Advertisement— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct verb forms and avoid redundancy. For example, say "The advertisement that impressed me was a hair shampoo ad" instead of "The advertisements that I found very interesting was". Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: The advertisement that impressed me the most as a child was a hair shampoo commercial. It demonstrated how the shampoo made hair shinier and smoother, and the bright music along with the creative editing made it very appealing to me.

提案: Improve sentence structure and grammar, for example, use "advertisements displayed on mirrors or windows" instead of "advertisements that display on the mirror or the windows". Also, use linking words like "therefore" or "so" to connect ideas clearly.

例: Yes, definitely. Whenever I travel on the MRT or buses, I notice many advertisements displayed on mirrors and windows. This placement ensures that passengers can easily see them, so it is an effective way for companies to promote their products.

提案: Use correct articles and plural forms, for example, "When I was a child, I loved watching advertisements". Also, avoid redundancy and improve coherence by using linking words like "however" to contrast ideas.

例: When I was a child, I loved watching advertisements because they were creative, appealing, and sometimes imaginative. However, as an adult, I find them annoying since they often interrupt my video watching experience.

提案: Improve grammar by using plural forms correctly, e.g., "advertisements" and "short films". Also, use linking words like "which" to connect clauses smoothly.

例: I really enjoy the style of advertisements made by Thai companies because they often include interesting storylines, which make you feel like you are watching short films rather than commercials. This approach is more engaging and memorable for viewers.

提案: Use present tense consistently and avoid filler words like "uh". For example, say "I see advertisements every time I click on a video on YouTube". Also, improve sentence clarity and coherence by using linking words.

例: Yes, absolutely. I see advertisements every time I click on a video on YouTube, and I have to wait about 30 seconds before I can skip them. Therefore, I am often forced to watch the ads.

× The advertisements that I found very interesting when I was a child was a hair shampoo advertisement.

✓ The advertisements that I found very interesting when I was a child were hair shampoo advertisements.

The subject 'advertisements' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' instead of 'was'. Also, 'advertisement' should be plural to match the subject. This is a singular and plural agreement issue.

× Whenever I go on MRT or buses, I can see a lot of advertisements that display on the mirror or the windows.

✓ Whenever I go on the MRT or buses, I can see a lot of advertisements displayed on the mirrors or the windows.

The preposition 'on' is correct for 'go on the MRT or buses', but 'display' should be in past participle form 'displayed' to describe the advertisements. Also, 'mirror' and 'windows' should be plural to match the context. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and verb form issue.

× They display there so every passengers can easily notice them.

✓ They are displayed there so every passenger can easily notice them.

'Passengers' is plural, so 'every' should be followed by singular 'passenger'. Also, 'display' should be in passive form 'are displayed' to indicate the advertisements are shown there. This is a singular and plural issue and verb form issue.

× When I was the child, I loved to watch advertisement because they were very creative and appealing and sometimes imaginative.

✓ When I was a child, I loved to watch advertisements because they were very creative, appealing, and sometimes imaginative.

The phrase 'the child' is incorrect; it should be 'a child'. Also, 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match the context. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and singular/plural issue.

× I feel more annoyed by them as they always interrupt me from watching videos continuously.

✓ I feel more annoyed by them as they always interrupt me while I am watching videos continuously.

The verb 'interrupt' is usually followed by 'while' or 'when' to indicate the action being interrupted. 'Interrupt me from watching' is incorrect. This is an incorrect use of prepositions.

× I really enjoy the style of advertisement made by Thai companies because they often include interesting storylines so you will feel more like you are watching a short films or videos and don't even realize they are promoting a product.

✓ I really enjoy the style of advertisements made by Thai companies because they often include interesting storylines so you will feel more like you are watching short films or videos and don't even realize they are promoting a product.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match the context. Also, 'a short films' is incorrect; it should be 'short films' without 'a'. This is a singular and plural issue and article error.

× Yes, absolutely. I saw advertisement every time when I just click on the video I want to watch uh in YouTube and I have to wait like 30 seconds to uh for me to skip the advertisement so I am forced to watch the ads.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I see advertisements every time I click on the video I want to watch on YouTube, and I have to wait about 30 seconds before I can skip the advertisement, so I am forced to watch the ads.

'Saw' should be present tense 'see' to match the habitual action. 'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match the context. Also, 'in YouTube' should be 'on YouTube'. This is a past tense issue, singular and plural issue, and incorrect use of prepositions.