Advertisement— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be more natural and clear. Try to directly answer the question with a topic sentence, then add specific details using correct grammar. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure.

例: Yes, there was an advertisement that impressed me when I was a child. It was mainly about sports, and I remember it because it showed exciting football matches that inspired me to play.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using linking words and more specific details. Also, try to avoid repeating words and make sentences more natural.

例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains and buses. This is a common way for companies to promote their products to a large number of people who use public transport daily.

提案: Your answer should be more structured and clear. Use a topic sentence followed by supporting details with linking words. Also, correct grammar and vocabulary usage will make your answer more effective.

例: Yes, I like advertisements because they help companies sell their products and earn profits. Moreover, advertisements appear in many forms, such as on trains, buses, and mobile phones.

提案: Try to make your answer more natural by using correct grammar and adding linking words. Also, be more specific about why you like these types of advertisements.

例: I like advertisements for shoes, cricket bats, and mobile phones because they show the latest features. Additionally, I enjoy ads about new technologies that will be available in the future.

提案: Improve your answer by using correct tense and adding more details. Use linking words to make your response coherent and natural.

例: Yes, I often see advertisements when I am using my phone or computer. These ads usually appear on social media and websites I visit frequently.

× Yes, it happened many time when I was a child.

✓ Yes, it happened many times when I was a child.

The word 'time' should be plural 'times' because it refers to multiple occasions. In English, countable nouns need to be plural when referring to more than one.

× I see advertisement that make me impression on me.

✓ I saw advertisements that made an impression on me.

The noun 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match the plural verb 'make'. Also, the verb tense should be past 'saw' and 'made' to match the past time frame. 'Make me impression on me' is incorrect; it should be 'made an impression on me'.

× I see advertisement that make me impression on me.

✓ I saw advertisements that made an impression on me.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' if singular subject, but since 'advertisements' is plural, 'make' is correct. However, the sentence is in past tense, so 'made' is appropriate. Also, 'see' should be 'saw' to match past tense.

× Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on trains and buses also.

✓ Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on trains and buses as well.

The sentence is mostly correct, but 'also' is better replaced with 'as well' for naturalness. No plural issue here.

× Yes Sir I like advertisement.

✓ Yes Sir, I like advertisements.

The noun 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because it refers to advertisements in general.

× They are a good day method to to sell their products and to make their company in profit.

✓ They are a good way to sell products and make the company profitable.

The phrase 'good day method' is incorrect; it should be 'good way'. Also, 'to to' is a typo and should be 'to'. 'Make their company in profit' is awkward; 'make the company profitable' is better.

× And advertisements are in many methods like train buses and ads in mobile.

✓ And advertisements are in many forms like trains, buses, and ads on mobile phones.

'Methods' is better replaced with 'forms' when referring to types of advertisements. Also, 'train buses' should be 'trains, buses' and 'ads in mobile' should be 'ads on mobile phones'.

× I like advertising of shoes, cricket bats, mobile phones and some new technology that are held in future.

✓ I like advertising of shoes, cricket bats, mobile phones, and some new technology that will be introduced in the future.

'Technology' is uncountable and singular, so 'are held' is incorrect; it should be 'will be introduced' to indicate future events. Also, 'held in future' is incorrect phrasing.

× Yes, I often see advertisement when I was on my phone or my computer.

✓ Yes, I often see advertisements when I am on my phone or my computer.

The sentence mixes present tense 'see' with past tense 'was'. It should be consistent in present tense 'am' to match 'often see'. Also, 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements'.