Advertisement— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise, and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, there was a toy advertisement with a catchy song that stuck in my mind when I was a child. I really wanted to have that toy because the ad was very memorable.

提案: Your answer is good but contains some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use correct plural forms and articles, and link your ideas more smoothly. Also, try to be more specific about the types of advertisements.

例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains and other forms of transport. For example, colorful posters are stuck on the walls, and digital screens display new services or products, which makes the journey more interesting.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical errors and unclear expressions. Avoid vague words like 'February video' and use correct verb forms. Explain your opinion clearly with specific reasons.

例: No, I don't like advertisements because they often interrupt my videos, songs, or events, which annoys me.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes. Clarify what you mean by 'funding advertising' and use proper sentence structures. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

例: I like funny advertisements because they help me relax and unwind. I often share them with my friends and discuss them together.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Explain your opinion with specific details and link your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I often see advertisements when I watch videos on my phone or computer. These ads usually interrupt the videos, which annoys me, so I think they are a bad thing.

× Yes, there is a toy advertisement when I was young with a funny song and it can it couldn't get out, get out of my head.

✓ Yes, there was a toy advertisement when I was young with a funny song and it couldn't get out of my head.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'is' instead of 'was' to refer to a past event, which is a tense issue (present vs past). Also, 'can it couldn't' is redundant and incorrect; 'couldn't' alone is correct. The verb 'is' should be changed to 'was' to match the past time frame, and the redundant modal verb 'can' should be removed.

× I still want to get one at that time.

✓ I still wanted to get one at that time.

The phrase 'at that time' indicates a past time frame, so the verb 'want' should be in the past tense 'wanted' to maintain tense consistency.

× Yes, I often see a lot of advertising on the train or other form of transport.

✓ Yes, I often see a lot of advertising on trains or other forms of transport.

The sentence mixes singular and plural forms inconsistently. 'Train' should be plural 'trains' to match 'a lot of advertising' which implies multiple instances, and 'form' should be plural 'forms' to agree with 'other'.

× For example, there are lot of colorful poster stick on the wall and the digital screen or television display their new service or products.

✓ For example, there are lots of colorful posters stuck on the wall and digital screens or televisions display their new services or products.

'Lot' should be 'lots' to indicate quantity, 'poster' should be plural 'posters' to match 'lots', 'stick' should be past participle 'stuck' to describe the state, 'screen' and 'television' should be plural to agree with 'display', and 'service' should be plural 'services' to match 'products'.

× No, I don't like advertisement.

✓ No, I don't like advertisements.

'Advertisement' is countable and in this context should be plural 'advertisements' without an article to express general dislike.

× You always interrupt my February video, song or event.

✓ They always interrupt my videos, songs, or events.

The pronoun 'You' is incorrect here because the subject is unspecified ads; 'They' is appropriate. Also, 'February video' is unclear and likely incorrect; plural forms 'videos, songs, or events' better express the general idea.

× It's made me annoying.

✓ It makes me annoyed.

'It's made' is past tense but the intended meaning is a current state, so present tense 'makes' is correct. Also, 'annoying' is an adjective describing the cause, but the feeling is 'annoyed'.

× I like funding advertising because it always made me relax and unwind you know and I can nothing for it and I always sharing to my friends and discuss about it.

✓ I like funny advertising because it always makes me relax and unwind, you know, and I can do nothing about it. I always share it with my friends and discuss it.

'Funding' is likely a typo for 'funny'. 'Made' should be present tense 'makes' to match 'I like'. 'I can nothing for it' is incorrect; 'I can do nothing about it' is correct. 'Always sharing' should be 'always share' to match present tense. 'Discuss about' is incorrect; 'discuss' does not need 'about'.

× Yes, I often see advertisement when I watching the video or invent the advertisement always interrupt my video so it made me annoying and I think it's a bad things.

✓ Yes, I often see advertisements when I am watching videos, but the advertisements always interrupt my videos, so it makes me annoyed and I think it's a bad thing.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements'. 'I watching' is incorrect; should be 'I am watching'. 'Invent' is incorrect; likely meant 'event' or 'even'. 'Made me annoying' should be 'makes me annoyed'. 'Bad things' should be singular 'bad thing' to match the context.