Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và câu bị ngắt quãng. Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể và liên kết các ý bằng từ nối để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: Yes, I have a best friend whom I have known since high school. We get along very well because we share many common interests. I like her because she is friendly, kind, and always willing to help others.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời câu hỏi một cách mạch lạc, tránh câu bị ngắt quãng và lỗi ngữ pháp. Sử dụng từ nối để liên kết các ý và diễn đạt rõ ràng hơn về hoạt động bạn thường làm với bạn bè.

例: In the past, we usually went to a cafe near my house to catch up on our personal lives. However, now that she lives in Australia, we mostly keep in touch through social media.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng từ vựng phong phú hơn và tránh lặp lại ý. Hãy cố gắng sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: We often met at a cozy cafe near our house, which was perfect for relaxing and having long conversations. Nowadays, since we can't meet in person, we stay connected through social media to maintain our friendship despite the distance.

提案: Bạn nên tránh nói quá dài dòng và lặp lại ý. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

例: Currently, I don't often go out with my friends because one of my closest friends lives in Australia. Therefore, we mainly communicate through social media.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ chính xác hơn. Bạn nên sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tự nhiên hơn.

例: Friends are very important to me because, as an introvert, I don't often share my feelings with many people. However, I have a close friend who helps me express my emotions and supports me when I need it. Their presence makes me feel understood and less lonely.

提案: Bạn nên tránh câu bị ngắt quãng và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh. Hãy dùng từ nối để liên kết các ý và diễn đạt rõ ràng hơn về lý do bạn thích dành thời gian với một người bạn.

例: I prefer spending time with one friend rather than a group because I find it easier to express my emotions and feelings when I'm with someone close, rather than in a large group.

提案: Câu trả lời cần được sắp xếp lại cho mạch lạc, tránh lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp và giải thích rõ lý do một cách ngắn gọn, sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: At the moment, I don't invite friends to my home because I live with my extended family and in-laws, which makes it inconvenient. Therefore, I prefer to meet friends at a cafe instead.

× Yes, I have a couple of best friend when known for the very long time.

✓ Yes, I have a couple of best friends whom I have known for a very long time.

The phrase 'a couple of' requires a plural noun, so 'friend' should be 'friends'. Also, 'when known' is incorrect; it should be 'whom I have known' to correctly refer to the friends and the time duration.

× In one of them is the one that started with me in my high school.

✓ One of them is the one who started with me in my high school.

The sentence structure is awkward. 'In one of them is the one' is incorrect. It should be 'One of them is the one who started with me in my high school' to clearly express the meaning.

× She.

✓ She is very friendly, kind, and helpful.

The sentence 'She.' is incomplete and lacks a verb. It should be combined with the following sentence or completed to form a full sentence.

× We get along well with each other than we have.

✓ We get along well with each other.

The phrase 'than we have' is unnecessary and incorrect here. The sentence should simply state 'We get along well with each other.'

× We share a love thing in common.

✓ We share a love for the same things.

The phrase 'a love thing' is incorrect. It should be 'a love for the same things' or 'common interests' to express shared interests properly.

× We're like kindred spirits.

✓ We're like kindred spirits.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× And I like her because she's very friendly, kind and helpful.

✓ I like her because she's very friendly, kind, and helpful.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is informal and unnecessary here. Removing 'And' improves formality and clarity.

× So in the past we usually. Went to the cafe which is our hangout spot near my house to catch up with our personal lives.

✓ In the past, we usually went to the cafe which was our hangout spot near my house to catch up on our personal lives.

The sentence is fragmented and has tense inconsistency. 'Usually went' is past tense and should be together. Also, 'catch up with' should be 'catch up on'.

× Now she is living in Australia so we didn't have much time to speak face to face.

✓ Now she is living in Australia, so we don't have much time to speak face to face.

The first clause is present tense ('is living'), so the second clause should also be present tense ('don't have') for consistency.

× So which is simply mess each other through them Social media ran also comma.

✓ So we simply message each other through social media.

The sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Mess' should be 'message', 'them Social media ran also comma' is incorrect and should be 'through social media'.

× As mentioned earlier, we often used to meet at a small cafe near our house.

✓ As mentioned earlier, we often used to meet at a small cafe near our house.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× It was a great place for us to relax and have the long conversations.

✓ It was a great place for us to relax and have long conversations.

The article 'the' before 'long conversations' is unnecessary and incorrect here.

× However, now today, we don't have any chance to meet face to face, so we usually stay connected through social media.

✓ However, nowadays, we don't have any chance to meet face to face, so we usually stay connected through social media.

'Now today' is redundant and awkward; 'nowadays' is a better adverb to express the current situation.

× This way, we still keep in touch even when we're far apart.

✓ This way, we still keep in touch even when we're far apart.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× At the moment I don't have many opportunities to meet my friends face to face because she is now living in Australia, which is far away, billions in miles aways far away from me, so we usually just keep in touch through the social media platform.

✓ At the moment, I don't have many opportunities to meet my friends face to face because she is now living in Australia, which is far away, billions of miles away from me, so we usually just keep in touch through social media platforms.

'Billions in miles aways far away' is incorrect; it should be 'billions of miles away'. Also, 'the social media platform' should be plural or no article.

× Friends are very important to me because I'm an introvert person.

✓ Friends are very important to me because I'm an introverted person.

The adjective 'introvert' should be 'introverted' to correctly describe a person.

× However, I have to close friend who helps me express my emotions and supports me when I needed it.

✓ However, I have two close friends who help me express my emotions and support me when I need it.

'To close friend' is incorrect; it should be 'two close friends'. Also, verb agreement and tense need correction: 'helps' to 'help', 'supports' to 'support', 'needed' to 'need'.

× Their presence plays a very significant role in my life, making me feel understood and less lonely.

✓ Their presence plays a very significant role in my life, making me feel understood and less lonely.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× I would prefer spending my time with a friend rather than the group of friends because.

✓ I would prefer spending my time with a friend rather than a group of friends because

'The group of friends' should be 'a group of friends' to indicate any group, not a specific one.

× I don't express my emotion and feelings much when I am in the group of a lot of people, so if I have someone like just one person who is close enough for me to share, I would do that.

✓ I don't express my emotions and feelings much when I am in a group of many people, so if I have someone, just one person who is close enough for me to share with, I would do that.

'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions'. 'The group of a lot of people' is awkward; 'a group of many people' is better. Also, 'share' needs 'with' to be correct.

× Not at the moment, because now I'm living in the house with my extended family.

✓ Not at the moment, because now I'm living in a house with my extended family.

'In the house' implies a specific house known to the listener; 'in a house' is more appropriate here.

× And also with my family in laws so it's quite inconvenience for us to meet here.

✓ Also, with my family-in-law, it's quite inconvenient for us to meet here.

'Family in laws' should be 'family-in-law'. 'Inconvenience' is a noun; the adjective 'inconvenient' is needed here.

× In my house, so I would prefer to go to the to the cafe rather than my house as to hang out spot.

✓ So, I would prefer to go to the cafe rather than my house as a hangout spot.

The sentence is fragmented and repetitive. 'To the to the cafe' is incorrect. 'As to hang out spot' should be 'as a hangout spot'.