Advertisement— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复表达，且句子结构不够清晰。建议简化句子，避免重复，并使用更准确的表达方式。

例: Yes, I remember an advertisement for a snack that looked very delicious. It impressed me so much that I asked my mother to buy it for me.

提案: 回答中有语法错误，句子较长且缺少连贯的连接词。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并注意语法准确。

例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on the subway. They are usually displayed on digital screens with colorful and clear images, which always catch our attention.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和口语填充词，表达不够流畅。建议避免使用口语填充词，注意语法和拼写准确。

例: No, I don't like advertisements because they are often too noisy and follow me everywhere, especially when I am concentrating on my own work.

提案: 回答较完整，但句子结构可以更简洁，避免重复表达。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并适当使用连接词。

例: Honestly, I don't like most advertisements because they are too noisy. However, I prefer ads about everyday topics like health or technology since they provide useful information.

提案: 回答中存在拼写错误和语法问题，表达不够准确。建议注意拼写和语法，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇。

例: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone, especially on social media and video platforms. However, I don't like them because they are usually too noisy and distracting when I am trying to focus.

× I still remember there was an advertisement that made us strong impression on me when I was a child.

✓ I still remember there was an advertisement that made a strong impression on me when I was a child.

这里的 'strong impression' 前面缺少冠词 'a'，因为 'impression' 是可数名词，表示一次印象，需要用不定冠词 'a' 修饰。

× it looks looked like very delicious.

✓ it looked very delicious.

这里时态应保持一致，描述过去的广告，应该用过去时 'looked'，且 'looked like very delicious' 结构不正确，'looked very delicious' 更符合表达。

× I always see a lot of advertising on subway or they are always displayed on the digital screen with colorful and clear advertisements and always catch our attention.

✓ I always see a lot of advertising on the subway, and they are always displayed on digital screens with colorful and clear advertisements that always catch our attention.

'on subway' 应该加定冠词 'the subway'，'digital screen' 应该用复数 'digital screens'，并且句子连接需要用连词 'and'，使句子更通顺。

× No, I don't like advertisements because I think it's always too noisy and uh, always follow me, especially when I am focusing on my own things.

✓ No, I don't like advertisements because I think they're always too noisy and always follow me, especially when I am focusing on my own things.

'it's' 指代单数，但 'advertisements' 是复数，应该用复数代词 'they're'。

× Well, to be honest, I don't like most of advertisements because most of them are too noisy.

✓ Well, to be honest, I don't like most advertisements because most of them are too noisy.

'most of advertisements' 中 'most' 后面直接接复数名词时不需要 'of'，正确用法是 'most advertisements'。

× But if I had to choose, I will prefer advertisements related to everyday life, such as those about health or technology, because they can help us.

✓ But if I had to choose, I would prefer advertisements related to everyday life, such as those about health or technology, because they can help us.

虚拟语气中条件句 'if I had to choose' 后，主句应使用 'would' 而非 'will'，表示假设情况。

× However, I don't like this advertisement because they are always too noisy and borrowing, especially when I am focusing on my own things.

✓ However, I don't like these advertisements because they are always too noisy and boring, especially when I am focusing on my own things.

'this advertisement' 是单数，后面用复数代词 'they' 不匹配，应改为复数 'these advertisements'。另外，'borrowing' 是拼写错误，应为 'boring'。