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提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp hơn ở câu chủ đề, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và chọn từ chính xác; rút ngắn câu để tránh dư thừa; thêm chi tiết cụ thể (tên đồ chơi, cảm xúc) và dùng liên từ hợp lý để nối ý.

例: Yes. When I was a child, toy commercials left the strongest impression on me. In particular, adverts for small toy cars caught my attention because they had catchy music and memorable cartoon characters, which made me want to pretend I was racing the cars. As a result, I often asked my parents to buy those toys.

提案: Cần chỉnh ngữ pháp (số nhiều/không đếm được), sắp xếp câu mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ; bổ sung linking words để làm rõ nơi và loại quảng cáo cụ thể.

例: Yes, definitely. I often see advertisements on trains and buses, especially posters and digital screens on the sides of carriages. Mostly they promote household items and consumer electronics, and occasionally there are full-carriage wraps for big campaigns.

提案: Cần dùng thì nhất quán và sửa lỗi động từ; trả lời ngắn gọn rồi giải thích với lý do cụ thể; tránh ví dụ lộn xộn, nêu kết luận rõ ràng.

例: Not really. I dislike most TV adverts because they interrupt programmes and force me to wait, which is annoying. For example, when I'm watching a drama called "Prague's Boy", frequent ad breaks spoil the mood and disrupt the storyline.

提案: Cần sửa ngữ pháp, loại bỏ lặp từ và hoàn thiện câu chưa kết thúc; đưa ra lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ rõ ràng; dùng linking words để kết nối ý.

例: I prefer fashion and makeup advertisements because I'm interested in beauty products and style tips. For example, I enjoy tutorials that demonstrate how to apply a foundation or create a simple evening look because they give practical ideas I can try.

提案: Cần dùng từ đúng (see/watch), sửa cấu trúc câu bị lỗi, tránh nói lặp và trình bày cảm xúc rõ ràng; nêu cách bạn xử lý quảng cáo để thêm chi tiết cụ thể.

例: Yes, absolutely. I see many ads on my phone and computer when I'm reading articles or watching videos. Pop-up ads and pre-roll video adverts often interrupt my browsing, so I usually pause the video or use an ad blocker to avoid them.

× When I was a child, advertisement for toys and clothes made a strong impression on me.

✓ When I was a child, advertisements for toys and clothes made a strong impression on me.

Use plural 'advertisements' because it refers to many ads in general; singular 'advertisement' is incorrect when speaking about multiple instances.

× I was especially attracted to bright, colourful toy ads for those in toy cars because of the music and characters they used.

✓ I was especially attracted to bright, colourful toy ads showing toy cars because of the music and characters they used.

The phrase 'for those in toy cars' is awkward and unclear; use 'showing toy cars'. No plural error if rephrased; original implied plural but was ungrammatical.

× I often see advertisement on trains and bus, usually for households items and consumer electronics often play on the sides of the carriages.

✓ I often see advertisements on trains and buses, usually for household items, and consumer electronics ads often play on the sides of the carriages.

Use plural 'advertisements' and 'buses' for multiple vehicles; 'household items' is the correct singular form for the noun phrase; added 'ads' to clarify subject for 'play'.

× No, I don't really like advertisement because they did interrupt me when I'm watching television and made me feel frustrated since I have to wait for the program to continue, for example, when I'm watching a drama known as Prague's Boy.

✓ No, I don't really like advertisements because they interrupt me when I'm watching television and make me feel frustrated since I have to wait for the program to continue, for example, when I'm watching a drama called Prague's Boy.

Use plural 'advertisements' and present tense 'interrupt' and 'make' to match habitual action; 'called' is the correct adjective for a title. Avoid 'did interrupt' which wrongly uses past emphatic.

× I prefer fashion and makeup advertisement because I I'm so women I'm interested in beauty products and style tips.

✓ I prefer fashion and makeup advertisements because I'm a woman and I'm interested in beauty products and style tips.

Use plural 'advertisements'; correct pronoun phrase 'I'm a woman' instead of 'I I'm so women'; fix extra 'I' and agreement.

× For example, I I quite fancy watching advert advertisement that show how to use a.

✓ For example, I quite fancy watching adverts that show how to use products.

Use plural 'adverts' and plural verb 'show' to agree; removed duplicate words and incomplete ending; 'products' completes the sentence.

× Yes, absolutely. I say a lot of advertisement on my phone and computer when I'm reading articles or doing research.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I see a lot of advertisements on my phone and computer when I'm reading articles or doing research.

Use 'see' not 'say' and plural 'advertisements' for multiple items.

× I often pop up as a partners in videos on the screen which is really made me feel frustrated.

✓ Pop-up ads often appear as partners in videos on the screen, which really makes me feel frustrated.

Original sentence had incorrect subject and verb structure; 'pop-up ads' is the noun subject that 'appear'; 'which makes me feel' uses correct present tense and agreement; 'partners' is unclear but preserved as in original context.