Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct tense and prepositions. For example, say "I have a friend named Simran whom I have known for five years since school. She is very friendly and hardworking."

例: I have a friend named Simran whom I have known for five years since school. She is very friendly and hardworking, and we have maintained a strong friendship over the years.

提案: Your answer covers activities but has some grammatical mistakes and lacks linking words. Use linking words like 'also' or 'in addition' to connect ideas and correct verb forms. For example, "We usually study together; she helps me with my studies, and I help her with her homework. We also have lunch and play together."

例: We usually study together; she helps me with my studies, and I help her with her homework. We also have lunch and play together, and we support each other when facing problems.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by adding linking words and more details. For example, "We often meet at school, and she also visits my home regularly, which helps us stay close."

例: We often meet at school, and she also visits my home regularly, which helps us stay close and spend quality time together.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Avoid filler words like 'hopefully' and use correct sentence structure. For example, "Yes, I often go out with my friends to watch movies, go shopping, and have lunch in cafes."

例: Yes, I often go out with my friends to watch movies, go shopping, and have lunch together in cafes.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting verb forms and avoiding repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'as well as'. For example, "Friends are very important to me because they guide me towards success and show me the right path."

例: Friends are very important to me because they guide me towards success and show me the right path in life.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Try to give a full sentence with reasons. For example, "I prefer spending time with one friend rather than a group because it allows for deeper conversations and better understanding."

例: I prefer spending time with one friend rather than a group because it allows for deeper conversations and better understanding between us.

提案: Your answer is clear but has subject-verb agreement errors. Use correct verb forms and linking words. For example, "Yes, my friends regularly visit my home, and I also visit theirs often."

例: Yes, my friends regularly visit my home, and I also visit theirs often to spend time together.

× I knew her from along time.

✓ I have known her for a long time.

The sentence refers to a duration from the past until now, so the present perfect tense 'have known' is appropriate instead of simple past 'knew'. Also, 'along time' should be 'a long time'.

× I knew her from along time.

✓ I have known her for a long time.

The preposition 'from' is incorrect here; 'for' is used to indicate duration. Also, 'along time' should be 'a long time'.

× I have been in friendship with her since five years.

✓ I have been friends with her for five years.

The phrase 'in friendship with' is unnatural; 'friends with' is correct. Also, 'since' is used with a point in time, but 'five years' is a duration, so 'for' is correct.

× So she's is the person I knew from along time.

✓ So she is the person I have known for a long time.

Again, present perfect 'have known' is appropriate for a duration continuing to present. Also, 'she's is' is incorrect; it should be 'she is'. 'Along time' should be 'a long time'.

× As she was my school friend, we used to study together.

✓ As she is my school friend, we used to study together.

If the friendship still exists, present tense 'is' is better. 'Used to' correctly indicates past habitual action.

× She helps me in my studies and I helps in her school work as well as homework.

✓ She helps me in my studies and I help her with her school work as well as homework.

The verb 'helps' agrees with 'she', but 'I helps' is incorrect; it should be 'I help'. Also, 'helps in her school work' should be 'help her with her school work'.

× We lunch together, we play together and we talk to each other when we are in trouble.

✓ We have lunch together, play together, and talk to each other when we are in trouble.

'Lunch' is a noun; the verb form is 'have lunch'. Also, parallel structure is improved by removing repeated 'we'.

× We often meet each other in school as well as she visits my home regularly.

✓ We often meet each other at school, and she visits my home regularly.

The correct preposition for school is 'at'. Also, the sentence is better connected with 'and'.

× Yes, I hopefully go out with my friends for. Watching movies Ann as well as we do shopping and in cafes we also lunch together.

✓ Yes, I often go out with my friends to watch movies, and we also go shopping and have lunch together in cafes.

'Hopefully' is incorrectly used; 'often' fits better. 'For watching movies' should be 'to watch movies'. 'Ann' is likely a typo for 'and'. 'Lunch' should be 'have lunch'.

× Friends are very important in every individual's life and my friend is also important in my life because she always teaches me the path of success and she always show me the right path.

✓ Friends are very important in every individual's life, and my friend is also important in my life because she always teaches me the path to success and always shows me the right path.

'Show' should be 'shows' to agree with singular subject 'she'. 'Path of success' is better expressed as 'path to success'.

× Yes, I prefer. Be with a friend, a single friend rather than. A group of friends becaused 1 friend. Because I.

✓ Yes, I prefer to be with a single friend rather than a group of friends because one friend is enough for me.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. They need to be combined into a complete, coherent sentence.

× Yes, my friends regularly visits my home and I also regularly visits their home as well.

✓ Yes, my friends regularly visit my home, and I also regularly visit their homes as well.

'Friends' is plural, so the verb should be 'visit' not 'visits'. Similarly, 'I' takes 'visit' not 'visits'. Also, 'home' should be plural 'homes' when referring to multiple friends.