Advertisement— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Try to finish your thoughts and provide more specific details about the advertisement and why it impressed you. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to sound more natural and confident.

例: Yes, I remember an advertisement from my childhood that taught us how to save water while brushing our teeth. It impressed me because it showed simple steps to conserve water, which made me more aware of environmental issues.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is unclear and contains many hesitations. Try to organize your thoughts clearly and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid repeating filler words and be more specific about why advertisements can be interesting or overwhelming.

例: Yes, I often see advertisements on trains and other transport. Sometimes, they are interesting because they distract passengers from the noisy environment. However, at times, the sheer number of ads can feel overwhelming and distracting.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more concise. Try to avoid filler words and complete your sentences fully. Also, explain why you like advertisements with specific examples or reasons.

例: I sometimes like advertisements, especially those that use digital animation. I appreciate ads that convey important health messages because they raise awareness in an engaging way.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Try to finish your sentences and provide specific examples of the types of advertisements you like. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid filler words.

例: I like advertisements that convey important messages, such as raising awareness about the environment and renewable energy. These ads educate people and encourage positive actions.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Try to complete your thoughts and explain your experience with advertisements on digital devices. Avoid filler words and be more specific about how often and in what way you see ads.

例: Yes, I often see advertisements when I use apps on my phone or work on my computer. Sometimes, these ads feel intrusive because they interrupt what I'm doing.

× Yes, I remembered when I was a child, there was an advertisement about how, uh, we can, how we can manage our water usage for, uh, brushing our teeth.

✓ Yes, I remember when I was a child, there was an advertisement about how we can manage our water usage for brushing our teeth.

The verb 'remembered' is incorrectly used in the past tense here. Since the speaker is recalling a memory in the present moment, the present tense 'remember' is appropriate. Using 'remembered' suggests a completed action in the past, which does not fit the context.

× Sometimes I find them interesting because umm, they distract us from uh, Ghazal and Basel on of noisy place.

✓ Sometimes I find them interesting because umm, they distract us from, uh, Ghazal and Basel, one of the noisy places.

The phrase 'on of noisy place' is incorrect. It should be 'one of the noisy places' to correctly use the singular 'one' with the plural 'places' and include the definite article 'the' before 'noisy places' to specify the location.

× Uh, I sometimes, uh, I like advertisement because, umm, especially these days they're using digital animation and some of them, umm, contains they, they try to convey a health message.

✓ Uh, I sometimes, uh, like advertisements because, umm, especially these days they're using digital animation and some of them, umm, contain, they try to convey a health message.

The word 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match the context of liking ads in general. Also, 'contains' should be 'contain' to agree with the plural subject 'some of them'.

× I like, uh, and advertise some advertisement that they try to convey, uh, messages to people or they try to increase people awareness about environment, about renewable energy or they have, uh, some.

✓ I like advertisements that try to convey messages to people or try to increase people's awareness about the environment, renewable energy, or other topics.

The original sentence has structural issues and redundancy. 'And advertise some advertisement' is incorrect and confusing. The correction simplifies the sentence, removes redundancy, and corrects 'people awareness' to 'people's awareness' and adds the definite article 'the' before 'environment'.