Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence stating how long you have known the friend, then add one or two specific details (how you met, what makes them reliable). Avoid filler sounds and incomplete sentences.

例: Yes. I have known my best friend Sarah for 18 years. We met at primary school, and she has always been reliable — she supports me during stressful times and keeps her promises.

提案: Organize the answer: give a topic sentence about usual activities, then use linking words to add specific examples. Reduce pauses and repeat words. Use varied verbs and describe why you enjoy these activities.

例: We usually get together to catch up. For example, we often go for walks during the week, and at weekends we watch movies or listen to music, which I enjoy because it helps us relax and share opinions.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence about frequency and places. Use linking words (however, whereas) and avoid hesitations. Clarify the locations where you meet and give a brief reason for the difference in frequency.

例: I meet my best friend Sarah twice a week, usually at a nearby café or at one of our homes. However, I see other friends only about twice a month because they live further away.

提案: Start with a clear statement (yes/no) then explain why. Replace repetitive phrases and finish sentences. Give specific examples of activities and say why you enjoy them.

例: Yes, I often go out with my friends because my best friend lives nearby. We usually grab coffee, go for drives while listening to music, and I enjoy it because it helps me unwind.

提案: Give a direct opinion followed by two clear reasons with examples. Avoid unclear phrases and filler. Use correct grammar (important in everyone’s life) and explain how friends help (emotional support, practical help).

例: Friends are very important in everyone’s life because they offer emotional support when you are stressed and practical help when you face problems. For example, my friend Sarah helped me prepare for a difficult exam by reviewing materials with me.

提案: State your preference clearly and give two concise reasons using linking words (because, so). Avoid negative or vague statements like 'may be boring' without explanation. Provide a short example of when you preferred one-on-one time.

例: I prefer spending time with one friend because it’s easier to have deep conversations and I can confide in them. For instance, I often meet Sarah for coffee when I need to talk about personal issues.

提案: Answer directly and use linking words to explain timing and activities. Remove hesitations and correct grammar (on weekends). Be specific about activities and why you enjoy hosting.

例: Yes, I invite friends to my home on weekends because we’re busy during the week. We usually play board games, watch movies, and cook together, which makes the weekend enjoyable.

提案: Give a clear yes/no answer and then explain briefly with specific examples and a linking phrase (for example, or because). Remove filler words and make the sentence structure more natural.

例: No, I don’t think it has changed. I still usually meet friends in cafés or at each other’s homes, which has been the pattern since we were younger.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence about what makes a place suitable, then give two specific reasons using linking words (because, so). Avoid repetitive hesitations and use precise vocabulary (noisy, distracting).

例: A quiet café is a suitable place to meet because it’s relaxing and allows you to have conversations. I avoid busy cafés because they’re noisy and the loud music makes it hard to hear each other.

× Uh, yes, I have a friend that, uh, I have known her, uh, for uh, 18 years old, uh, 18 years, uh, her name is Sarah.

✓ Yes, I have a friend whom I have known for 18 years; her name is Sarah.

The student uses redundant and incorrect pronouns: 'a friend that, I have known her' repeats the object. Also '18 years old' is wrong in this clause. Use a relative pronoun 'whom' (or 'that') without repeating 'her' and express duration as 'for 18 years'. Suggestion: say 'a friend whom I have known for 18 years' or 'a friend I have known for 18 years.'

× She is a very reliable and I.

✓ She is very reliable and loyal.

The sentence ends with 'and I' which is incomplete and incorrect. The student likely intended to join two adjectives describing the friend. Replace with two adjectives like 'reliable and loyal'. Ensure parallel structure: 'She is X and Y.'

× I usually, I usually get together for catching up.

✓ I usually get together to catch up.

Incorrect use of 'for catching up'. After 'get together' use an infinitive 'to catch up' or a gerund without 'for' in different structure. 'Get together to catch up' is natural. Suggestion: use 'to catch up' after 'get together.'

× sometimes we go out for a walk and on the weekends, uh, we watch movies and uh, listening to music, uh, and it's really funny and interesting for me.

✓ Sometimes we go out for a walk, and on weekends we watch movies and listen to music; it's really fun and interesting for me.

Mixed verb forms: 'watch movies and listening to music' lacks parallelism. Use parallel verbs 'watch' and 'listen'. 'Funny' is not the best collocation for activities; 'fun' is preferable. Remove filler words and unnecessary commas. Suggestion: keep verbs in the same form and use 'fun'.

× Umm, actually I, uh, meet my, uh, best friend twice a week, but about other friends, uh, I, uh, meet them uh, twice a month.

✓ Actually, I meet my best friend twice a week, but I meet my other friends twice a month.

Awkward word order and repetition. 'About other friends' is unnatural; use 'my other friends'. Simplify by removing fillers and keep present simple for habitual actions. Suggestion: state frequency clearly: 'I meet my best friend twice a week; my other friends, twice a month.'

× Uh, it's uh, Sarah is uh, one of my best friend and I like to take spend more time.

✓ Sarah is one of my best friends and I like to spend more time with her.

'One of my best friend' should be plural 'friends'. 'Take spend' is incorrect — choose 'spend'. Also add 'with her' to complete the idea. Suggestion: ensure noun number agreement and correct verb choice: 'spend time with her.'

× I usually go out with my friends because my best friend is nearby so is nearby me so we go out for a coffee and driving and listening to music and I find it enjoyable and.

✓ I usually go out with my friends because my best friend lives nearby, so we go out for coffee, drive around, and listen to music; I find it enjoyable.

Redundant 'is nearby so is nearby me' and incorrect phrasing 'go out for a coffee and driving and listening'. Use concise clauses: 'lives nearby', 'go out for coffee', 'drive around', 'listen to music'. Remove trailing 'and'. Suggestion: keep parallel verbs and concise connectors.

× I think a good friend is a more important in everybody life because friends can help you in teach and teen teen and teach situations and you can trust them when you are stressed and they can help.

✓ I think a good friend is very important in everyone's life because friends can help you in difficult situations and you can trust them when you are stressed.

'A more important' is incorrect; use 'very important' or 'more important than...'. 'Everybody life' should be 'everyone's life'. 'Teach and teen teen and teach situations' is unintelligible — likely meant 'difficult' or 'tough' situations. Remove repetition and choose appropriate adjectives. Suggestion: use 'important', possessive 'everyone's', and a clear adjective like 'difficult' for situations.

× I prefer to spend time with one friend. I think, uh, spending time with, uh, a group of friends, uh, may be boring and uh, uh, I think I uh, like to be with one of my friends and I can confide in my best.

✓ I prefer to spend time with one friend. I think spending time with a group of friends can be boring, and I prefer being with one friend because I can confide in my best friend.

Fragment 'I can confide in my best' missing noun 'friend'. 'May be boring' is acceptable but 'can be boring' is more natural. Remove fillers and repeat phrases. Ensure sentences are complete and logical. Suggestion: finish thoughts fully and avoid leaving nouns out.

× Yes, uh, I would uh, invite friends, uh, to my home, uh, on a weekends because uh, in, during the weeks, uh, we are too busy and we can't meet each other on weekends we get together and uh, play some games and uh, watching movies. It's enjoy.

✓ Yes, I would invite friends to my home on weekends because during the week we are too busy. On weekends we get together, play some games, and watch movies. It's enjoyable.

'On a weekends' incorrect article and number — use 'on weekends' or 'on a weekend'. 'During the weeks' should be 'during the week'. Mixed verb forms: 'play some games and watching movies' needs parallel 'play' and 'watch'. 'It's enjoy' should be 'It's enjoyable' or 'I enjoy it'. Suggestion: use correct time expressions and parallel verb forms.

× Uh, no, I think there is a no difference.

✓ No, I think there is no difference.

Incorrect insertion of 'a' before 'no difference'. The correct phrase is 'no difference' or 'not a difference'. Remove 'a'. Suggestion: say 'there is no difference'.

× Uh, I, uh, usually meet my friends, uh, in cafe or restaurant and usually at our home, our homes, yeah, it never changed, uh, for us and uh, it's the same.

✓ I usually meet my friends in cafes or restaurants and usually at our homes; it has never changed for us.

Use plural 'cafes' and 'restaurants' when speaking generally. 'Our home, our homes' confusing — use 'our homes'. Verb 'it never changed' should be present perfect 'it has never changed' for a continuing state. Suggestion: use plurals for general statements and correct tense for ongoing situations.

× I think a quiet cafe is more uh, re relaxing and uh, peaceful for uh, meeting your friends.

✓ I think a quiet cafe is more relaxing and peaceful for meeting friends.

Typo 're relaxing' should be 'relaxing'. 'Meeting your friends' is acceptable but 'meeting friends' is more natural in this context. Remove fillers. Suggestion: correct spelling and streamline the phrase.

× Uh, I don't like uh, to meet my friends in some busy cafes because uh, we uh, can't uh, to listen to each other and the music plays.

✓ I don't like to meet my friends in busy cafes because we can't hear each other when loud music is playing.

Incorrect use of infinitive 'can't to listen' — should be 'can't listen' or better 'can't hear each other'. 'The music plays' is awkward; use 'when loud music is playing' or 'because of loud music'. Suggestion: use 'can't hear each other' and 'when loud music is playing' for clarity.