Watch— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, use correct verb forms, avoid repetition and fillers, and give one or two clear reasons with linking words. Keep within 3–4 sentences and use precise vocabulary (e.g., “wear,” “brand,” “elegant,” “confident”).

例: Yes, I usually wear a watch. I prefer designer brands such as Gucci because their styles look elegant and make me feel more confident. I wear it every day, whether I’m at university or meeting friends.

提案: Answer directly, correct past-tense usage, remove repetition, and give a specific example or brief detail. Use linking words like “because” to explain reasons clearly.

例: Yes, I often receive watches as birthday gifts because my family knows I love them. For example, last year my sister gave me a leather-strap watch that I wear on special occasions.

提案: Provide a focused reasoned response with clearer grammar and fewer vague phrases. Use linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example”) and give specific reasons such as status, craftsmanship, or durability. Avoid saying irrelevant personal preferences unless connected.

例: Some people wear expensive watches because they see them as a status symbol and appreciate high-quality craftsmanship. For example, executives may choose luxury watches to convey professionalism and taste.

提案: Make a clear direct statement and support it with specific reasons and examples. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “important,” “helpful,” “manage time”) and linking words like “because” and “for example.” Reduce fillers and repeat fewer words.

例: Yes, I think wearing a watch is helpful, especially for students, because it helps you manage time and stay punctual. For example, I check my watch between classes to ensure I arrive on time and organize study sessions efficiently.

× I always choose Gucci brand because it's give me elegant and also a confident umm on myself.

✓ I always choose the Gucci brand because it gives me an elegant and confident feeling.

Subject-verb agreement with third person singular: 'it' requires the verb form 'gives' not 'give'. Also article use ('the Gucci brand') and noun/adjective choice ('gives me an elegant and confident feeling') improve clarity and grammar.

× I always choose Gucci brand because it's give me elegant and also a confident umm on myself.

✓ I always choose the Gucci brand because it gives me an elegant and confident feeling.

Use of the definite article 'the' before brand names in this context is natural: 'the Gucci brand' or simply 'Gucci'. Also 'feeling' is needed after 'confident' to form a correct noun phrase.

× Have you ever got a watch as a gift?

✓ Have you ever gotten a watch as a gift?

In questions using present perfect, the past participle 'gotten' (American English) or 'got' (British English) should be used after 'have'. Using 'got' can be acceptable in British English; for clarity in present perfect with 'have you ever', 'gotten' (AmE) or 'got' (BrE) must be consistent. Here 'gotten' is suggested for American English.

× Yeah, most of the time at my birthday I got many kind kind of watches, like it's a common gift for me actually, because they all know that how I love watch, so they try to happy me so.

✓ Most of the time on my birthday I get many kinds of watches; it's a common gift for me because they all know how much I love watches, so they try to make me happy.

Plural forms: 'kinds of watches' (plural) and 'watches' (plural) are needed. Preposition 'on my birthday' is correct. Verb tense adjusted to simple present 'get' to match habitual action. 'Make me happy' is the correct collocation instead of 'happy me'.

× Most of the time at my birthday I got many kind kind of watches, like it's a common gift for me actually, because they all know that how I love watch, so they try to happy me so.

✓ Most of the time on my birthday I get many kinds of watches; it's a common gift for me because they all know how much I love watches, so they try to make me happy.

Use 'on my birthday' rather than 'at my birthday'. Remove extraneous words and correct prepositional phrases. 'How much I love' is the proper expression of degree.

× I got many kind kind of watches, like it's a common gift for me actually, because they all know that how I love watch, so they try to happy me so.

✓ I get many kinds of watches; it's a common gift for me because they all know how much I love watches, so they try to make me happy.

Pronoun 'they' is fine but clarity requires 'they all know how much I love watches'. Also remove redundant 'so' at end and correct verb forms.

× I think it's their own opinion and someone like every person has a different kind of passion and different kind of favorite thing to do. Like I love to wear watches. Every person has to.

✓ I think it's a personal choice; everyone has different passions and preferences. For example, I love to wear watches, and everyone has their own preferences.

Original has fragmented and repetitive structure. Rewriting into clearer sentences corrects awkward phrasing: 'personal choice', 'everyone has different passions and preferences'. Avoid incomplete sentence 'Every person has to.' by completing the thought.

× I think it's their own opinion and someone like every person has a different kind of passion and different kind of favorite thing to do.

✓ I think it's a personal opinion; everyone has different passions and favorite things to do.

Use 'everyone' rather than 'someone like every person' and use consistent plural forms 'passions' and 'favorite things'. 'Their own' unnecessary here; 'personal opinion' is clearer.

× As a student, I think it's obviously important to arose for students because umm, uh, as a person, I think we everyone should umm, careful about our time, uh, what uh, the time now and umm, uh, in our activities, umm.

✓ As a student, I think it's obviously important for students to be punctual because we should all be careful about our time and know the current time during our activities.

'Arose' is wrong; use 'important for students to be punctual' or 'important to manage time'. Correct verb forms and sentence structure: 'we should all be careful about our time' and 'know the current time' are clearer. Remove fillers and fix pronoun 'we everyone' to 'we should all' or 'everyone'.

× As a student, I think it's obviously important to arose for students because umm, uh, as a person, I think we everyone should umm, careful about our time, uh, what uh, the time now and umm, uh, in our activities, umm.

✓ As a student, I think it's obviously important for students to be punctual because we should all be careful about our time and know the current time during our activities.

After 'important' the correct structure is 'important for [someone] to [verb]' or 'important to [verb]'. Use of gerund not required here; instead use 'to be punctual' or 'to manage time'. Also use 'be careful' with 'be' verb.

× I think it's their own opinion and someone like every person has a different kind of passion and different kind of favorite thing to do.

✓ I think it's a personal opinion and everyone has different passions and favorite things to do.

Subject-verb agreement: 'everyone has' is correct (third person singular). The original had awkward phrasing 'someone like every person' which is ungrammatical; replace with 'everyone'.