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提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa không được truyền đạt một cách tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên tập trung vào việc trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng các liên từ để làm cho câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I remember a milk advertisement from my childhood that claimed drinking it would make children strong and healthy. It caught my attention because it emphasized the benefits for kids like me, which made the ad memorable.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn còn thiếu sự hoàn chỉnh và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và thêm các chi tiết cụ thể để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on buses and trains because these places have a lot of passengers, so advertisers can easily catch people's attention.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi nhưng câu trả lời còn ngắn và có nhiều từ thừa, gây mất tự nhiên. Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lặp từ và giải thích rõ hơn về lý do bạn không thích quảng cáo.

例: Not really. I find advertisements annoying, especially when they interrupt movies or YouTube videos, which disrupts my viewing experience.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn quá ngắn và chỉ tập trung vào chất lượng video mà không giải thích thêm. Bạn nên mở rộng câu trả lời bằng cách nêu lý do tại sao bạn thích loại quảng cáo đó và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn.

例: I like advertisements that have high-quality videos, such as 4K resolution, because they are visually appealing and make the product look more attractive.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời câu hỏi khá rõ ràng nhưng câu trả lời có thể được cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn cũng nên thêm chi tiết để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

例: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone and computer, especially when watching movies or browsing. I find them quite annoying, and if I had enough money, I would pay to remove them immediately.

× Yes, I remember at the time when about family milk, which is, uh, said that drinking this meal could make you strong and healthy, which can really catch my attention.

✓ Yes, I remember at the time an advertisement about family milk, which said that drinking this milk could make you strong and healthy, which really caught my attention.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'said' in a passive form and 'can really catch' which is present tense inconsistent with the past context. The correction uses the past tense 'said' and 'caught' to match the past event. Also, 'meal' is corrected to 'milk' as per context.

× And I'm impressed because, uh, the app make the museum really beneficial for our children like me.

✓ And I was impressed because the ad made the message really beneficial for children like me.

The sentence uses present tense 'I'm impressed' and 'make' which should be past tense to match the past context. Also, 'app' and 'museum' seem to be errors; corrected to 'ad' and 'message' for clarity.

× Yes I've seen a lot of them in the transport like bus or train uh, I think because it is place people can uh get attention for those advertise advertisement so the.

✓ Yes, I've seen a lot of them in transport like buses or trains. I think it's because these are places where people can get attention for those advertisements.

The sentence has singular/plural mismatches: 'bus or train' should be plural 'buses or trains'; 'advertise advertisement' is redundant and incorrect; 'it is place' should be 'these are places' to agree in number.

× Not really, you know, when I am watching movies or uh, YouTube, uh, there are several advertisement, uh, appear.

✓ Not really, you know, when I am watching movies or YouTube, there are several advertisements that appear.

The word 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to agree with 'several'. Also, 'appear' needs a relative pronoun 'that' to connect properly.

× Uh, I think that I love the advertisement which has a high quality of of video like 4K60P or 4K30P.

✓ Uh, I think that I love advertisements which have high-quality video like 4K60P or 4K30P.

'High quality of of video' is incorrect; it should be 'high-quality video'. Also, 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to generalize.

× Yes, I usually see that on my phone and computer when I'm watching movies or doing anything.

✓ Yes, I usually see them on my phone and computer when I'm watching movies or doing anything.

'See that' is incorrect when referring to multiple advertisements; 'them' is the correct pronoun. Also, 'doing anything' is vague but acceptable.

× I think it is really annoying and for me if I have money I could cancel it right now.

✓ I think it is really annoying, and for me, if I had money, I could cancel it right now.

The conditional sentence requires past tense 'had' after 'if' to express hypothetical situation. 'Could' is correct for ability in conditional.