Advertisement— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需更直接且条理清晰。先用一句话概括印象最深的广告是什么（主题/产品），然后给出具体细节（例如广告中有什么场景、角色、为什么印象深刻）。避免重复、填充词（uh, um）并控制在5句内。可用连接词（for example, because）使表达更连贯。

例: One advertisement that stuck with me was for health supplies aimed at elderly people. It featured cute cartoon grandparents dancing together, which made the ad memorable and heartwarming. I remember the cheerful music and bright colors, which created a positive mood. Because it showed real emotions, I felt the product was trustworthy.

提案: 回答要更自然且逻辑更清晰。先直接回答是或否，然后说明原因并举例说明广告如何吸引注意力或影响消费者。避免重复词和语法错误（e.g., 'transportation transports'不必要）。使用连接词如 'because'、'for example'。

例: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on trains and other public transport. These ads often use large images and bold text to catch passengers’ attention, especially during rush hour. For example, a colourful poster for a new phone usually stands out and makes me curious to learn more.

提案: 回答需语法准确且结构完整。先给出总体立场（喜欢/不喜欢/取决于），然后用一两句话说明理由并给例子。避免语法错误（'is'->'are'或省略，'I will really into it'->'I will be really into it'），并删除无意义词。

例: It depends on the advertisement. I enjoy ads that are creative and tell an interesting story because they make me laugh or feel touched. However, I dislike repetitive or boring ads that interrupt what I'm doing.

提案: 回答已较好但可增加具体例子以增强说服力。先给出类型（creative story ads），然后说明原因并举一两个具体例子或场景，使用连接词使句子流畅。保持简洁不超过5句。

例: I like advertisements that tell creative and emotional stories. They often use humour or touching moments to connect with the audience, so I remember the brand afterwards. For example, a short film-style ad that follows a character’s journey can be very effective.

提案: 回答要更准确并改正语法错误。先肯定出现频繁，然后说明具体形式（pop-ups, banner ads, autoplay videos）和它们带来的影响（打扰、降低体验）。避免口头语并用连接词（such as, so）组织句子。

例: Yes, I often see many ads on my phone and computer, such as pop-ups, banner ads and autoplay videos. These ads frequently interrupt my browsing and make the experience frustrating, so I usually use an ad blocker or close them immediately.

× Yes, I can still remember the advertisements from the childhood.

✓ Yes, I can still remember the advertisements from my childhood.

原句中使用了定冠词 "the" 放在 "childhood" 前不自然。英语中通常说 "my childhood" 或者不加冠词说 "childhood"。这里说自己童年经历时用 "my childhood" 更准确。建议：使用 "my childhood" 表示自己的童年。

× Uh, it was about the health, health supplies for the elder and it's ha, there is a, a cute, uh, cartoon, a grandparents, uh, were dancing and the Cathy, uh, advertisement.

✓ Uh, it was about health supplies for the elderly, and there was a cute cartoon of grandparents dancing in the advertisement.

原句存在多个问题："the health" 不需要定冠词且用法不自然；"elder" 用作名词时不正确，应该用形容词短语 "the elderly" 或 "elderly people"；时态和结构上应使用过去式 "there was" 描述以前的广告；"a grandparents" 主谓不一致且重复冠词，应改为 "a cartoon of grandparents"。建议：注意名词搭配（health supplies, the elderly），使用适当的过去时态和正确的名词短语结构。

× I can see the advertisements on trains, uh, or other transportation transports, uh, I think it can improve their products and catch the, uh, audience eyes.

✓ I can see advertisements on trains or other modes of transport. I think they can promote products and catch the audience's eye.

原句有冗余和搭配错误："transportation transports" 重复且不自然，应使用 "modes of transport" 或 "other transport"；"it can improve their products" 主语指代不明，广告不会 "improve products"，应改为 "they can promote products"；"catch the audience eyes" 缺少所有格，应为 "catch the audience's eye"。建议：避免重复词，用正确的所有格和主谓一致。

× I think it depends if the advertisements is creative and interesting I I will really into it.

✓ I think it depends. If the advertisements are creative and interesting, I will really get into them.

原句中主谓不一致：复数名词 "advertisements" 需用复数动词 "are"，不能用 "is"；另外句子结构不完整，缺少连词或标点。"really into it" 表达不完整，应为 "get into them" 表示对广告感兴趣。建议：注意主谓一致，完善句子结构并用正确的动词短语。

× But it's boring and uh durable. I don't like it.

✓ But if it's boring and repetitive, I don't like it.

原句用词不当："durable" 意为耐用的，与广告的描述不符。应使用 "repetitive" 或 "annoying" 来表达广告令人厌烦或重复。建议：选择与语境匹配的形容词。

× I think I like some advertising with creative and interesting stories because it can make me laugh and feel touched.

✓ I think I like advertisements with creative and interesting stories because they can make me laugh and move me.

原句中 "some advertising" 可以，但更自然的是用复数名词 "advertisements" 指多个广告；另外代词指代需与复数一致，"it can" 应为 "they can"；"feel touched" 可改为更自然的表达 "move me"。建议：保持数的一致性并使用更地道的动词短语。

× Yes, when I see the phones or computers, there's all kind of advertisements can skip up and I don't like it because it's, uh, disturbed me.

✓ Yes, when I use my phone or computer, there are all kinds of advertisements that pop up and I don't like it because they disturb me.

原句问题包括："see the phones or computers" 不自然，改为 "use my phone or computer"；"there's all kind" 数不一致，应该是复数 "there are all kinds of advertisements"；"can skip up" 用词错误，常用 "pop up" 表示弹出广告；最后 "it's ... disturbed me" 时态和主谓不一致，改为现在时复数主语 "they disturb me"。建议：注意 there be 句型的数一致，用合适的动词短语和时态。