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提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác. Nên sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn.

例: Yes, I remember a very famous advertisement for a local milk brand called Feathers. It featured a catchy jingle and a funny animated character playing sports. The commercial was so memorable that I often found myself singing the song.

提案: Câu trả lời nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu cú rõ ràng hơn. Nên dùng liên từ để kết nối ý và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như số nhiều, danh từ đếm được.

例: Absolutely. I see a massive amount of advertising, especially on buses and subways. The entire surface of buses is often wrapped in eye-catching advertisements, and inside trains, every available space from the ceiling to the windows is covered.

提案: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và từ vựng, tránh lỗi lặp từ và dùng từ phù hợp hơn. Nên dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và liên kết các ý bằng từ nối.

例: Honestly, I have mixed feelings about advertisements. I appreciate those that are creative and informative, but I strongly dislike ones that are intrusive and repetitive, especially when they constantly interrupt videos.

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác. Nên dùng câu hoàn chỉnh và liên kết ý tốt hơn.

例: I really like advertisements that are story-driven and emotional. They don't just promote a product but tell heartwarming or humorous stories. These often feel more like short films and are usually much more memorable than direct sales pitches.

提案: Cần chú ý ngữ pháp số nhiều và từ vựng chính xác. Nên dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và liên kết các ý bằng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, constantly. I see advertisements everywhere, from social media feeds to video streaming sites. It seems like almost every website I visit has some form of advertising. Advertising has become a part of the digital experience now, whether we like it or not.

× Yes, I remember where is a very famous advertisement for a local milk brand is feathers, A catchy chingo and funny animated character playing sports.

✓ Yes, I remember there is a very famous advertisement for a local milk brand called Feathers, a catchy jingle and a funny animated character playing sports.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'where is' instead of 'there is' to indicate existence. 'There is' is the correct existential construction to introduce the advertisement. Also, 'chingo' is likely a typo for 'jingle'.

× The commercial were so memorable memorable that I was always seeing the song.

✓ The commercial was so memorable that I was always hearing the song.

The subject 'commercial' is singular, so the verb should be 'was' not 'were'. Also, 'seeing the song' is incorrect; 'hearing the song' fits better since songs are heard.

× Absolutely. I see a massive amount of advertising, especially on buses and subways. The entire size of buses are often wrapped in a hooked advertising and inside trains every available way from the sailing to the window.

✓ Absolutely. I see a massive amount of advertising, especially on buses and subways. The entire size of buses is often wrapped in a hooked advertising and inside trains every available way from the ceiling to the window.

The phrase 'The entire size of buses' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are'. Also, 'sailing' is a typo for 'ceiling'.

× Honestly, I have a mixed feeling. I appreciate advertisement that are creative and informative, but I strongly dislike those that are overly instructed in intrusive and repeat repetitive when they constantly interrupt video.

✓ Honestly, I have mixed feelings. I appreciate advertisements that are creative and informative, but I strongly dislike those that are overly intrusive and repetitive when they constantly interrupt videos.

'Mixed feeling' should be plural 'mixed feelings'. 'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match 'that are'. 'Overly instructed in intrusive and repeat repetitive' is incorrect; it should be 'overly intrusive and repetitive'. Also, 'interrupt video' should be 'interrupt videos'.

× I really like advertisements that are story driven and emotional. The guys that doesn't just push a product but tell us heartwarming or humorous story.

✓ I really like advertisements that are story-driven and emotional. The ones that don't just push a product but tell us heartwarming or humorous stories.

'The guys' is incorrect; it should be 'The ones' referring to advertisements. 'Doesn't' should be 'don't' to agree with plural subject. 'Story' should be plural 'stories' to match 'heartwarming or humorous'.

× This often feel more like short film and are usually much more memorable than direct. Sell big trees.

✓ These often feel more like short films and are usually much more memorable than direct sales pitches.

'This' should be plural 'These' to agree with plural subject. 'Feel' should be plural 'feel'. 'Short film' should be plural 'short films'. 'Direct. Sell big trees.' is unclear and likely a mishearing; corrected to 'direct sales pitches'.

× Yes, constantly. I see them everywhere from social media fakes to video streaming site. It seem like almost every website I visit has some form of advertisements.

✓ Yes, constantly. I see them everywhere from social media feeds to video streaming sites. It seems like almost every website I visit has some form of advertisement.

'Social media fakes' is incorrect; should be 'social media feeds'. 'Video streaming site' should be plural 'sites'. 'It seem' should be 'It seems' to agree with singular subject. 'Advertisements' can be singular 'advertisement' here for uncountable sense.

× Advertising is part of digital experience now, whether we like it or not.

✓ Advertising is part of the digital experience now, whether we like it or not.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'digital experience'.