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提案: 你的回答有些语法错误和表达不自然，比如“acute characters where blue hat and white T-shirt”不清楚具体含义。建议用更清晰的句子描述广告内容，并注意时态和冠词的使用。

例: Yes, I remember an advertisement for bubble tea that featured cute characters wearing blue hats and white T-shirts. This ad left a strong impression on me because it looked very fresh and appealing.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不流畅，如“advertisement a catch our attention”不正确。建议简洁明了地表达观点，使用连词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, advertisements are everywhere in daily life. We can see them not only on trains but also at bus stations and on taxis. These ads easily catch our attention when we are outside or waiting.

提案: 回答中表达不清晰，逻辑不够连贯，且有语法错误。建议明确表达观点，使用连接词，并避免模糊或矛盾的内容。

例: I don't like advertisements very much because some of them are exaggerated and might mislead young people. Also, missing important ads like those for Coca-Cola or games could negatively affect children.

提案: 回答较好，但“beautiful lyric and background”表达不准确。建议使用更准确的词汇，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: As far as I'm concerned, I prefer advertisements that leave a deep impression on me. For example, those with cute characters or songs with beautiful lyrics and pleasant background music.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和句子未完成，表达不完整。建议完整表达观点，注意单复数和句子结构。

例: Definitely, I often see many advertisements when I use my phone. Especially on apps like Taobao or Alipay, there are always ads showing the newest products or promotions.

× I still remember there is an ad advertisement that showed a fresh bubble tea with acute characters where blue hat and white T-shirt, which leaves a deep impression on me.

✓ I still remember there was an advertisement that showed a fresh bubble tea with cute characters wearing a blue hat and white T-shirt, which left a deep impression on me.

The sentence refers to a past event, so the verb 'is' should be changed to 'was' to match the past tense. Also, 'acute' is incorrect here; the correct adjective is 'cute'. The relative clause needs correction for clarity and tense consistency.

× advertisement can be seen in our daily life easily, not only on the trains but also when we wait for the bus, on the bus station, even on the taxis.

✓ Advertisements can be seen easily in our daily life, not only on trains but also when we wait for the bus, at the bus station, and even on taxis.

The preposition 'in' should be 'at' when referring to 'bus station'. Also, 'on the taxis' should be 'on taxis'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity and correctness.

× This advertisement a catch our attention when we were go outside or waiting.

✓ These advertisements catch our attention when we go outside or wait.

The sentence has incorrect verb forms and article usage. 'a catch' is incorrect; it should be 'catch'. 'were go' is wrong; it should be 'go'. Also, plural 'advertisements' fits better here.

× lack some advertisement like Coca-Cola or games will be harmful for the child.

✓ Lack of some advertisements like Coca-Cola or games will be harmful for children.

The phrase 'lack some advertisement' is incorrect; it should be 'lack of some advertisements'. Also, 'the child' is too specific; 'children' is more appropriate here.

× they have some cute characters or some songs with beautiful lyric and background.

✓ They have some cute characters or some songs with beautiful lyrics and background music.

'Lyric' should be plural 'lyrics' when referring to song words. Also, 'background' is vague; 'background music' is clearer.

× it's easy for me to see all kinds of advertisement when I use my phone.

✓ It's easy for me to see all kinds of advertisements when I use my phone.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' when referring to multiple types.