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提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如“apply me very instant”表达不清晰，建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意时态一致性。此外，回答较为简单，缺少具体细节和连贯的连接词。

例: Yes, I do. When I was about 13, I saw an advertisement for a boxing competition. It caught my attention immediately because I have a strong passion for boxing. Seeing that ad made me feel very excited and motivated to learn more about the sport.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误，如“commercial”应为“commercials”，以及“notice about this advertisements”表达不准确。建议使用更准确的词汇和句式，并增加连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains and subways. However, most people don't pay attention to them because they are usually busy looking at their mobile phones while traveling.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然，如“a big fans”应为“a big fan”，“make me annoying”应为“make me annoyed”。建议简化句子结构，使用更自然的表达，并注意时态和单复数一致。

例: Actually, I'm not a big fan of advertisements. If I want to learn a new skill or buy something I like, I usually search online or visit stores. Therefore, commercials are not very important in my daily life. For example, when I watch movies, the ads that pop up often annoy me.

提案: 回答中出现了不明词汇“Mary King”，可能是拼写错误或表达不清。句子结构混乱，语法错误较多。建议使用清晰的表达，避免重复，并用连接词使句子连贯。

例: I like movie advertisements because I am very passionate about watching different kinds of films. These ads always excite me and make me look forward to new releases.

× I see the advertisement of boxing's competitions, which apply me very instant as a result of I have great passions for boxing.

✓ I saw the advertisement of boxing competitions, which appealed to me instantly because I have great passion for boxing.

这里的时间是过去时（当我13岁时），所以动词应该用过去式。"see" 应改为 "saw"。另外，"apply me very instant" 是错误表达，正确应为 "appealed to me instantly"，表示广告给我留下了深刻印象。

× So when I see that, I feel very excited.

✓ So when I saw that, I felt very excited.

这里描述的是过去的经历，动词应使用过去时态，"see" 改为 "saw"，"feel" 改为 "felt"。

× I always see plenty of commercial on trains or on subways.

✓ I always see plenty of commercials on trains or subways.

"commercial" 是可数名词，表示广告，复数形式应为 "commercials"。另外，"on subways" 不需要加冠词 "on the subways"，但这里保持原句结构即可。

× However nobody will notice about this advertisements due to they always watch their mobile when they take the train or subway.

✓ However, nobody will notice these advertisements because they always watch their mobiles when they take the train or subway.

"notice" 后不加介词 "about"，应直接接宾语。"this advertisements" 中 "this" 应改为复数指示代词 "these"。"mobile" 应用复数 "mobiles"，因为指代多个人的手机。

× Actually, I am not a big fans of advertisements.

✓ Actually, I am not a big fan of advertisements.

"a" 是单数冠词，后面应接单数名词，"fans" 应改为单数 "fan"。

× if I want to learn some new skill or buy something that I really keen on, I can search on the website or in the shopping mall.

✓ if I want to learn some new skills or buy something that I am really keen on, I can search on the website or in the shopping mall.

"keen" 是形容词，需用系动词 "am" 连接，构成 "I am really keen on"。"skill" 应用复数 "skills"，表示多种技能。

× So the commercials is not crucial in my daily life in contrast.

✓ So the commercials are not crucial in my daily life in contrast.

"commercials" 是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式 "are"，而不是 "is"。

× For instance, when I watch some movie, it will always pop some advertisement which will make me annoying.

✓ For instance, when I watch some movies, advertisements always pop up which make me annoyed.

"some movie" 应用复数 "some movies"。"pop some advertisement" 应改为 "advertisements always pop up"。"make me annoying" 错误，应为 "make me annoyed"，表示使我感到烦恼。

× As for me, I am Mary King of the movie commercials owing to I have great passions for watching all kinds of movies.

✓ As for me, I am a big fan of movie commercials because I have great passion for watching all kinds of movies.

"Mary King" 可能是误写，应为 "a big fan"。"owing to" 用法不当，改为更常用的 "because"。"passions" 应为不可数名词 "passion"。

× So seeing this kind of advertisement always let me feel excited.

✓ So seeing this kind of advertisement always makes me feel excited.

主语 "seeing this kind of advertisement" 是单数，谓语动词应使用第三人称单数 "makes"。

× So I'm really enjoy to see this kind of advertisement.

✓ So I really enjoy seeing this kind of advertisement.

"I'm really enjoy" 结构错误，应为 "I really enjoy"。动词 "enjoy" 后应接动名词 "seeing"，而不是不定式 "to see"。