Watch— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid mixing two different ideas (your habit and others' reasons) in one answer. Start with a clear topic sentence about your habit, then add one short supporting detail using a linking word. Correct minor grammatical slips (e.g. "I usually use my phone" not "tend to my phone").

例: No, I don't usually wear a watch. Instead, I use my phone to check the time because it's more convenient, and I know some people still prefer watches as a status symbol.

提案: Keep the answer chronological and correct factual/grammar errors. Use one clear opening sentence stating you received a watch, then provide a concise supporting detail (when and how long you used it). Avoid unclear numbers and filler words. Use linking words like "and" or "so" to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, my father gave me a watch as a birthday gift when I was twelve. I wore it through school and into university, so it was a very meaningful present for me.

提案: Make the explanation more precise and correct grammar (singular/plural and articles). Give one clear reason and follow with a specific example using a linking phrase like "for example". Avoid vague or odd details (e.g. "green watch") unless relevant.

例: Some people wear expensive watches to signal wealth and status. For example, successful businesspeople often choose luxury brands because they believe it projects professionalism and success.

提案: Provide a direct topic sentence stating your opinion, then give one or two concise reasons connected with linking words. Remove hesitations and filler words and correct grammar (e.g. "is not important" -> "isn't important" or "is not necessary").

例: I don't think wearing a watch is necessary for me because I can easily check the time on my phone. Also, smartphones offer more functions, so a separate watch feels unnecessary.

× No, I don't have the habit of wearing a watch.

✓ No, I don't have the habit of wearing a watch.

Although the sentence is grammatical, note that using 'the habit of' is slightly unnatural in this context; 'the' is acceptable but 'a habit of wearing watches' or 'I don't usually wear a watch' sound more natural. This is a style suggestion rather than a strict grammar error.

× When I need to keep time, I usually tend to my phone for help and I know some people have the habit of wearing a watch because it symbolizes social status.

✓ When I need to know the time, I usually turn to my phone for help, and I know some people have the habit of wearing a watch because it symbolizes social status.

Use 'know the time' rather than 'keep time' here for clarity and 'turn to' is the correct phrasal verb meaning to seek help; 'tend to my phone' is incorrect. Also add a comma before 'and' to join clauses. This fits present-tense general habit context (Present tense issue - ID 6 and verb + -ing form - ID 8).

× Yes, I have received the watch as a gift from my dad when I was in 1230 birthdays.

✓ Yes, I received the watch as a gift from my dad on my 12th birthday.

Use simple past 'received' with a specific past time; 'have received' (present perfect) is not used with a definite past time expression. '1230 birthdays' is incorrect; likely '12th birthday' is intended. This corrects tense usage and numeral/ordering.

× It I must say it is it was a excellent gift and I wore this watch until, uh, university and I really appreciate the that.

✓ I must say it was an excellent gift, and I wore that watch until university; I really appreciated it.

Remove redundant words ('It I', 'it is it was'), use article 'an' before vowel sound 'excellent', use past simple 'was' and 'wore' for past events, and replace 'the that' with appropriate pronoun 'it'. Also use 'appreciated' to match past time. This fixes sentence structure and article errors (IDs 26 and 22).

× Some people wear expensive watches because these watches show their high social status for example, a successful businessman often wear a green watch from a well known brand and.

✓ Some people wear expensive watches because these watches show their high social status. For example, a successful businessman often wears a green watch from a well-known brand.

Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'a successful businessman' (singular) requires 'wears' not 'wear'. Also split into two sentences for clarity, add hyphen in 'well-known', and remove trailing 'and'. This addresses subject-verb agreement and punctuation (IDs 27 and 26).

× For me it is not important to well, watch because a watch means uh, keeping knowing the time and umm, I can check my phone when I need to know the time, so watch is almost meaningless to me.

✓ For me, it is not important to wear a watch, because a watch is for knowing the time, and I can check my phone when I need to know the time, so a watch is almost meaningless to me.

Use the infinitive 'to wear' after 'important to'. 'Keeping knowing' is ungrammatical—use 'for knowing' or 'to know'. Add articles 'a' before 'watch' where needed. Also add commas for readability. This corrects verb form (infinitive) and article/pronoun use (IDs 8 and 22).