Websites— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words (for example, "because" or "so"). Avoid filler words like "uh" and repetition.

例: I often visit educational websites, especially ChatGPT. I use it because it gives quick, detailed explanations when I am stuck on a problem, and it helps me learn new skills efficiently.

提案: Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and be specific about features you like. Use linking words such as "because" and "for example." Avoid unclear phrases like "child safety" unless you explain them.

例: My favourite website is ChatGPT because it answers a wide range of questions and offers clear suggestions. For example, it gives personalized feedback when I describe a problem, which helps me solve issues faster.

提案: Answer directly and use one clear example. Use linking words like "for example" and correct small errors ("updated over time" instead of "updated by time"). Keep it natural and concise—no need to generalize then give an example that repeats the idea.

例: Yes, many websites are updated over time with new features. For example, Instagram recently added an "Instant Snap" feature that lets users take and post photos instantly.

提案: Be specific and correct names and categories. Organize your answer: start with a topic sentence naming popular categories, then give examples. Avoid typos and unclear items (e.g., "CPT" likely meant "ChatGPT").

例: Social media and shopping sites are popular in my country. For example, people use Instagram, Snapchat and WhatsApp to stay connected, and they use shopping platforms like Flipkart and Amazon for online purchases.

提案: Remove fillers and improve grammar. Start with a direct statement of preference, then give a clear reason with specific contrast using linking words such as "because" and "however." Correct phrasing ("takes a long time").

例: I prefer getting information from websites because they are faster and searchable. For example, I can type a topic and immediately see many articles, whereas finding the same information in a book can take a long time.

提案: Give a concise topic sentence and add one or two specific plans. Use linking words like "because" and correct collocations ("sell my portraits," "commission work," "earn money"). Avoid run-on sentences.

例: Yes, I would like to create a website to sell my portraits because I enjoy drawing. For example, I would display my portfolio, accept commission requests, and include prices and a contact form so customers can order custom artwork.

× There are many websites that I often visit but the one that I frequently visit is ChatGPT as it's a website that have ample of knowledge in it.

✓ There are many websites that I often visit, but the one I frequently visit is ChatGPT because it's a website that has an ample amount of knowledge.

Use 'has' for third person singular (subject-verb agreement). 'Ample of knowledge' is incorrect collocation; use 'an ample amount of knowledge' or 'ample knowledge'. Also replace 'as' with 'because' for clearer cause. Added comma for sentence clarity.

× Whenever I am stuck at something or whenever I am not able to perform any task or I need something, uh, I need knowledge about something, I prefer to visit this website.

✓ Whenever I am stuck or not able to perform a task, or when I need information, I prefer to visit this website.

Simplified redundant phrases and ensured verb forms match subjects. 'I need knowledge about something' is awkward; use 'need information'. Removed repeated 'whenever' and filler words to improve clarity and grammatical structure.

× My favorite website is ChatGPT because it have every answer to my every question.

✓ My favorite website is ChatGPT because it has an answer to almost every question I have.

Use 'has' for third person singular. Also improve idiomatic phrasing: 'every answer to my every question' is redundant; 'an answer to almost every question I have' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Whether it's a suggestion or it's explanation, it has everything in it.

✓ Whether it's a suggestion or an explanation, it has everything I need.

Use 'an explanation' (article before noun) and adjust pronoun/object for natural phrasing. Also avoid repeating 'it's'; use parallel structure.

× Moreover, I can even share my personal experiences with the child safety and get a personalized feedback.

✓ Moreover, I can even share my personal experiences about child safety and get personalized feedback.

'With the child safety' is incorrect prepositional use; use 'about child safety'. 'A personalized feedback' is incorrect because 'feedback' is uncountable; omit the article. Adjusted to natural collocation.

× Yes, there are frequent websites which get updated by time and have updated tools.

✓ Yes, there are many websites that are frequently updated and gain new tools over time.

'Frequent websites' is incorrect; use 'many websites' or 'frequently updated websites'. 'Get updated by time' is unidiomatic; use 'over time' or 'from time to time'. Ensured verb forms fit plural noun 'websites'.

× The latest update has a new feature called Instant Snap where people can instantly take a photo of anything and then post it there as one view.

✓ The latest update includes a new feature called Instant Snap, where people can quickly take a photo and post it as a single view.

Replace 'has' with 'includes' for clarity. 'Instantly' and 'then' are redundant; 'quickly' suffices. 'Post it there as one view' is awkward; 'post it as a single view' is clearer.

× There are numerous websites that are quite popular in my country and are tailored according to the people need.

✓ There are numerous websites that are quite popular in my country and are tailored to people's needs.

'According to the people need' is ungrammatical; use 'to people's needs' (possessive plural + plural noun). Adjusted preposition and noun form.

× For example, UMM for staying socially connected.

✓ For example, UMM is used for staying socially connected.

Original is a sentence fragment lacking a verb. Adding 'is used' completes the sentence and clarifies meaning.

× There's Instagram, Snapchat, WhatsApp for getting a wider range of information and explanation, chat, CPT and Gemini on there and there are more applications for shopping like Flipkart, Amazon.

✓ There are Instagram, Snapchat and WhatsApp for getting a wide range of information and for chatting; ChatGPT and Gemini are also available, and there are shopping apps like Flipkart and Amazon.

Fixed capitalization 'ChatGPT', corrected 'explanation' to 'for' structure, clarified list structure and parallelism. Removed redundant 'on there and there'. Ensure subject-verb agreement with plural list.

× Umm, according to me, getting information from a website is more convenient than reading the books throughout because uh, umm, on website we type the particular topic on which we have to get some knowledge and the whole umm, source of information appears in a single go.

✓ In my opinion, getting information from a website is more convenient than reading books because on a website we can type the topic we want and the whole source of information appears at once.

'According to me' is non-idiomatic; use 'In my opinion'. 'The books' unnecessary article removed. Use 'on a website' (article) and 'at once' for idiomatic expression. Also added modal 'can' for ability and simplified phrasing.

× But on a book we have to search for the item. That is very time.

✓ But in a book we have to search for the information, and that takes a lot of time.

Use 'in a book' not 'on a book'. 'Item' vague; use 'information'. 'That is very time' is ungrammatical; use 'that takes a lot of time'. Combined into one fluid sentence.

× Yes, if I ever get a chance I would like to develop a website of my portraits on which I am going to sell the portraits and start some Commission work as my drawing is good so I think it's best way where I can start my monetary earnings.

✓ Yes, if I ever get the chance, I would like to develop a website to sell my portraits and start doing commissioned work, since my drawing is good and I think it's the best way to start earning money.

Added article 'the' in 'get the chance'. Use 'to sell my portraits' instead of 'of my portraits'. 'Commission work' should be 'commissioned work' or 'commissions'. Simplified and corrected 'monetary earnings' to 'earning money'. Improved sentence flow and verb forms.