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提案: 回答不够连贯，表达不清晰，缺乏具体细节和逻辑连接词。建议练习用简单明了的句子描述广告内容和印象，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: When I was a child, I was impressed by a chocolate advertisement on TV. The colors were very bright and attractive, which made me want to try the chocolate. I even asked my mother to buy it for me because it looked so delicious.

提案: 回答内容不完整且含糊，缺乏具体信息和逻辑。建议直接回答问题，并用具体例子说明在交通工具上看到的广告类型。

例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains and buses. Most of them are about food and mobile apps, which catch my attention during the commute.

提案: 回答表达不清，语法和词汇使用不准确。建议明确表达喜欢或不喜欢广告的原因，并举例说明。

例: I like some advertisements because they introduce useful products and apps. However, I ignore ads that are not related to my interests.

提案: 回答不连贯且含糊，缺乏具体内容。建议明确说明喜欢的广告类型，并解释原因。

例: I like food advertisements because they show delicious dishes. When I see these ads in shopping malls, I often want to try the food they promote.

提案: 回答混乱且难以理解，缺乏逻辑和具体细节。建议练习用简单句子描述在手机或电脑上看到广告的情况。

例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on my phone when I use different apps. Some ads are interesting, but others can be annoying.

× CS is on gumbo chocolate on TV.

✓ There was a Gumbo chocolate advertisement on TV.

原句结构混乱，缺少主语和谓语，导致句子不完整。应补充完整句子结构，使表达清晰。

× Why was a child into personal art?

✓ Why was I interested in personal art as a child?

句子结构不正确，缺少主语且表达不清晰。应明确主语和表达意图。

× Plus, uh, it's your, uh, very beautiful color space and uh, I asked my mom to die if it was.

✓ Plus, it had very beautiful colors, and I asked my mom if it was real.

代词使用错误，且句子含义不明确。应使用正确代词并调整句子使其通顺。

× Well, it is there so I, I love it.

✓ Well, it was there, so I loved it.

使用了错误的时态和there be结构，应根据上下文使用正确时态。

× Yes, I see the FYE uh, uh, uh, please stop it because there are lots of uh food and uh apps uh, to feed on your sapphire and also the.

✓ Yes, I see many advertisements for food and apps on trains and other transport.

原句中名词单复数使用不当，且句子不完整，应调整为正确的复数形式并补全句子。

× I think, uh, probably yes, because, uh, there are many, uh, good advertisements.

✓ I think probably yes, because there are many good advertisements.

句子中多余的填充词影响流畅，应简化句子结构。

× Uh, it makes me know, uh, more gluten or useful apps, but also some, uh, unused for apps.

✓ They help me learn about more useful apps, but also some apps that I don't use.

代词使用不当，且表达不清晰，应使用正确代词并调整句子结构。

× Uh, it's, it's, uh, it ignores me.

✓ Some advertisements ignore me.

句子结构混乱，缺少主语，需调整为完整句子。

× I think I like your food actualizes plus, uh, I, I don't, I, uh, I obviously don't know.

✓ I think I like food advertisements, but I don't really know much about them.

句子结构混乱，表达不清晰，应调整为完整且通顺的句子。

× Uh, uh, let's see each, uh, what's it either shopping mall and I see your advisor.

✓ For example, when I go to a shopping mall and see advertisements, I will go there and enjoy it.

句子结构不完整且表达混乱，应补充完整并理顺句意。

× Yes, I always say you're a surviving on my phone.

✓ Yes, I always see advertisements on my phone.

代词使用错误，且单词拼写错误，应使用正确代词和单词。

× So why open our apps or your apps, your local apps rising, uh, on your on your own age and you know why?

✓ So when I open apps, local ads appear on my screen, and you know why?

介词使用错误，句子不通顺，应调整介词和句子结构。

× What's your the age? What's film or something? They are awful.

✓ What is the ad about? Is it a film or something? They are awful.

句子结构混乱，缺少主语和谓语，应补充完整句子使其通顺。