Advertisement— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally good but try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and be more concise. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly, for example, 'because' and 'which'.

例: One advertisement that impressed me as a child was a Samsung smartphone commercial. It featured a traveler exploring various places, which inspired me to dream about traveling and using new technology. Moreover, the attractive visuals and music made it memorable.

提案: There are some language errors and unclear phrases like 'by lunch' and 'catches Sogans is'. Try to use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Also, avoid redundancy and be more specific about the types of advertisements.

例: When I travel from my hometown to the capital city by train, I often see many advertisements inside the train and at the stations. These ads use bright colors and catchy slogans, making them very noticeable. I believe advertising on transport is effective because it reaches many commuters daily.

提案: Your answer is clear but avoid hesitation like 'Well, I yes'. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words such as 'for instance' or 'in addition' to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I like advertisements because they provide important information about products and their features. For instance, they help people discover new items that can simplify daily life. In addition, advertisements inform us about special offers or discounts, which are very helpful.

提案: Avoid repeating 'for example' multiple times and filler words like 'umm'. Use plural forms correctly and improve sentence structure for clarity. Try to combine ideas using linking words.

例: I prefer advertisements about essential products for daily life, especially technological items that are very useful. For example, washing machines, mobile phones, and vacuum cleaners can make our lives easier and more convenient.

提案: There are some grammatical errors like 'This ads are'. Try to use singular/plural forms correctly and improve sentence flow by using linking words such as 'and' or 'which'.

例: Yes, I often see advertisements on my mobile phone or computer because I stay connected to the Internet via personal Wi-Fi. These ads are diverse and feature eye-catching visuals and captivating background music, which grab my attention. For example, I frequently notice ads about new gadgets or online courses, which I find very interesting.

× Well, usually when I travel from my hometown to the capital city by lunch, I see many advertisements inside the lunch and at the lunch station.

✓ Well, usually when I travel from my hometown to the capital city by train, I see many advertisements inside the train and at the train station.

The word 'lunch' is incorrectly used instead of 'train'. 'Lunch' is a meal, not a mode of transport. The correct preposition and noun should be 'by train' and 'inside the train'. This error likely occurred due to a mishearing or typo. To improve, ensure the correct vocabulary related to transport is used.

× This adds up a new bright colours and catches Sogans is make them very noticeable.

✓ This adds new bright colours and catchy slogans that make them very noticeable.

The sentence has incorrect pronoun and verb forms. 'Adds up a new bright colours' is incorrect; it should be 'adds new bright colours'. 'Catches Sogans is make them' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'catchy slogans that make them'. The pronouns and verb forms must agree with the nouns they refer to. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and correct pronoun usage.

× This adds up a new bright colours and catches Sogans is make them very noticeable.

✓ This adds new bright colours and catchy slogans that make them very noticeable.

The phrase 'a new bright colours' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'colours'. It should be 'new bright colours' without 'a'. Also, 'Sogans' should be 'slogans' and plural. To improve, ensure articles match the number of the noun (singular/plural).

× This ads are quite diverse, some eye-catching visuals and captivating background music that grab my attention.

✓ These ads are quite diverse, with some eye-catching visuals and captivating background music that grab my attention.

'This ads' is incorrect because 'this' is singular and 'ads' is plural. The correct demonstrative pronoun for plural is 'these'. To improve, match demonstrative pronouns with the number of the noun they modify.

× This ads are quite diverse, some eye-catching visuals and captivating background music that grab my attention.

✓ These ads are quite diverse, with some eye-catching visuals and captivating background music that grab my attention.

The sentence lacks a conjunction or preposition to connect the two clauses properly. Adding 'with' clarifies the relationship. Also, 'This' should be 'These' for plural. To improve, ensure proper connectors and pronouns are used.

× I like advertisements about products, which is really necessary in our daily life.

✓ I like advertisements about products, which are really necessary in our daily life.

The relative pronoun 'which' refers to 'advertisements about products' (plural), so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. To improve, ensure subject-verb agreement in relative clauses.

× For example, I'd like to know about some technological items which is really very useful in our daily activities.

✓ For example, I'd like to know about some technological items which are really very useful in our daily activities.

'Items' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. To improve, ensure verb agrees with plural subjects.