Advertisement— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer clearer and more natural by using complete sentences and correct word forms. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh'. Also, provide more specific details about the advertisement and why it impressed you. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, there was an advertisement about a brand of mineral water that impressed me as a child. It used bright colors which caught my attention, and featured a famous artist named Brent Avazado. I remember it because the visuals were very vibrant and memorable.

提案: Make your answer more coherent by completing your sentences and avoiding fillers. Use linking words to explain the reason clearly. Also, use more precise vocabulary such as 'advertisements' instead of 'advertisers'.

例: Yes, I often see advertisements at train stations. Since many people in my city use trains regularly, companies place ads there to reach a large audience.

提案: Try to express your opinion more clearly and avoid repetition. Use correct grammar and complete your thoughts. Also, explain why you like certain types of advertisements with specific reasons.

例: It depends on the type of advertisement. I prefer fashion and smartphone ads because they provide useful information about new products and trends.

提案: Make your answer more structured and clear. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear references. Explain your preferences with specific examples and use linking words to organize your ideas.

例: Firstly, I like advertisements that are short and to the point. Also, I prefer ads that relate to my personal life, such as those about family or daily activities.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by using more varied vocabulary and linking words. Also, avoid repeating words like 'use phone' and 'use computer' in the same sentence.

例: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone, especially on social media platforms like Instagram. Since I spend more time on my phone than on my computer, I find these ads both entertaining and informative.

× But the interesting part is they used the bright color and it's so a catching and also they used umm, some artists as uh, Brent Avazado.

✓ But the interesting part is they used bright colors and it's so catchy and also they used umm, some artists such as uh, Brent Avazado.

The phrase 'it's so a catching' is incorrect. 'Catching' should be the adjective 'catchy' to describe the advertisement. Also, 'bright color' should be plural 'bright colors' to match the context. 'As' should be 'such as' when giving examples.

× Yes I do. I always see it on a station because umm there is.

✓ Yes I do. I always see it at a station because umm there is.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect when referring to a station; 'at' is the correct preposition. Also, the sentence 'there is' is incomplete and unclear; it should be completed or clarified.

× In my city there are some people who always use train and that's why some company put some advertisers in that area.

✓ In my city there are some people who always use trains and that's why some companies put some advertisements in that area.

'Train' should be plural 'trains' because it refers to the general use of trains. 'Company' should be plural 'companies' to match 'some'. 'Advertisers' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'advertisements'.

× It depends on advertisement that I watch.

✓ It depends on the advertisement that I watch.

The noun 'advertisement' is countable and singular here, so it needs the definite article 'the' to specify which advertisement is being referred to.

× If I watch umm like fashion advertisement and also smartphone advertisement, I will be more alike than other advertisement because it give it gives me much information about.

✓ If I watch umm like fashion advertisements and also smartphone advertisements, I will like them more than other advertisements because they give me much information.

'Alike' is incorrect here; the correct phrase is 'like them more'. 'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match the context. 'Give it gives' is a repetition; 'they give' is correct to agree with plural subject.

× First in first I like an advertisement like a short duration and also they give me some information relate on my life like parents and also siblings.

✓ First of all, I like advertisements that are short in duration and also give me some information related to my life, like parents and siblings.

'First in first' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'First of all'. 'Like a short duration' should be 'that are short in duration'. 'Relate on' should be 'related to'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× On the top of that I like an advertisement.

✓ On top of that, I like advertisements.

'On the top of that' should be 'On top of that'. Also, 'an advertisement' is vague here; plural 'advertisements' fits better. The sentence is incomplete and needs to be connected properly.

× Yes I do. I always find it on my social media like Instagram and I think it's fun and give me more information.

✓ Yes I do. I always find it on my social media, like Instagram, and I think it's fun and gives me more information.

The sentence is mostly correct, but 'give' should be 'gives' to agree with singular subject 'it'. Commas added for clarity around 'like Instagram'.