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提案: 句子结构较为简单且有语法错误，表达不够连贯具体。建议用一到两句直接回应，再用一两句具体描述广告内容和你当时的感受，使用连接词如“because”或“which”。注意冠词和时态，减少重复词汇。

例: A public-service ad about environmental protection impressed me when I was a child. It showed animals losing their homes because of pollution, and the sad music made the message very powerful, so I still remember it clearly.

提案: 回答有用词和语法错误，句子不够清晰具体。建议直接说“yes”并给一两个清晰具体的例子，用正确的词语搭配（例如 “see a lot of advertisements” 和 “an educational service ad”），并用连接词如 “for example” 或 “such as”。

例: Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on the subway. For example, I often notice educational service ads encouraging parents to support children's development, which usually include bright images and contact information.

提案: 表达混乱且有多处语法错误，未能清晰说明原因与例子。建议先给出明确立场，再用一两条具体理由并用连接词（because, however）对比不同情况。注意主谓一致和词形变化。

例: I don't really like most advertisements because they are noisy and interrupt me when I'm concentrating. However, some ads are informative and well-made, so I don't dislike all of them.

提案: 回答有大量口头语填充，内容重复且不够具体。建议去掉“uh”等口头语，使用一两句清晰说明偏好并给出具体原因或例子，使用连接词如 “because” 或 “so”。

例: I prefer public-service advertisements because they are often creative and emotional. For example, an ad showing endangered animals can be very moving and encourage people to act.

提案: 句子有明显语法与词汇错误，表达不清。建议先肯定看到广告的情况，然后具体说明出现的形式（pop-ups, pre-roll ads）和你的感受，使用连词如 “because” 或 “so”。注意词汇选择（e.g., stressful, pop up）。

例: Yes, I often see ads on my phone and computer because I watch videos online and many platforms play pre-roll or pop-up ads. They can be noisy and stressful, especially when I'm trying to focus.

× When I was a child, I saw a public service advertisement about Environmental Protection that left a strong impression on me. That showed the message of animals losing their homes because of pollution and emotional music made a message very powerful.

✓ When I was a child, I saw a public service advertisement about environmental protection that left a strong impression on me. It showed the message that animals were losing their homes because of pollution, and the emotional music made the message very powerful.

该句需要使用过去时描述过去发生的事情：原句中第二句的主语用“That showed...”可以更自然地用“It showed...”，并且需要补全从句“the message that animals were losing their homes”以表达完整意思。还要在并列部分补上定冠词“the”并用过去进行/过去完成的结构表达“因污染失去栖息地”的持续或发生在过去的动作，故将“losing”前加“were”。另外将“Environmental Protection”小写为“environmental protection”更符合常规名词短语书写。建议在叙述过去事件时统一使用过去时态并补全从句。

× Yes, I often say a lot of advertisements on the subway. For example, I saw a educational service advertisement to protect help children development.

✓ Yes, I often see a lot of advertisements on the subway. For example, I saw an educational service advertisement that aimed to help children's development.

第一句描述经常发生的动作应使用一般现在时，动词应为“see”而不是“say”。第二句中冠词使用错误，‘a educational’应为“an educational”。原句中不定式短语‘to protect help children development’结构混乱，需改为定语从句或不定式目的结构，这里用“that aimed to help children's development”更清晰。注意名词所有格“children's development”。

× I dislike advertisement because some advertisement very noisy and often discard me when I was when I focus on doing something, but some advertisement is.

✓ I dislike advertisements because some advertisements are very noisy and often distract me when I am focusing on something, but some advertisements are okay.

原句中冠词/复数使用错误：应使用复数“advertisements”表示一般情况。谓语缺失，需在“some advertisements very noisy”中加be动词“are”。动词“discard”用错，正确应为“distract”（分散注意力）。时间和进行时也需要改为“when I am focusing on something”。末尾不完整的句子“but some advertisement is.”应改为完整表达“but some advertisements are okay.” 建议注意名词单复数、be动词以及动词选择。

× I like, uh, public service advertisement because they have, uh, they usually have, uh, creativity and, uh, often made me feel, uh, strong and, uh, uh, sometimes, uh, with that.

✓ I like public service advertisements because they usually have creativity and often make me feel strongly moved sometimes.

需要将“advertisement”改为复数“advertisements”以表示一般喜好，并且不要重复多余的填充词。动词时态和形式应为一般现在时“make”而不是过去式“made”。“feel strong”搭配不当，应为“feel strongly moved”或“feel moved”。原句结构混乱，应简化为清晰的主谓宾结构并使用正确的副词形式。建议练习用简单的句子表达观点，避免赘词。

× Yes, I often see advertisements on my because I usually grow some videos and have advertisement will get up. It's very noisy and stress.

✓ Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone because I usually watch some videos and advertisements pop up. It's very noisy and stressful.

原句中缺失名词“phone”。动词“grow some videos”用错，应为“watch videos”。“have advertisement will get up”语序和用词错误，改为“advertisements pop up”更自然。最后一句中“stress”应为形容词“stressful”来修饰情形。注意主谓结构和词性转换（动词/名词/形容词）。