Advertisement— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete, making it difficult to understand the main point. Try to give a clear topic sentence and then add specific details to explain why the advertisement impressed you. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

例: When I was a child, an advertisement about Santa Claus with animated characters made a strong impression on me. It showed Santa entering a room, which felt magical and exciting. This ad was memorable because it captured the festive spirit and made me look forward to Christmas.

提案: Your answer has some grammar and vocabulary errors and lacks coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about the types of advertisements you see. Also, correct sentence structure and word choice will improve clarity.

例: Actually, there is a wide variety of advertisements on trains and other types of transportation. For example, I often see ads for taxi companies and delivery services. These ads are common because they target commuters who might need these services during their travel.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but contains some repetition and minor grammar mistakes. Try to avoid repeating words and use linking words to make your answer more fluent and natural.

例: To be honest, I don't like advertisements because they often interrupt my videos on YouTube, especially when I'm watching something important or studying. As a result, the ads ruin my concentration, and I find them quite annoying.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear but has some repetition and minor grammar issues. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repeating words. Also, try to expand your answer with more specific reasons or examples.

例: I like advertisements from local businesses because I enjoy supporting my community. These local ads encourage people to buy from small shops, which helps boost our country's economy and creates a sense of togetherness.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains unclear phrases and grammar mistakes. Make sure to complete your sentences and use correct vocabulary. Provide specific examples and use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I often see advertisements when I use my phone or computer. Since I mostly use free apps and websites, ads frequently appear to support their services. For example, while reading articles online, I encounter various banner ads and video commercials.

× When I was I was a child, there were there was an ad about MMS and that about the Santa Claus to have animated characters.

✓ When I was a child, there was an ad about MMS and Santa Claus that had animated characters.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'there were there was' which is redundant and confusing. Also, 'the Santa Claus' should be 'Santa Claus' without 'the'. The verb 'to have' should be in past tense 'had' to match the past context.

× We're talking about Santa and when they enter to the room, they saw Santa and they were really.

✓ It was about Santa, and when they entered the room, they saw Santa and were really surprised.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'We're talking about Santa' is present tense and inconsistent with past narrative. 'Enter to the room' is incorrect; it should be 'entered the room'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'they were really' without completing the thought.

× In a contrary, there is a wide variety of advertisements in the trends or other type of transportations.

✓ On the contrary, there is a wide variety of advertisements on trains or other types of transportation.

'In a contrary' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'On the contrary'. 'In the trends' should be 'on trains'. 'Other type of transportations' should be pluralized to 'other types of transportation'.

× I usually see ads about a taxi drivers or driver.

✓ I usually see ads about taxi drivers or drivers.

The phrase 'a taxi drivers' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'drivers'. It should be plural without 'a'. Also, 'driver' is singular and should be plural to match 'drivers' or be clarified.

× Driver companies are delivery services.

✓ Driver companies are delivery services.

This sentence is grammatically correct but could be clearer. No correction needed based on grammar problem types.

× It's this ads are quite common because commuters want to reach people.

✓ These ads are quite common because advertisers want to reach people.

'It's this ads' is incorrect; 'these ads' is the correct demonstrative pronoun for plural noun 'ads'. Also, 'commuters want to reach people' is illogical; likely, 'advertisers want to reach people' is intended.

× To be honest, I don't like advertisements at all because they interrupt my videos on YouTube while I'm watching important thing important video or studying the the ads.

✓ To be honest, I don't like advertisements at all because they interrupt my videos on YouTube while I'm watching important videos or studying.

The phrase 'important thing important video' is repetitive and incorrect. 'The the ads' is a typo. The sentence also misuses 'studying the ads'; likely, 'studying' is separate from ads. Modal verbs are not misused here, but sentence clarity is improved.

× The ads will will ruin my concentration and I find them quite annoying.

✓ The ads will ruin my concentration and I find them quite annoying.

The repetition 'will will' is a typographical error. Removing the duplicate corrects the sentence.

× I like advertisements from local businesses because now I love to help community.

✓ I like advertisements from local businesses because I now love to help the community.

The phrase 'help community' is missing the definite article 'the'. Also, 'now' is better placed before 'love' for natural word order.

× Local local ads will encourage people to buy and support them.

✓ Local ads will encourage people to buy from and support them.

The repetition 'Local local' is an error. Also, adding 'from' after 'buy' clarifies the meaning.

× Those will boost our country's economy.

✓ Those ads will boost our country's economy.

The pronoun 'Those' is vague; specifying 'Those ads' improves clarity.

× Yes, I usually see advertisements while using them speak.

✓ Yes, I usually see advertisements while using them to speak.

The phrase 'using them speak' is incorrect. It should be 'using them to speak' or better 'using them' if referring to devices.

× Since I mostly use free apps and websites I frequent, they add frequently appear to support their services.

✓ Since I mostly use free apps and websites I frequent, ads frequently appear to support their services.

The pronoun 'they add' is incorrect; 'ads' is the correct subject. Also, word order 'add frequently appear' is incorrect; 'ads frequently appear' is correct.

× For example, while reading articles I encounter a various.

✓ For example, while reading articles I encounter various ads.

The phrase 'a various' is incorrect; 'various' is an adjective and should modify a plural noun like 'ads'. The article 'a' should be removed.