Cars— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by using correct tenses and sentence structures. Avoid redundancy by not repeating 'experience' and 'it was'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I really enjoyed traveling by car when I was a kid. I remember going to another city with my family, which was a long but enjoyable journey. During the trip, we spent quality time together and shared many happy moments.

提案: Improve clarity by using correct vocabulary and grammar. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly. Avoid unclear phrases like 'camber van cars' and 'do a sporting'.

例: I prefer camper vans because they are more comfortable and spacious than other cars. This makes them ideal for camping and traveling to different cities where I can enjoy outdoor activities.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding repetition and adding linking words for coherence. Also, use more precise vocabulary.

例: I prefer to be a passenger because it allows me to enjoy the beautiful views during the journey. Especially on long trips, I love seeing landscapes with mountains and hills, which makes the experience more enjoyable.

提案: Clarify your answer by using correct expressions and grammar. Explain activities clearly and avoid confusing phrases like 'Carpool Turkey'. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Usually, when there is a traffic jam, my family and I listen to music and talk about our daily routines and stories. This helps us pass the time and enjoy each other's company despite the delay.

× I remembered I had experience, went to another city with my family and it was a really good experience and it was a long journey.

✓ I remember I had an experience, went to another city with my family and it was a really good experience and it was a long journey.

The verb 'remembered' is in the past tense, but the context suggests the student is recalling a past event in a present narrative, so the present tense 'remember' is more appropriate here.

× I like camber van cars other compared to another cars because I love cars with more comfortable and spacious and I like to do a sporting many places in other cities by making tent or camping.

✓ I like camper van cars more compared to other cars because I love cars that are more comfortable and spacious, and I like to do sports in many places in other cities by making tents or camping.

The phrase 'camber van cars other compared to another cars' is incorrect. 'Camper van cars' is the correct term, and 'more compared to other cars' is the proper comparative structure. Also, 'more comfortable and spacious' needs 'that are' to connect properly. 'Making tent' should be 'making tents' or 'setting up tents'.

× I like camber van cars other compared to another cars because I love cars with more comfortable and spacious and I like to do a sporting many places in other cities by making tent or camping.

✓ I like camper van cars more compared to other cars because I love cars that are more comfortable and spacious, and I like to do sports in many places in other cities by setting up tents or camping.

The phrase 'by making tent or camping' is incorrect. The correct preposition and phrase is 'by setting up tents or camping' to express the activity properly.

× Usually when there is a traffic jam, I and my family enjoy doing Carpool Turkey and we listen to some songs and also share about our daily routines, our daily love stories in our place.

✓ Usually when there is a traffic jam, my family and I enjoy carpooling and we listen to some songs and also share our daily routines and love stories at home.

The phrase 'I and my family' is incorrect; the correct order is 'my family and I'. 'Doing Carpool Turkey' is unclear; 'carpooling' is the correct term. 'Share about' should be 'share' without 'about'. 'In our place' is better expressed as 'at home'.