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提案: Покращте структуру відповіді, починаючи з чіткої теми речення, а потім надайте конкретні деталі. Уникайте загальних фраз і використовуйте більш точну лексику для опису реклами.

例: Yes, one advertisement that impressed me as a child was for a local gym promoting a healthy lifestyle. It encouraged people of all ages to stay active and take care of their health, which left a strong impression on me.

提案: Покращте зв'язність відповіді, використовуючи сполучні слова, і уникайте повторень. Надайте більш конкретні деталі про рекламу, щоб зробити відповідь більш інформативною.

例: Yes, whenever I take the Underground to my university, I often notice an advertisement for an old dance studio. It encourages people to engage in sports during their free time, promoting a healthy and active lifestyle.

提案: Покращте граматику та структуру речень, уникайте тавтології. Використовуйте більш точні слова для вираження своїх почуттів щодо реклами.

例: I don't like advertisements that use very bright colors because when I walk around the city and see these old ads, they make me feel uncomfortable and spoil the historic atmosphere.

提案: Покращте зв'язність і граматику, використовуйте більш різноманітну лексику для опису типу реклами, яку ви віддаєте перевагу.

例: I prefer advertisements that avoid bright colors and instead promote sports and a healthy lifestyle, as they have a positive influence on our well-being.

× Yes, I remember the advertisements which made very big influence on me.

✓ Yes, I remember the advertisements which made a very big influence on me.

The phrase 'very big influence' requires an article 'a' before 'very big influence' because 'influence' is a singular countable noun here. Without the article, the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× It was advertisement about our gym in our city.

✓ It was an advertisement about our gym in our city.

The noun 'advertisement' is singular and countable, so it requires the indefinite article 'an' before it. Omitting the article causes a grammatical error.

× The gym was about health style which represented all people.

✓ The gym was about a healthy lifestyle which represented all people.

The phrase 'health style' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'healthy lifestyle'. 'Healthy' is the adjective form modifying 'lifestyle', which is the correct noun here.

× Always when I use Underground to make to to go to my university, I see only one advertisement about, you know, this old dance studio which encourage people to sports in their free time.

✓ Whenever I use the Underground to go to my university, I see only one advertisement about, you know, this old dance studio which encourages people to do sports in their free time.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'Always when' is better expressed as 'Whenever'; 'make to to go' is incorrect and should be 'go'; 'encourage' should be 'encourages' to agree with singular subject 'studio'; 'to sports' should be 'to do sports' as 'do' is needed before 'sports'.

× this old dance studio which encourage people to sports in their free time.

✓ this old dance studio which encourages people to do sports in their free time.

The verb 'encourage' must be in third person singular form 'encourages' to agree with the singular subject 'studio'. Also, 'to sports' is incorrect; it should be 'to do sports'.

× I don't like actual advertisements which use so colorful color because in the city when you walk around and look at this old advertisement, it's make me feel so uncomfortable and destroy all old city.

✓ I don't like actual advertisements which use such colorful colors because when you walk around the city and look at these old advertisements, they make me feel so uncomfortable and destroy the old city.

'So colorful color' is incorrect; 'such colorful colors' is better. 'It's make me' should be 'they make me' to agree with plural 'advertisements'. 'Destroy all old city' should be 'destroy the old city' with the definite article 'the'.

× look at this old advertisement, it's make me feel so uncomfortable and destroy all old city.

✓ look at these old advertisements, they make me feel so uncomfortable and destroy the old city.

'This old advertisement' is singular, but context suggests plural 'these old advertisements'. 'It's make' is incorrect; should be 'they make' to agree with plural subject.

× I prefer advertisements which do not use bright colors and encourage us to do more sports or healthy style.

✓ I prefer advertisements which do not use bright colors and encourage us to do more sports or maintain a healthy lifestyle.

'Healthy style' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'healthy lifestyle'. This makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× It can make good influence in our health.

✓ It can have a good influence on our health.

'Make good influence' is incorrect; the correct collocation is 'have a good influence'. Also, 'in our health' should be 'on our health' as 'influence on' is the correct prepositional phrase.