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提案: Try to make your answer more coherent by using linking words and avoid vague phrases like 'a story of a family'. Be more specific about what made the advertisement memorable and how it showed confidence. Also, keep your answer concise and natural.

例: Yes, a shampoo commercial impressed me as a child because it showed a family supporting each other, which made the product feel trustworthy. This advertisement stood out since it linked the shampoo to building confidence, making it memorable.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by connecting ideas smoothly and completing your thoughts. For example, explain why the absence of ads shows cleanliness and why you think that is positive. Use linking words to improve flow.

例: No, I don't see many advertisements on public transport because the Qatari government enforces strict rules. As a result, metro stations remain clean and uncluttered, which I appreciate because it creates a pleasant environment for commuters.

提案: Avoid repeating phrases like 'advertisements' and improve sentence structure for naturalness. Also, clarify your points with examples or reasons. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I like advertisements that provide honest and clear information about products. Moreover, I appreciate ads that are accessible to everyone because they help people make informed choices.

提案: Your answer is good but can be more natural by avoiding repetitive phrases and improving sentence flow. Use linking words to connect your points and provide a more personal touch.

例: I prefer informative advertisements since they explain how products work and highlight their benefits and drawbacks. This detailed information helps me make better purchasing decisions.

× There was a well known shampoo commercial that caught my attention when I was a child.

✓ There was a well-known shampoo commercial that caught my attention when I was a child.

The phrase 'well known' should be hyphenated to form the compound adjective 'well-known' before the noun 'shampoo commercial' to correctly describe it.

× It was about a story of a family that made it memorable because apart from the product quality, it showed how people build confidence.

✓ It was about the story of a family that made it memorable because apart from the product quality, it showed how people build confidence.

When referring to a specific story already mentioned or known, the definite article 'the' should be used instead of 'a'.

× No, because the government of Qatar is quite strict in public transportation.

✓ No, because the government of Qatar is quite strict about public transportation.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used here; the correct preposition to express strictness regarding a subject is 'about'. This improves sentence clarity and correctness.

× You cannot find any banners or tarpaulins advertisements inside the metro station.

✓ You cannot find any banners or tarpaulin advertisements inside the metro station.

The word 'tarpaulins' should be singular as an adjective modifying 'advertisements', so 'tarpaulin advertisements' is correct. Also, 'tarpaulin' is used as an adjective here, so it should not be plural.

× I think it's quite good because it shows how clean.

✓ I think it's quite good because it shows how clean it is.

The sentence is incomplete; it lacks the subject 'it' and the verb 'is' after 'how clean' to form a complete and grammatically correct sentence.

× Yes, I do like advertisements, especially those that are informative advertisements, those that give product information with honesty and genuine description about their products.

✓ Yes, I do like advertisements, especially those that are informative, those that give product information with honest and genuine descriptions about their products.

The word 'honesty' is a noun but should be replaced with the adjective 'honest' to correctly modify 'description'. Also, 'description' should be plural 'descriptions' to agree with 'those' referring to multiple advertisements.

× Additionally, I love those that give information to everyone.

✓ Additionally, I love those that give information to everyone.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× For example, they usually explain how the products work, what are the benefits, advantages and disadvantages.

✓ For example, they usually explain how the products work, what the benefits, advantages, and disadvantages are.

In indirect questions within a sentence, the word order should be subject + verb, not verb + subject. So 'what are the benefits' should be 'what the benefits are'.