Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise, correct grammar (tense and article use), and add one specific supporting detail (e.g., a memory or how long you've been friends). Try to keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes. My longest friend is Roxy — a classmate I met in tenth grade, so we've been close for about six years. We became best friends after we worked on a school project together and discovered we have similar tastes in music and movies.

提案: Avoid fillers and repetition; use more precise verbs and add a specific example of an activity. Keep it to 1–3 sentences and use linking words when listing activities.

例: Usually we hang out and catch up over food. For example, we often go to a café to eat, chat about our studies and watch short videos together.

提案: Remove hesitations and unnecessary repetition, combine ideas with linking words, and give a concise list of typical places with one specific recent example.

例: Most of my friends are from school, so we usually meet on campus between classes. When we go out, we often visit the nearby mall or a café — last weekend we met at a café to study and grab lunch.

提案: Clarify frequency and contrast between term time and holidays more smoothly; avoid filler words and awkward phrasing. Use linking words to show contrast and give a brief reason.

例: Yes, we go out often during school terms because we see each other daily and plan hangouts. However, during vacations I usually stay home to rest and recharge, so I meet friends less frequently then.

提案: Make the statement more direct and concise, correct awkward phrasing, and add a brief specific reason or example showing how friends motivate you. Avoid informal words like 'stuffs.'

例: Friends are very important to me because they motivate me and make activities enjoyable. For example, when I'm studying for exams, studying with friends keeps me focused and encourages me to keep going.

提案: Be clearer and fix grammar; avoid repeating 'really.' State preference and give a concise reason and one contrasting example for groups. Keep sentences short and precise.

例: I prefer spending time with one friend because it feels more intimate and we can have deeper conversations. I also enjoy small groups of two or three people for lively activities, but I avoid large groups because they can be noisy.

提案: Be more natural and concise; remove redundancy and provide a specific example of what you do when friends visit (e.g., watch movies or cook).

例: Absolutely — my home is a common hangout for my friends. We often watch movies, cook dinner together, or play board games when they come over.

提案: Clarify the time contrast and fix unclear phrasing; use linking words to show change and give a specific reason for the shift (e.g., convenience or comfort). Keep it concise.

例: Yes. In the past we mainly met at malls or parks, but now we prefer meeting at home to watch movies and relax because it's more comfortable and cheaper.

提案: Answer more directly and use clearer examples of factors that make a place suitable (noise level, price, convenience). Use linking words and one short example to support your point.

例: Some places suit group meetups better because of factors like noise level, cost and convenience. For instance, a quiet café is suitable for conversations, while a loud club is not if you want to talk.

× Roxy is a classmate that I met in my 10th grade and gradually we have became best friends.

✓ Roxy is a classmate that I met in 10th grade and gradually we have become best friends.

The error is using 'became' after 'have'. With present perfect you must use the past participle 'become' not the simple past 'became'. Use 'have become' to show an action or change that started in the past and continues to the present. Also omit the article 'my' before grade: say 'in 10th grade.'

× Usually I just spend my time hanging out with them with activities such as eating and yapping and just umm, catching up with each each other's life.

✓ Usually I just spend time hanging out with them doing activities such as eating, chatting and catching up with each other's lives.

Redundant 'my time' and incorrect preposition 'with activities'—use 'doing activities'. 'Yapping' is informal and 'chatting' is more natural. Also 'each each other's life' is duplicated and singular 'life' should be plural 'lives' when referring to multiple people. Remove filler words like 'umm.'

× So my friends are usually the people that I have met in my school.

✓ So my friends are usually the people whom I met at school.

Use the preposition 'at' with 'school' for location: 'met at school.' 'That' can be replaced by 'whom' for people in formal correction; 'my school' is acceptable but 'at school' is more natural here. Also 'have met' is unnecessary for a specific past meeting—simple past 'met' is preferred.

× So most of the time we just spend it umm hanging out in the school.

✓ So most of the time we just spend it hanging out at school.

Use 'at school' rather than 'in the school' for everyday activities. Remove filler 'umm.' The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary but can remain conversational; better: 'we just spend most of the time hanging out at school.'

× But when we have the free time to go out, we go to the malls, we umm eat, we go to the cafes and fast food restaurant to talk with each other.

✓ But when we have free time to go out, we go to the malls, eat, and go to cafes and fast-food restaurants to talk with each other.

Use plural 'restaurants' to match 'malls' and 'fast-food' needs a hyphen in compound adjective. Remove unnecessary 'the' before 'free time' and filler 'umm.' Also coordinate verbs cleanly: 'we go to the malls, eat, and go to cafes...'

× Yes, we often hang out, especially when we have our school days because that is the time that we are active and constantly asking each other for Hangouts.

✓ Yes, we often hang out, especially during the school term because that is when we are active and constantly asking each other to hang out.

Use 'during the school term' or 'during school days' for time expression. 'Asking each other for Hangouts' is ungrammatical; use the infinitive 'to hang out.' Capitalization of 'Hangouts' is unnecessary. This corrects verb form and phrasing.

× But whenever there's a vacation, there's a break in school. I try my best to just, umm, regain my energy and relax in home.

✓ But whenever there is a vacation and a break from school, I try my best to regain my energy and relax at home.

Use 'break from school' rather than 'break in school.' For the place 'home' use preposition 'at home' not 'in home.' Remove filler 'umm' and unnecessary 'just.'

× Since I was young, I'm really vocal into saying that friends are really significant or necessary for you to have a motivation in life because when you have friends to do things with, you often enjoy things and not just do them and you find motivations to go through those stuffs.

✓ Since I was young, I have often said that friends are important and necessary to give you motivation in life because when you have friends to do things with, you enjoy them more and find motivation to get through those things.

'Vocal into saying' is incorrect; use 'have said' or 'often said.' 'To have a motivation' should be 'to give you motivation' or 'to motivate you.' 'Motivations' and 'stuffs' are vague—use 'motivation' and 'things.' 'Not just do them' is awkward—rephrase to 'you enjoy them more.' Also adjust tense to present perfect for a repeated action from past to present.

× I prefer hanging out with one friend only at a time because it really creates a bond that is really direct and more intimate.

✓ I prefer hanging out with one friend at a time because it creates a more direct and intimate bond.

Redundant 'only' and 'really' should be reduced. Word order: 'at a time' follows 'one friend.' 'More direct and intimate' is a smoother adjective order.

× But I really enjoy group of friends too. But I just usually do that when there are around 2 to 3 people and that's your care.

✓ But I also enjoy groups of friends; I usually do that when there are around two or three people and when we care for each other.

Use plural 'groups of friends.' Spell out small numbers in speech-level writing: 'two or three.' The phrase 'that's your care' is unclear; likely meant 'when we care for each other' or 'when we get along.' Clarify meaning.

× Oh absolutely. Actually my home is kind of the hangout place for my friends as I really invite them and offer them time to be in my home to spend the time and enjoy things together in my place.

✓ Oh absolutely. My home is kind of a hangout place for my friends; I often invite them to spend time and enjoy things together at my place.

Use article 'a hangout place.' 'Offer them time to be in my home' is unnatural—use 'invite them to spend time.' Use 'at my place' not 'in my place.' Simplify and avoid repetition.

× Before I really prepare, going out with my friends in the malls or parks or something that is just pleasant.

✓ Before, I used to enjoy going out with my friends to malls or parks or other pleasant places.

Original lacks a main verb and mixes tenses. Use 'used to' to describe past habitual actions. 'Going out with my friends in the malls' should be 'going out with my friends to malls.' Clarify and complete the sentence.

× But now I have realized that being at home, watching movies together, eating together, catching up is something that I prepare more than just than hanging out outside.

✓ But now I realize that being at home—watching movies together, eating together and catching up—is something I prefer more than just hanging out outside.

Use present simple 'I realize' for current state. 'Is something that I prepare' is incorrect; use 'I prefer.' Remove duplicate 'than.' Use consistent verb forms in the list and hyphens or commas to set off the list.

× In my opinion, it is because you are a group of people who have different preferences and opinions in places that you want to be in.

✓ In my opinion, it is because the group has different preferences and opinions about the places they want to go to.

Awkward subject 'you are a group of people' in this context—better to refer to 'the group' or 'people.' Use 'preferences about places' or 'preferences for places' and 'go to' rather than 'be in.' Improve clarity and naturalness.

× So when we gather opinions on where to hang out, of course there will be gaps and opinions that may differ from each other.

✓ So when we gather opinions on where to hang out, there will of course be disagreements and different preferences among us.

'Gaps and opinions that may differ from each other' is awkward. Use 'disagreements' or 'different preferences among us.' Move 'of course' to a natural position. Improves clarity and idiomatic phrasing.