Computers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ содержит повторы и нечеткие формулировки. Следует избегать слов-паразитов и излишних повторов, а также использовать более точные выражения.

例: I usually use my computer to complete university assignments, such as homework and projects. I need to use it daily because I have many tasks to finish.

提案: Ответ содержит много слов-паразитов и нечетких выражений. Рекомендуется говорить более уверенно и использовать связующие слова для плавности речи.

例: I don't remember the exact time, but I started using a computer about 15 years ago when I played games on my mother's computer as a child.

提案: Ответ прерван и содержит ошибку. Следует строить полные предложения и избегать незавершенных мыслей.

例: My life would be much more complicated without a computer because I rely on it for my homework, projects, and accessing important information.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и повторения. Следует улучшить грамматику и использовать более разнообразную лексику.

例: It is difficult for me to use a computer when I don't have Wi-Fi or mobile internet because I cannot access information without an internet connection.

× I often use my computer to do a university tasks, uh, for example my homework or maybe projects.

✓ I often use my computer to do university tasks, uh, for example my homework or maybe projects.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before the plural noun 'tasks'. In English, 'a' is used only with singular countable nouns. The correct form is to omit 'a' before plural nouns like 'tasks'.

× I have lots of homework every day.

✓ I have a lot of homework every day.

The phrase 'lots of' is informal and usually used with countable plural nouns. 'Homework' is an uncountable noun, so the correct quantifier is 'a lot of'.

× I do a lot of work on it, my homework, my projects and I have a lot of information on.

✓ I do a lot of work on it, my homework, my projects and I have a lot of information on it.

The sentence is missing the object after the preposition 'on'. The phrase 'have a lot of information on' requires an object, so 'it' (referring to the computer) should be added.

× I think that it's difficult for me to use computer when I don't have Wi-Fi or just mobile Internet 'cause I don't have an access to the Internet and I can't gain an information and it's really difficult.

✓ I think that it's difficult for me to use a computer when I don't have Wi-Fi or just mobile Internet 'cause I don't have access to the Internet and I can't gain information and it's really difficult.

The noun 'computer' is countable and singular, so it requires the indefinite article 'a'. The phrase 'an access' is incorrect because 'access' is an uncountable noun and does not take an article. Similarly, 'an information' is incorrect because 'information' is uncountable and does not take an article.