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提案: 回答不够清晰连贯，语法和词汇错误较多，导致意思难以理解。建议：1) 开门见山给出主题句（Which ad and why it impressed you）；2) 使用一到两句具体细节说明（例如广告内容、人物、情节、你当时的感受）；3) 使用简单的连接词（because, so, and）使逻辑更顺畅；4) 控制在3-4句内，避免冗余。示例词汇：“chocolate cake/brand/character/colourful/animation/impressed”。

例: When I was a child, a cartoon ad for a chocolate brand impressed me because it was very colourful and funny. It showed a cheerful character who saved a cake with magic colours, which made me laugh. I remember feeling excited and wanting to try the chocolate because the ad looked so happy.

提案: 表达含混，句子结构混乱，词汇搭配错误（如“monster”“protection”不合语境）。建议：1) 先给出直接回答（Yes/No + short reason）；2) 用一两句具体举例（types of ads, locations）；3) 使用恰当词汇（commercial ads, posters, promotions, offers, useful information）；4) 注意句子简洁，使用连接词（and, but, so）。

例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains and buses. Most are posters or digital screens promoting products and special offers, which can feel quite commercial. However, they can also be useful because they inform commuters about discounts and new services.

提案: 回答重复且语法错误多，论点模糊。建议：1) 开门见山表明立场（I like/dislike ads and why）；2) 提供1-2个具体理由支持观点（例如干扰、误导信息、也有用处）；3) 用连接词展示对比（although, however）；4) 避免重复和冗长。

例: I don't like most advertisements because they can be intrusive and distracting. Although ads sometimes inform me about good deals, they often interrupt my activities and push unnecessary purchases.

提案: 回答不完整且含混，有语法错误和无关片段（‘what actor I like’）。建议：1) 明确指出喜欢的广告类型并说明原因；2) 给出具体例子或特征（funny, creative, interactive, game trailers）；3) 保持句子简短连贯，避免跑题或犹豫词（uh）。

例: I like advertisements for computer games because they are exciting and creative. For example, a game trailer with dramatic music and colourful scenes makes me curious to try the game.

提案: 表达混乱，信息不明确（‘interrupt my documents’等表述不恰当），句子碎片化。建议：1) 直接回答并说明频率（often, sometimes）；2) 解释在哪些场景看到广告（social media, videos, apps, pop-ups）；3) 提供具体例子（ads between videos, banner ads）；4) 用完整句并用连接词串联信息。

例: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone and computer, especially when I watch videos or browse social media. Video ads usually play between clips, and banner ads appear on the sides of websites, which can be annoying when they interrupt my viewing.

× Yes, when AdMob advertisement that struck me as a child was for a popular chocolate sponge that filled a judge and a cartoon Michaels because it's used to burn colors and the miracle burnt jeans.

✓ Yes. An AdMob advertisement that struck me as a child was for a popular chocolate sponge; it featured a judge and a cartoon character, and showed colorful effects and a miracle that fixed burnt jeans.

句子结构混乱，信息未按逻辑顺序表达，缺少必要的连接词和标点，导致主从句关系不清楚。建议把句子分成更短的句子，明确主语和谓语，并用逗号或分号分隔不同信息，使描述连贯。例如先说明是哪种广告，再描述广告内容和特效。

× Yes, I often notice the monster but my advertisement on Chinese or other public transport which make me commuting feel more but more commercial but also keep me informed about new protection and offers.

✓ Yes, I often notice advertisements on Chinese or other public transport; they make my commute feel more commercial but also keep me informed about new products and offers.

原句语序混乱，出现无意义词（monster）、代词使用不当，动词形式与主语不一致。建议去掉无关词，使用复数'advertisements'与复数动词，修正拼写（protection→products），并用分号或连词连接对比关系。

× From my perspective, it's a big influence with our daily life.

✓ From my perspective, it has a big influence on our daily lives.

动词与主语搭配不当，原句使用 'it's a big influence with' 不地道。应使用动词短语 'has an influence on' 并将 'daily life' 改为复数形式 'daily lives' 更符合习惯表达。

× I think it have it have advantage and disadvantage.

✓ I think it has advantages and disadvantages.

主谓不一致：'it' 应搭配单数动词 'has'；另外重复 'it have' 是错误。还需要将名词改为复数形式 'advantages and disadvantages'。建议简洁表达并检查动词形式。

× I think disadvantage is outweighs advantage.

✓ I think the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.

词序和冠词使用错误。'disadvantage is outweighs advantage' 语法混乱，正确表达为主语复数 'the disadvantages' 加谓语 'outweigh' 再接宾语复数 'the advantages'。注意动词不加's'（pl.主语）。

× So I don't like this advertisement.

✓ So I don't like advertisements.

上下文谈的是广告总体，原句'singular'与上下文不一致。将'singular'改为复数更符合前文关于广告的总体评价。建议根据上下文选择单数或复数。

× In my opinion, I think a computer games advertisement is make me happy.

✓ In my opinion, computer game advertisements make me happy.

句子中多余的 'I think' 与 'In my opinion' 重复；冠词和名词形式错误，应该是复数 'computer game advertisements'，动词应为复数形式 'make' 与复数主语一致。建议删除重复片语并统一数的一致性。

× I can say a. Uh, what actor I like?

✓ I can say which actor I like.

原句断断续续、词序错误。间接疑问句应为 'which actor I like'。建议说完整句并避免口语填充词 'Uh'。

× Yes, I frequently interrupt my documents on phone or computer, especially when the media will watch videos.

✓ Yes, ads frequently interrupt my work on my phone or computer, especially when I watch videos.

原句中'subject-verb'不清晰，'interrupt my documents' 用法不当，时态和主语不匹配。应明确主语 'ads'，并用 'interrupt my work' 或 'interrupt me'，同时把从句改为一般现在时 'when I watch videos'。建议明确主体并使用自然搭配。

× Those perform. Really have your own. For example, taunt the ads often appear between stories.

✓ For example, the ads often appear between stories.

原句包含碎片句 'Those perform. Really have your own.'，无意义且语法错误；'taunt' 可能为拼写错误。建议删去无关碎片，直接给出完整句子 'For example, the ads often appear between stories.'，并注意拼写。