Watch— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and use correct grammar and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes or No/It depends), then give two brief supporting reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and finish within 2–3 sentences. Also correct small errors: use articles (a watch), plural/singular forms, and smoother connectors (for example, during exercise).

例: It depends. I sometimes wear a watch because it complements my outfit, especially at formal events, and makes me look more professional. However, I often avoid wearing one when I exercise because it feels inconvenient.

提案: Answer directly and clearly, using correct verb forms and articles. If you bought matching watches, say so with a brief explanation and a clear time reference. Use linking words like because or for to explain reason. Avoid filler sounds (um, uh).

例: Yes. I bought matching watches for my boyfriend and myself as anniversary presents, so I received a new watch at that time.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and expand with specific reasons and examples. Use correct grammar (an expensive watch, shows their status/value). Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and avoid vague repetition. Provide one or two concrete reasons (status, craftsmanship, investment).

例: Many people wear expensive watches because they signal social status and good taste. For example, wealthy buyers may choose luxury brands to show success, while others value the craftsmanship and long-term investment.

提案: Start with a clear opinion, then support it with two concise reasons using linking words (because, since). Correct word choice (check the time) and avoid repetition and fillers. Offer a short contrasting clause if helpful (However...).

例: I don't think it's important to wear a watch because most people can check the time on their phones, which is convenient. However, some people still wear watches for style or professionalism.

× It depends on Sometimes I wear watch because it complements my outfits especially at a formal event and it feels more and it feels and it feels more professional.

✓ It depends. Sometimes I wear a watch because it complements my outfits, especially at formal events, and it makes me feel more professional.

Multiple issues: missing article before 'watch' (use 'a watch'), awkward phrase 'It depends on' should be 'It depends.' Repetition 'it feels and it feels' is incorrect — use 'it makes me feel' for natural expression. Also use plural 'events' for general reference and add commas for clarity. These are corrections to present participle usage and sentence structure.

× Sometimes I don't wear one because I find inconvenience during exercise or.

✓ Sometimes I don't wear one because I find it inconvenient during exercise.

Use 'inconvenient' (adjective) instead of noun 'inconvenience' to describe the experience; include 'it' as the subject complement. Remove trailing 'or.' This fixes singular/plural and sentence structure issues.

× Yes, I buy a couple watch for my boyfriend and me so I get a new watch for myself.

✓ Yes, I bought a couple's watch for my boyfriend and me, so I got a new watch for myself.

The examiner asked about a past event ('Have you ever got a watch as a gift?'), so use past tense 'bought' and 'got.' Also use 'couple's watch' to indicate a watch for a couple, and add commas for clarity. This addresses past tense errors and noun form.

× Umm, as a present for our, uh, anniversary?

✓ It was a present for our anniversary.

This fragment lacks a clear subject and verb; making it a full sentence clarifies the meaning. Remove filler words for fluency. This corrects sentence structure errors.

× I believe people like to wear expensive watch because it shows and their value by watching.

✓ I believe people like to wear expensive watches because it shows their status.

Use plural 'watches' to refer generally to items. 'Shows and their value by watching' is ungrammatical; replace with 'shows their status' or 'shows their wealth.' This fixes adjective/noun agreement and unclear phrasing.

× I don't think it's important. You will watch every day because it's, it's convenient.

✓ I don't think it's important. You can check the time every day because it's convenient.

'You will watch every day' is incorrect and unnatural. Use 'can check the time' or 'can just check your phone' in present modal sense. This corrects tense and word choice.

× Uh, everyone has a phone so you can check the time and uh, with your internal clock.

✓ Everyone has a phone, so you can check the time or rely on your internal clock.

Original sentence misuses 'and' with 'with your internal clock' and lacks parallel structure. Use 'or rely on your internal clock' to present alternatives and correct pronoun/reference and conjunction use.