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提案: 回答中语法和表达不够自然，句子结构混乱，缺少连贯性。建议简化句子，直接回答问题，并用具体细节支持观点。

例: Yes, I was impressed by Apple's iPad advertisements when I was a child. They showed how easy and fun the device was to use, which made me want one. Eventually, I got my first iPad, and I really loved it.

提案: 回答内容不清晰，词汇使用错误，表达不连贯。建议用简单明了的句子描述看到的广告，并举具体例子。

例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on public transport. For example, on the train, there are posters behind the seats that promote different products or services.

提案: 回答中表达不准确，句子结构复杂且不自然。建议直接表达喜欢的原因，并用具体例子说明。

例: Yes, I like Ferguson's advertisements because they clearly explain the product features and are very creative. This makes the ads interesting and easy to understand.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，建议简化句子，明确表达喜欢讲故事和信息丰富的广告，并举具体例子。

例: I like advertisements that tell a story because they catch my attention. For example, commercials that show real-life situations are memorable and make me more interested in the product. I also like ads that clearly explain the benefits.

提案: 回答表达混乱，语法错误较多，观点不明确。建议用简单句子表达经常看到广告，并说明广告对使用体验的影响。

例: Yes, I often see advertisements when I use apps on my phone or computer. Sometimes, these ads interrupt my work and make me feel annoyed, even though ads can be useful for learning about new products.

× Yes, there are many advertisements that I looked through when I was a child and especially the ads produced by Apple company and which is mainly about iPads.

✓ Yes, there are many advertisements that I looked through when I was a child, especially the ads produced by Apple company which are mainly about iPads.

这里的主语是复数“ads”，谓语动词应使用复数形式“are”，而不是单数“is”。

× So I got first devices is iPad from the company.

✓ So the first device I got from the company was an iPad.

“devices”是复数，但句意指单个设备，应使用单数“device”。同时句子结构不正确，需调整为“the first device I got”。

× Yes, I always see a lot of artists that is appeared in public transport.

✓ Yes, I always see a lot of advertisements that appear in public transport.

“artists”应为“advertisements”，且“that is appeared”结构错误，应为“that appear”，保持主谓一致和正确时态。

× For example, when I got on the train, there were a pair at the back of the seat to make a clear vision for the for the people that is going to take a train.

✓ For example, when I got on the train, there was a pair at the back of the seat to make a clear view for the people who were going to take the train.

“there were a pair”中“pair”是单数，谓语应为“was”。“people that is”应改为“people who were”，保持主谓一致和正确关系代词。

× I like Ferguson because they give a brief introduction about the features of the product that can be easily catered, the customer's needs and the great creativity of the advertisement that impressed me when I watching them.

✓ I like Ferguson because they give a brief introduction to the features of the product that can easily cater to the customer's needs and the great creativity of the advertisement that impressed me when I was watching them.

“introduction about”应为“introduction to”；“catered”应为动词原形“cater”；“cater to”是固定搭配；“when I watching”缺少助动词，应为“when I was watching”。

× I prefer advertising that is created and tells your story because it captures my attention through effectively.

✓ I prefer advertising that is created and tells your story because it captures my attention effectively.

“captures my attention through effectively”中“through”使用错误，应直接用副词“effectively”修饰动词。

× For example, commercials make humid or emission appeared tend to be memorable and make me more interested in a product.

✓ For example, commercials that make humor or emotion appear tend to be memorable and make me more interested in a product.

“humid or emission appeared”词语错误，应为“humor or emotion appear”，且“appeared”时态不对，应为动词原形“appear”。

× Yeah, sometimes I enter the Sun apps when I was working, there's some advertisement appeared in the screen.

✓ Yeah, sometimes I enter the Sun apps when I am working, and some advertisements appear on the screen.

“when I was working”时态与上下文不符，应为现在时“when I am working”；“there's some advertisement appeared”结构错误，应为“some advertisements appear”；“in the screen”应为“on the screen”。

× there's some advertisement appeared in the screen.

✓ there are some advertisements appearing on the screen.

“advertisement”应为复数“advertisements”，谓语“there's”应改为“there are”，且“appeared”应改为现在分词“appearing”。

× But I think that is a big trouble because it make a big difference to your feelings when using the apps.

✓ But I think that is a big problem because it makes a big difference to your feelings when using the apps.

“make”应为第三人称单数“makes”，且“big trouble”表达不自然，改为“big problem”。