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提案: Try to give a more direct and concise answer with clearer structure. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and provide specific examples or reasons to enrich your response.

例: I don't recall any specific advertisements that impressed me as a child because I was more interested in TV shows. For example, I used to watch cartoons and rarely paid attention to commercials, so they didn't leave much of an impact on me.

提案: Improve sentence structure and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, try to provide more specific details or examples.

例: Yes, I often see many advertisements displayed in metro trains and buses. For instance, buses usually have dedicated spaces at the back for commercials, which helps transport companies earn extra revenue.

提案: Avoid incomplete sentences and filler words. Provide a clear opinion and explain your reasons with supporting details using linking words.

例: I don't like advertisements because they interrupt the content I want to watch. Although some ads can be skipped after 30 seconds, I usually skip them immediately to avoid wasting time.

提案: Make your answer more natural by avoiding filler words and expanding your explanation with examples or reasons using linking words.

例: I am particularly interested in advertisements about electronic items and gadgets. Therefore, when I see ads related to new smartphones or laptops, I pay close attention because they help me learn about the latest technology.

提案: Try to organize your answer clearly and avoid excessive filler words. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples.

例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on my phone and computer. For example, ads pop up based on my search history when I open a browser, and videos on my phone usually have ads playing in between.

× I don't remember any particular commercials, uh, which created an impact.

✓ I don't remember any particular commercials, uh, which have created an impact.

The sentence refers to past events with relevance to the present, so the present perfect tense ('have created') is appropriate instead of simple past ('created').

× Uh, when I see ads, I used to go away.

✓ Uh, when I see ads, I go away.

'Used to' is for past habits, but the sentence is in present tense ('when I see ads'), so simple present tense 'go away' should be used instead of 'used to go away'.

× Yes, I see lot of ads are being displayed in metro trains as well as in buses.

✓ Yes, I see a lot of ads being displayed in metro trains as well as in buses.

'Lot' needs an article 'a' before it when used with countable plural nouns. Also, 'are being displayed' can be simplified to 'being displayed' after 'see'.

× There is a separate space given for buses at the back for commercials.

✓ There is a separate space given on buses at the back for commercials.

'Given for buses' is incorrect; the space is on the buses, so the preposition 'on' is appropriate here.

× I'm not a fan of commercials, but these days we are forced to watch it, umm for A at least a minimum of 30 seconds where we have an option to skip it.

✓ I'm not a fan of commercials, but these days we are forced to watch them for at least a minimum of 30 seconds, where we have an option to skip them.

'It' should be 'them' to refer to plural 'commercials'. Also, 'for A at least' is incorrect; 'for at least' is correct.

× So I used to skip those advertisements and.

✓ So I usually skip those advertisements.

'Used to' indicates past habit, but the context suggests a current habit, so simple present 'usually skip' is appropriate. The sentence was incomplete and is corrected accordingly.

× I have a special interest on electronic items and gadgets.

✓ I have a special interest in electronic items and gadgets.

'Interest' is followed by the preposition 'in', not 'on'.

× Therefore, uh, if I see any relevant ad, I show some special interest to watch them.

✓ Therefore, uh, if I see any relevant ad, I show some special interest in watching it.

'Ad' is singular, so the pronoun should be 'it' not 'them'. Also, 'show interest to watch' is better expressed as 'show interest in watching'.

× Yes uh these days, uh, I see lot of advertisements uh, getting popped up all of a sudden when you open a browser on a computer umm based on our search history umm, the advertisements are coming even in our phone if we watch any videos in between, there are advertisements uh being played, which we.

✓ Yes, uh, these days, uh, I see a lot of advertisements popping up all of a sudden when you open a browser on a computer. Umm, based on our search history, umm, advertisements also appear on our phones if we watch any videos in between; there are advertisements being played, which we...

Added 'a' before 'lot of advertisements'. 'Getting popped up' is better as 'popping up'. 'The advertisements are coming' is better as 'advertisements also appear'. 'Our phone' should be 'our phones' for consistency. The sentence was long and fragmented; punctuation and structure were improved for clarity.