Advertisement— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct grammar and sentence structure to make your answer clearer and more natural. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating the same idea. For example, you can say: 'When I was a child, a chocolate advertisement impressed me because it made me want to try the chocolate. My parents bought it for me, and I found it very sweet and delicious.'

例: When I was a child, a chocolate advertisement impressed me because it made me want to try the chocolate. My parents bought it for me, and I found it very sweet and delicious.

提案: Focus on using correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Also, be more specific and use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, you could say: 'Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains and buses. These ads are designed to attract customers and encourage them to buy products.'

例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains and buses. These ads are designed to attract customers and encourage them to buy products.

提案: Try to express your opinion clearly and use linking words to explain your reasons. Also, avoid grammatical errors. For example: 'I don't like advertisements because I think they waste time. They often just show off products to encourage people to buy them, but sometimes the products are not as good as they seem.'

例: I don't like advertisements because I think they waste time. They often just show off products to encourage people to buy them, but sometimes the products are not as good as they seem.

提案: Be more precise and use correct grammar. Also, explain why you like these advertisements with clear reasons. For example: 'I like advertisements for chocolate and food because they often introduce new flavours and special offers, which makes me interested in trying them.'

例: I like advertisements for chocolate and food because they often introduce new flavours and special offers, which makes me interested in trying them.

× Definitely when I was child I see ya chocolate advertisement and I told my parents I eat them chocolate and my parents purchase these chocolate for me and when I tasted it, it is very sweet and delicious.

✓ Definitely, when I was a child, I saw a chocolate advertisement and I told my parents I wanted to eat that chocolate and my parents purchased that chocolate for me and when I tasted it, it was very sweet and delicious.

The sentence has several singular and plural issues: 'child' should be 'a child' (singular countable noun needs an article), 'see' should be past tense 'saw' to match the past context, 'them chocolate' is incorrect plural usage, should be 'that chocolate' (singular), 'purchase these chocolate' should be 'purchased that chocolate' to match singular and past tense, and 'it is' should be 'it was' to maintain past tense consistency.

× Definitely when I was child I see ya chocolate advertisement and I told my parents I eat them chocolate and my parents purchase these chocolate for me and when I tasted it, it is very sweet and delicious.

✓ Definitely, when I was a child, I saw a chocolate advertisement and I told my parents I wanted to eat that chocolate and my parents purchased that chocolate for me and when I tasted it, it was very sweet and delicious.

The verbs 'see', 'purchase', and 'is' are incorrectly used in present tense when the context is past. They should be 'saw', 'purchased', and 'was' respectively to maintain past tense consistency.

× Well, I saw a lot of advertisements on board rings or other transports such as buses or cars because they attract customers to for purchasing these things.

✓ Well, I saw a lot of advertisements on board trains or other transport such as buses or cars because they attract customers to purchase these things.

'board rings' is a mishearing or typo for 'board trains' (plural noun). 'transports' is incorrect; 'transport' is usually uncountable or singular here. Also, 'to for purchasing' is incorrect and should be 'to purchase'.

× Well, I saw a lot of advertisements on board rings or other transports such as buses or cars because they attract customers to for purchasing these things.

✓ Well, I saw a lot of advertisements on board trains or other transport such as buses or cars because they attract customers to purchase these things.

The phrase 'to for purchasing' is incorrect; the correct form is 'to purchase' because 'to' is followed by the base form of the verb, not 'for' plus gerund.

× Definitely not because I think the waste of time to watch advertisements because they only show off the products for purchasing things by customers, but in reality these products are not good.

✓ Definitely not because I think it is a waste of time to watch advertisements since they only show off products to encourage customers to purchase things, but in reality, these products are not good.

The original sentence lacks the modal verb 'is' after 'think' to form 'think it is a waste of time'. Also, 'for purchasing things by customers' is awkward; 'to encourage customers to purchase things' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I like both chocolate and food advertisement because they tell the amount of chocolate time to time and also the new flavors of these products.

✓ I like both chocolate and food advertisements because they tell the amount of chocolate from time to time and also the new flavours of these products.

'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match 'both chocolate and food'. 'amount of chocolate time to time' is missing 'from' in the phrase 'from time to time'. Also, 'flavors' is spelled 'flavours' in Australian English.