Watch— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and relevant: start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, avoid irrelevant or incorrect phrases (e.g. “I will eat pretty much every day” is off-topic). Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences) and use linking words for clarity.

例: Yes, I usually wear a watch every day. I have done this since I was a child, and putting it on is the first thing I do after I get dressed. Because I rely on it to check the time quickly, it has become a daily habit.

提案: Good content and clear story. Improve coherence by using linking phrases and tightening wording. Avoid small errors in tense and articles (e.g. 'got' → 'received'; 'an automatic watch' is fine). Keep it to 3–4 sentences and use a concluding sentence if needed.

例: Yes, I received a watch as a gift from my mother about four or five years ago. It was an automatic watch, and I was surprised because I expected something much cheaper—maybe around ten dollars. Instead, it cost about three hundred dollars, which made the gift feel very special.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and give two short, specific reasons with linking words. Watch for grammar (e.g. 'a wide range of reasons' is plural so follow with 'one of which'; 'expensive things mean' → 'expensive items mean'). Use vocabulary relevant to status, quality, or durability.

例: People wear expensive watches for several reasons. Firstly, a luxury watch can signal status and make a strong first impression. Secondly, many believe that higher-priced watches are made with better materials and will last longer.

提案: Answer directly and organize reasons with linking words. Correct vocabulary and grammar: say 'younger people especially' or 'the younger generation', 'smartwatches' not 'smart', and use correct verb forms (e.g. 'check and manage their health'). Be concise and give specific examples.

例: Yes, I think wearing a watch can be useful. It allows you to check the time quickly, and smartwatches also offer health features—for example, tracking steps, monitoring heart rate, and receiving notifications, which many younger people find convenient.

× Yeah, I will eat pretty much every day, and I've been doing this since I was a kid.

✓ Yeah, I wear a watch pretty much every day, and I've been doing this since I was a kid.

The original sentence uses 'will eat' which is incorrect and unrelated to wearing a watch; likely a wrong verb. This is a verb form/content error. Replace with 'wear' (simple present) to describe a habitual action. Use present perfect continuous 'I've been doing this' is fine to indicate a habit from the past to now.

× On top of that, after I wake up, the first thing I do is to put on my watch.

✓ On top of that, after I wake up, the first thing I do is put on my watch.

The phrase 'the first thing I do is to put on' uses an unnecessary 'to' before the base verb after 'do is'. After 'do is' a bare infinitive (put) is more natural: 'the first thing I do is put on my watch.' This is a verb form/infinitive usage issue.

× If I am not mistaken, it was about four or five years back.

✓ If I'm not mistaken, it was about four or five years ago.

Using 'back' after a past time reference is informal but 'ago' is the correct preposition for indicating time before now. Also contracting 'I am' to 'I'm' is more natural. This is a past-tense/time expression issue.

× At that time my mom bought an automatic watch.

✓ At that time my mom bought an automatic watch.

Sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. (Included to show checked; no error found.)

× I still remember.

✓ I still remember it.

The original 'I still remember.' is acceptable colloquially, but adding the object 'it' clarifies what is remembered. This is a clarity/past-reference suggestion rather than a strict grammar error.

× I was really surprised because I thought she'd buy a cheaper one, maybe $10.00, but it turned out to be $300.

✓ I was really surprised because I thought she'd buy a cheaper one, maybe $10, but it turned out to be $300.

Sentence is largely correct. Minor punctuation: use comma in numbers and omit '.00' for spoken amounts. Tense usage 'I was' and 'I thought she'd buy' and 'it turned out' are correct for past time. This is a style suggestion.

× Well, there are a wide range of reasons, one which is that it can present the best version of themselves.

✓ Well, there is a wide range of reasons; one is that it can present the best version of oneself.

'There are a wide range' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; the correct form is 'There is a wide range' (range is singular). Also 'one which is' is awkward; use 'one is that'. 'Themselves' is a plural reflexive pronoun that mismatches singular 'one'; use 'oneself' for a generic person. This fixes singular/plural and pronoun choice.

× On top of that they may think expensive things means they can use it for a long time.

✓ On top of that, they may think expensive things mean they can be used for a long time.

'Expensive things' is plural, so the verb should be 'mean' not 'means' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'they can use it' is ambiguous: better to say 'they can be used' to refer to the items. Also add a comma after the introductory phrase. This addresses subject-verb agreement and clarity.

× Yeah, I think so.

✓ Yes, I think so.

Grammatically fine; changing 'Yeah' to 'Yes' is a formality/style suggestion to suit test speaking. Present-tense usage is correct.

× Well, you know, it's a great way for us to check time immediately.

✓ Well, you know, it's a great way for us to check the time immediately.

Omitting the definite article 'the' before 'time' sounds unnatural in English. Use 'check the time'. This is an article usage/ sentence structure issue.

× Plus many people especially younger generation like to wear smart, which is they can use them to do many things such as counting steps and check and deal health condition.

✓ Plus, many people, especially the younger generation, like to wear smartwatches because they can use them to do many things such as count steps and monitor their health.

Multiple issues: missing commas for clarity, 'younger generation' needs 'the', 'wear smart' is incomplete — use 'wear smartwatches'. Use base verb 'count' after 'such as' not '-ing'. 'Check and deal health condition' is ungrammatical; replace with 'monitor their health'. Also 'them' refers to watches so use 'their health' for people. This fixes noun choice, verb forms, prepositions and clarity.