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提案: Cevabınızı daha doğal ve etkili yapmak için, soruya doğrudan yanıt verin ve gereksiz tekrarları azaltın. Ayrıca, açıklayıcı ve spesifik detaylar ekleyerek cevabınızı zenginleştirin. Örneğin, reklamın neden aklınızda kaldığını ve ne tür bir reklam olduğunu net bir şekilde ifade edin.

例: Yes, there was a memorable advertisement from my childhood on TV. It featured a toy car, similar to Hot Wheels, which fascinated me because of its bright colors and exciting design. I often thought about it because it sparked my interest in cars.

提案: Cevabınızı daha akıcı ve mantıklı yapmak için bağlaçlar kullanarak düşüncelerinizi düzenleyin. Ayrıca, spesifik örnekler vererek cevabınızı detaylandırın ve gereksiz tekrarları azaltın.

例: I don't often use trains or metro stations, so I don't see many advertisements there. However, in my hometown, there are plenty of ads displayed in public places. Since I usually drive my own car, I don't pay much attention to them.

提案: Cevabınızı daha net ve etkili yapmak için, doğrudan soruya yanıt verin ve fikirlerinizi açıkça ifade edin. Ayrıca, olumlu ve olumsuz yönleri belirtirken bağlaçlar kullanarak cümlenizi daha tutarlı hale getirin.

例: I don't generally like advertisements, but some of them are useful because they influence our opinions positively. However, I also believe that some companies exaggerate or lie in their ads just to make money.

提案: Cevabınızı daha açık ve anlaşılır yapmak için, cümlelerinizi tamamlayın ve gereksiz duraklamalardan kaçının. Ayrıca, neden sevdiğinizi ve reklamların nasıl faydalı olduğunu spesifik olarak açıklayın.

例: I like educational advertisements because they help simplify complex topics and make learning easier. For example, ads that teach about health or technology can be very helpful.

提案: Cevabınızı daha doğal ve etkili yapmak için, düşüncelerinizi daha düzenli ve açık şekilde ifade edin. Korkularınızı ve nedenlerini net bir şekilde açıklayın ve gereksiz tekrarları azaltın.

例: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone and computer, which makes me feel uneasy. It seems like the ads are related to things I've recently talked about, which is a bit scary. I believe companies like Google use our data to target these ads.

× Yes, yes, there is an advertisement when I was a child in the TV, I always think about it, It's about cars, like a toy head.

✓ Yes, yes, there was an advertisement when I was a child on TV, I always think about it. It's about cars, like a toy car.

The sentence refers to a past event, so 'there is' should be 'there was' to match the past tense. Also, 'in the TV' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on TV'. 'Like a toy head' is unclear and likely a misuse; 'like a toy car' fits better in context.

× Yes, yes, there is an advertisement when I was a child in the TV, I always think about it, It's about cars, like a toy head.

✓ Yes, yes, there was an advertisement when I was a child on TV, I always think about it. It's about cars, like a toy car.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to TV; the correct preposition is 'on'. This is because we say 'on TV' to indicate something is broadcasted.

× Actually, I'm not using train or, uh, metro stations, uh, but always I see advertisements in the, my city, in my home city, but I don't care about it because I always drive by, drive my own car, you know.

✓ Actually, I don't use trains or metro stations, but I always see advertisements in my city, my hometown, but I don't care about them because I always drive my own car, you know.

The present continuous 'I'm not using' is incorrect here; the simple present 'I don't use' is appropriate for habitual actions. Also, 'train' should be plural 'trains' to match the general meaning. 'Drive by, drive my own car' is awkward; 'drive my own car' suffices. 'Advertisements in the, my city' is corrected to 'advertisements in my city'. 'It' referring to advertisements should be plural 'them'.

× Actually, I'm not using train or, uh, metro stations, uh, but always I see advertisements in the, my city, in my home city, but I don't care about it because I always drive by, drive my own car, you know.

✓ Actually, I don't use trains or metro stations, but I always see advertisements in my city, my hometown, but I don't care about them because I always drive my own car, you know.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'advertisements' which is plural, so it should be 'them'.

× Ready with someone? Actually, no, but sometimes yes, sometimes some advertisements are very good, uh, for our opinions or another things, but sometimes I think the companies are lying to us to uh, make money.

✓ Are you ready with someone? Actually, no, but sometimes yes. Sometimes some advertisements are very good for our opinions or other things, but sometimes I think the companies are lying to us to make money.

The original sentence 'Ready with someone?' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'Are you ready with someone?' or rephrased for clarity. Also, 'another things' is incorrect; it should be 'other things'. The sentence is long and run-on; splitting into shorter sentences improves clarity.

× I like kind of a, uh, education, educational ones, uh, because the educational ones are helping us to, uh, use some hard things and make them easier, uh, but some adverse time.

✓ I like educational advertisements because they help us understand difficult things and make them easier, although sometimes they can be annoying.

'Kind of a, uh, education, educational ones' is awkward and redundant; 'educational advertisements' is clearer. 'Helping us to use some hard things' is incorrect; it should be 'help us understand difficult things'. 'Some adverse time' is unclear; likely meant 'sometimes they can be annoying' or 'sometimes they are unpleasant'.

× Actually, I scared of them because I think they're listening us.

✓ Actually, I'm scared of them because I think they're listening to us.

The verb 'scared' needs the auxiliary verb 'am' to form 'I'm scared'. Also, 'listening us' is incorrect; the correct form is 'listening to us' because 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before the object.

× Actually, I scared of them because I think they're listening us.

✓ Actually, I'm scared of them because I think they're listening to us.

The pronoun 'us' is correct but must be preceded by the preposition 'to' with the verb 'listening'. Also, 'I scared' lacks the auxiliary verb 'am'.

× When I talk about something, I always see, uh, advertisements about that thing.

✓ When I talk about something, I always see advertisements about that thing.

The filler 'uh' interrupts the sentence unnecessarily and should be removed for clarity and fluency.