Advertisement— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, such as 'love to bite and use it,' which confuses the meaning. Try to be more specific and clear about the advertisement and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise and natural.

例: Yes, I remember an advertisement for a shampoo brand that I really liked as a child. It showed how the shampoo made hair shiny and healthy, which impressed me a lot.

提案: Your answer is a bit repetitive and contains awkward phrasing like 'advertising on transportations' and 'travel to some.' Try to use more natural expressions and avoid repeating words unnecessarily. Also, provide a clearer and more direct response.

例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains and buses. Nowadays, companies use public transportation to reach more people effectively.

提案: Your answer is honest but contains many filler words like 'uh' and 'kinda,' which affect fluency. Try to reduce fillers and organize your thoughts clearly with linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: I usually don't like advertisements, especially those that interrupt TV programs because they can be annoying. However, I appreciate ads that provide useful information.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words. Also, avoid awkward expressions like 'advertising about technology invention' and 'know what options do they have.'

例: I enjoy advertisements about new technology products. For instance, when a new smartphone is released, I watch the ads to learn about its features and decide if I want to buy it.

提案: Your answer has many filler words and is somewhat repetitive. Try to speak more fluently and organize your answer with clear linking words. Also, avoid unnecessary details that do not add value to your response.

例: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone and computer, especially on YouTube between videos. I would like to buy a subscription to skip these ads, but I haven't done so yet.

× I can remember specifically an ad about certain shampoo that I love to bite and use it.

✓ I can remember specifically an ad about a certain shampoo that I loved to buy and use.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'bite' instead of 'buy', which is a vocabulary error but also affects verb usage. The verb 'love' should be followed by the gerund form 'buy' to indicate the action liked. Also, 'certain shampoo' should have the article 'a' before it. The past tense 'loved' fits better since the memory is from childhood.

× I think in the new age this is very important for companies that have some advertising on transportations and I often see lots of lots of them when I travel to some.

✓ I think in the new age this is very important for companies to have some advertising on transportation, and I often see lots of them when I travel.

The phrase 'have some advertising on transportations' is incorrect; 'transportation' is an uncountable noun here and does not take a plural form. Also, 'travel to some' is incomplete and unclear; it is better to say 'when I travel'. The preposition 'to' is unnecessary in this context.

× I like advertising about technology invention.

✓ I like advertising about technological inventions.

The phrase 'technology invention' is incorrect; 'technological inventions' is the correct plural noun phrase. Also, 'advertising about' is acceptable but 'advertisements about' might be more natural. However, since the instruction is to correct only grammar mistakes, changing 'technology invention' to 'technological inventions' addresses the pronoun/adjective error.

× I really follow the advertising of that, so I could get familiar with that device and know what options do they have.

✓ I really follow the advertising of that, so I can get familiar with that device and know what options it has.

The sentence has incorrect word order in the indirect question 'what options do they have'. In indirect questions, the auxiliary verb 'do' is omitted and the subject comes before the verb: 'what options it has'. Also, 'could' should be 'can' to match the present tense context.