletes such as Ichiro Suzuki and Randy Johnson.

✓ I often visit the Major League Baseball homepage because I can see many kinds of results and records created by famous athletes such as Ichiro Suzuki and Randy Johnson.

Replace 'many types of' with 'many kinds of' or 'many kinds of results' is more natural collocation with countable categories; not a tense issue but word choice falls under verb in present participle? However per list this is closest match. Suggest using 'kinds' or 'types' consistently: 'many types of results' is awkward; 'many types of records' or 'many kinds of results' is clearer.

× When I was a child, I loved watching baseball, so I sometimes feel very nostalgic.

✓ When I was a child, I loved watching baseball, so I sometimes felt very nostalgic.

Main clause refers to past habitual action 'When I was a child' with 'loved'; follow-up 'sometimes felt' should match past time frame. Using present 'feel' creates tense inconsistency. Use past simple or present perfect depending on meaning.

× My favorite website is definitely YouTube because when I was a child I usually watched videos about sports such as baseball, rugby, and American football.

✓ My favorite website is definitely YouTube because when I was a child I used to watch videos about sports such as baseball, rugby, and American football.

Use 'used to' or 'would' to express habitual past actions. 'Usually watched' is acceptable but 'used to watch' is more natural. This is a present/past habitual expression issue categorized as present tense problem.

× Even now I keep watching it especially when I feel lonely or bored before going to bed.

✓ Even now I keep watching it, especially when I feel lonely or bored before going to bed.

Add comma for clarity; 'keep watching it' is acceptable for present habitual action. Category: present tense/adverb placement; suggestion: 'I still watch it' is more natural than 'keep watching it'.

× I sometimes know this dramatic changes in the website I often visit.

✓ I sometimes notice dramatic changes in the website I often visit.

'Know' is incorrect collocation with 'changes'; use 'notice' or 'see'. Also remove 'this' and change 'this dramatic changes' to 'dramatic changes' and plural agreement. Pronoun and verb choice corrected.

× For example, when I think about the YouTube, there are some changes in the user interface and subscription plans and I think the recommendation control has changed dramatically.

✓ For example, when I think about YouTube, there have been some changes in the user interface and subscription plans, and I think the recommendation controls have changed dramatically.

Do not use 'the' before proper website names like 'YouTube'. Use present perfect 'have been' for changes over time. 'Recommendation control' should be plural 'controls' and match verb 'have changed'. Also add commas for clarity.

× I don't think there are many differences between countries in terms of the websites people often visit.

✓ I don't think there are many differences between countries in terms of the websites people visit often.

Sentence is understandable but adverb placement 'often visit' is more natural as 'visit often' or keep original; restructuring improves flow. Category: sentence structure.

× For example, in Japan many young people love using social media platforms and streaming services such as X, Instagram, YouTube and Netflix.

✓ For example, in Japan many young people like using social media platforms and streaming services such as X, Instagram, YouTube, and Netflix.

Use 'like' instead of 'love' for usual habit; add Oxford comma for clarity. Category: sentence structure/adverb choice.

× And I think in the US and the UK many children love.

✓ I think in the US and the UK many young people do as well.

Sentence is incomplete: 'many children love' lacks object. Replace with complete clause 'many young people do as well' or 'many children there also like them.' Category: sentence structure errors.

× Recently my preference has changed a lot.

✓ Recently my preferences have changed a lot.

If referring to multiple items (books, websites), use plural 'preferences' and plural verb 'have'. If singular preference intended, keep 'has changed a lot'. Ensure subject-verb agreement.

× When I was a student, I loved reading books because the time was very relaxing.

✓ When I was a student, I loved reading books because the time was very relaxing.

Sentence is grammatical but 'the time was very relaxing' is awkward; better 'it was a relaxing time.' Category: preposition/word choice; suggest rephrasing to 'because it was a relaxing time' for naturalness.

× But recently I usually use websites and generative AI to information, mainly due to the effectiveness and the speed.

✓ But recently I usually use websites and generative AI for information, mainly because they are effective and fast.

Use 'for information' not 'to information'. Also 'because they are effective and fast' clarifies reason and matches plural subject. Category: incorrect verb/preposition usage.

× I don't think I want to run my own website because I have to update new information regularly, but it's very difficult for everyone to find my own page.

✓ I don't think I want to run my own website because I would have to update information regularly, and it would be very difficult for people to find my page.

Use conditional 'would have to' to express hypothetical future obligation and 'people' instead of 'everyone' and avoid redundant 'my own page.' Modal/conditional usage clarified.

× Instead, I want to use social media platforms like X and Instagram more effectively.

✓ Instead, I want to use social media platforms like X and Instagram more effectively.

Sentence is acceptable; no major grammar error. Suggest keeping as is. Category: sentence structure.

× I think I have learned a lot by visiting Major League Baseball's official homepage.

✓ I think I have learned a lot from visiting Major League Baseball's official homepage.

Use 'learned from' rather than 'learned by' in this context to indicate source of learning. Category: preposition use.

× For example, I sometimes think that I can enjoy watching baseball not only by visiting Baseball Park, but also by visiting the page and seeing a lot of statistics and history made by athletes.

✓ For example, I sometimes feel that I can enjoy watching baseball not only by visiting the ballpark, but also by visiting the website and looking at a lot of statistics and the history created by athletes.

Use 'feel' rather than 'think' for personal impression, 'ballpark' is more natural than 'Baseball Park', and 'website' better than 'page'; 'looking at' fits better than 'seeing', and 'history created by athletes' is clearer. Category: sentence structure and word choice.