Computers— Part 1 採点レポート
会話
Part 1
試験官
In what conditions would you use a computer?
受験者
I use a computer on many occasions. I mainly use a computer for work and entertainment. On the one hand, I use a computer to help with my work, because nowadays we all need computers to work. On the other hand, I play computer games.
試験官
When was the first time you used a computer?
受験者
The first time I used a computer was in primary school. I remember exactly I was in 4th grade. A school organized some computer related classes for students. One teacher taught us some basic computer skills, especially he taught us how to type. That was the first time I used a computer.
試験官
What would your life be like without a computer?
受験者
Without a computer, my personal life would be greatly changed, both in daily life and work. On the one hand, my work efficiency would be greatly reduced because I really need a computer to help with my work. On the other hand, without a computer, my personal life would be boring.
試験官
In what conditions would it be difficult for you to use a computer?
受験者
Yes, there is one situation where I find it quite difficult to use a computer. That is when I return to my hometown, which is a small and remote village where the Internet is quite poor. So when I use a computer in my hometown, I always get disconnected. It was frustrating.
評価
総合
Part 1
In what conditions would you use a computer?
スコア: 78.0提案: 回答总体清晰但有重复和冗长。要更自然、简洁地直接回应问题并用一两句具体例子支持，例如具体的工作任务或娱乐活动。同时注意句子衔接词的多样性，避免多次使用“on the one hand/on the other hand”造成刻板。控制在3-4句内。
例: I use a computer in many situations, especially for work and entertainment. For work, I rely on it for tasks like writing reports and managing emails. For entertainment, I often stream movies or play strategy games online.
When was the first time you used a computer?
スコア: 84.0提案: 回答具体且有细节，但略显重复。可以合并句子以更流畅自然，增加一两个与经历相关的具体细节（例如学到的技能如何帮助后来学习）。保持简洁不超过4句。
例: I first used a computer in fourth grade when my school offered basic IT classes. The teacher showed us how to type and use simple programs, which later helped me complete school projects faster.
What would your life be like without a computer?
スコア: 72.0提案: 回答表达清楚但过于笼统且重复。应给出更具体的影响例子（比如无法处理电子邮件、无法参与视频会议、失去在线娱乐渠道），并使用连接词如“for example”、“as a result”使逻辑更连贯。将同义句合并，避免陈述性重复。
例: Life without a computer would be much harder: for example, I couldn't check emails or join video meetings for work, so my productivity would drop. I would also lose easy access to movies and online games, which would make my free time less enjoyable.
In what conditions would it be difficult for you to use a computer?
スコア: 80.0提案: 回答具体且相关，但有口语化小问题和时态不一致（混用现在时和过去时）。建议改用现在时描述常态，并补充如何应对该困难的细节（例如使用离线软件或找更好网络）。少用重复词汇如“quite/always”。
例: I find it difficult to use a computer when I'm in my hometown because the internet connection is very poor. As a result, I often get disconnected during online calls, so I usually prepare offline documents or go to a cafe with better Wi‑Fi.
文法
× On the other hand, I play computer games.
✓ On the other hand, I play computer games.
该句本身语法正确，未涉及现在分词误用。保持不变。
× A school organized some computer related classes for students.
✓ A school organized some computer-related classes for students.
“computer related”作为复合形容词修饰“classes”时应使用连字符连接，形成“computer-related”。这是英语写作中形容词短语用法的规范，与文章使用有关。
× I remember exactly I was in 4th grade.
✓ I remember exactly that I was in 4th grade.
在表示记忆或回忆的句子中，主句与从句之间通常需要连词“that”来引导宾语从句，保证句子结构完整。中文建议：在此类句子中使用连词“that”来引导从句。
× One teacher taught us some basic computer skills, especially he taught us how to type.
✓ One teacher taught us some basic computer skills; in particular, he taught us how to type.
原句中用逗号连接两个独立分句会产生逗号拼接错误（comma splice）。可以用分号或分句连接词（如“in particular”或“and”）来改正。建议使用分号或连接词来分隔独立分句。
× When I use a computer in my hometown, I always get disconnected.
✓ When I use a computer in my hometown, I always get disconnected.
该句语法正确，单复数无误，保持不变。
× It was frustrating.
✓ It was frustrating.
句子与前文“always get disconnected”发生时态混用略有脱节，但单句本身过去时使用正确。若想与现在习惯连贯，可改为“It is frustrating.”（如果描述目前经常发生的情况）。中文建议：描述习惯性现在发生的事情用现在时，回忆过去用过去时。
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