Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity.

例: Yes, I have several friends I've known for a long time. However, due to communication issues and moving to different cities, I have lost touch with many of them.

提案: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and complete sentences. Be specific about the activities you do and avoid incomplete or unclear phrases.

例: Usually, my friends and I go to cafes or restaurants. Additionally, we often go to the gym together because we enjoy staying active.

提案: Improve clarity and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Be specific about the meeting places and correct unclear words or phrases.

例: Since we all live in different parts of the city, we usually meet in the city center or at a friend's house. This way, it's convenient for everyone to get together.

提案: Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide a clear, concise answer. Correct grammar and pronunciation issues for better clarity.

例: Not really. These days, my friends and I are busy with work and personal commitments, so we don't go out often. However, we stay in touch online and try to meet up occasionally.

提案: Improve sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

例: Friends are very important to me because they provide support when I need it and someone to talk to. Good friends make difficult times easier and happy moments even better. Therefore, having a strong circle of friends is essential for mental and emotional well-being.

提案: Make your answer clearer and more structured. Use linking words to explain your preferences and avoid incomplete sentences. Be specific about situations when you prefer one or the other.

例: I prefer both, depending on my mood. When I'm going through a difficult time, I like to spend time with one close friend to talk. Otherwise, I enjoy hanging out with a group of friends for fun activities.

提案: Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use complete sentences and be specific about what you do when friends visit. Make your answer more natural and effective.

例: Yes, I usually invite my friends to my home on weekends. We often watch movies together or just hang out and chat.

× Yes, I do have a lot of friends that I known for a long time, but most of my friends I actually end up not on touch with them because you know, communication issues and move to another city and things like that.

✓ Yes, I do have a lot of friends that I have known for a long time, but most of my friends I actually end up not in touch with them because, you know, communication issues and moving to another city and things like that.

The verb 'known' is the past participle and needs an auxiliary verb 'have' to form the present perfect tense 'have known' to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present. Also, 'end up not on touch' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'end up not in touch'. Additionally, 'move' should be 'moving' to maintain parallel structure after 'because'. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× most of my friends I actually end up not on touch with them

✓ most of my friends I actually end up not in touch with them

The correct preposition to use with 'in touch' is 'in', not 'on'. The phrase 'in touch' means maintaining communication, so 'not in touch' is the correct expression.

× We actually go to cafes, restaurants, but we usually hit the gym a However we love activities like meet up activities so that's what usually we do.

✓ We actually go to cafes and restaurants, but we usually hit the gym. However, we love activities like meet-up events, so that's usually what we do.

The original sentence has run-on issues and incorrect conjunction use. 'Cafes, restaurants, but' should be 'cafes and restaurants, but' to connect items properly. Also, 'a However' is incorrect; it should be a period followed by 'However,' to start a new sentence. 'Meet up activities' is better expressed as 'meet-up events' for clarity.

× We actually meet at the middle of the city.

✓ We actually meet in the middle of the city.

The correct preposition with 'middle' is 'in', not 'at'. 'In the middle of the city' indicates a location within the city center.

× Because each one of us live across the city, so we meet at the middle of the city, a friend house or in a boric so we can go together and have a good car rights.

✓ Because each one of us lives across the city, we meet in the middle of the city, at a friend's house or in a bar so we can go together and have a good night out.

The subject 'each one' is singular, so the verb should be 'lives' (singular). 'A friend house' should be 'a friend's house' to show possession. 'In a boric' is likely a typo for 'in a bar'. 'Have a good car rights' is incorrect; the intended phrase is probably 'have a good night out' or 'have a good time'.

× Not really, to be honest, I don't go out with my friends very often these days because we are all quite busy with the work and the personal commitments.

✓ Not really, to be honest, I don't go out with my friends very often these days because we are all quite busy with work and personal commitments.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before uncountable nouns like 'work' and plural nouns like 'personal commitments' when speaking generally. Removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural.

× We still stay in touch online. Anne. Anne. We try to meet up every once in awhile, but it's not as frequent as it you.

✓ We still stay in touch online. And we try to meet up every once in a while, but it's not as frequent as it used to be.

'Anne. Anne.' seems to be a mishearing or typo and should be 'And'. 'Every once in awhile' should be 'every once in a while' (two words). 'As frequent as it you' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'as frequent as it used to be' to indicate past frequency.

× Friends are very important to me. There are people I can rely on. When I need support or just someone to talk too.

✓ Friends are very important to me. They are people I can rely on when I need support or just someone to talk to.

'There are people' is vague; 'They are people' refers back to 'Friends' clearly. 'Talk too' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'talk to'.

× Good friends can make and a difficult time easier an happy moments even better.

✓ Good friends can make a difficult time easier and happy moments even better.

The phrase 'and a difficult time' is incorrect; it should be 'a difficult time'. Also, 'an happy moments' should be 'and happy moments'. The conjunctions and articles were misplaced, affecting clarity.

× I think having a strong circle of a friends as an essential for both mental and emotional well-being.

✓ I think having a strong circle of friends is essential for both mental and emotional well-being.

The article 'a' before 'friends' is incorrect because 'friends' is plural. Also, 'as an essential' should be 'is essential' to correctly link the subject and predicate.

× I prefer both, but it depends on the time. It depends on my mood, but usually go with the one friend when I'm having a difficult time or there is something that I want to talk to. But with the other than that I would go with the whole group. But it's. It said.

✓ I prefer both, but it depends on the time and my mood. I usually go with one friend when I'm having a difficult time or there is something I want to talk about. Otherwise, I would go with the whole group. But it's said.

The original sentences have incomplete and fragmented structures. 'Usually go with the one friend' lacks a subject. 'Something that I want to talk to' should be 'something I want to talk about'. 'With the other than that' is unclear; 'Otherwise' is better. 'But it's. It said.' is incomplete and unclear.

× Yes, usually on the weekend I love to invite my friends at my home to shut up to watching a movie or something.

✓ Yes, usually on the weekend I love to invite my friends to my home to hang out, watch a movie, or something like that.

The preposition 'at' should be 'to' when inviting someone to a place. 'Shut up' is incorrect here; the correct phrase is 'hang out'. 'To watching' should be 'to watch' to maintain parallel verb forms.