Computers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваш ответ содержит несколько грамматических ошибок и нечеткие выражения, например, "Italy's computer" и "I can say is convenience". Рекомендуется использовать более точные и естественные фразы, а также избегать излишней многословности. Попробуйте структурировать ответ с четким вступлением и примерами, используя связующие слова для логичности.

例: I use a computer in various situations. For instance, at school, I use it to complete projects and prepare presentations. Additionally, it is very convenient to use a computer at home for doing homework.

提案: Ответ понятен, но содержит повторения и нечеткие формулировки, например, "but honestly I don't remember well, but I can say". Рекомендуется избегать повторов и использовать более плавные переходы между идеями.

例: I don't remember the exact time, but I started using a computer when I was about 7 or 8 years old as a child.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие выражения, например, "there are a lot of information" и "I don't know how I live". Рекомендуется использовать более точные формулировки и разнообразить лексику, а также структурировать ответ с использованием связующих слов.

例: Without a computer, my life would be much more difficult because I store a lot of important information related to my school and work on it. Therefore, I can't imagine how I would manage without it.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие выражения, например, "in on the night" и "there are there is a poor lighting". Рекомендуется использовать правильные предлоги и более точные формулировки, а также связать идеи с помощью союзов.

例: It would be difficult for me to use a computer at night because of poor lighting. Also, using a computer without Internet access would be challenging.

× So I can see that there are a lot of conditions for using computer.

✓ So I can see that there are a lot of conditions for using a computer.

The noun 'computer' is countable and singular here, so it requires an article. The indefinite article 'a' is appropriate because it refers to any computer in general.

× For example, I use Italy's computer at my school for my projects maybe, or my presentation.

✓ For example, I use Italy's computer at my school for my projects, maybe for my presentation.

The sentence needs a comma before 'maybe' to separate the clauses properly. Also, 'Italy's computer' is acceptable if referring to a specific computer named or owned by Italy, but the sentence structure is awkward; however, no grammar problem type applies here beyond punctuation.

× Also I can say is convenience at home when you do your homework.

✓ Also, I can say it is convenient at home when you do your homework.

The word 'convenience' is a noun, but the intended meaning is an adjective describing the situation, so 'convenient' is correct. Also, the sentence is missing the subject 'it' after 'say'. Adding a comma after 'Also' improves clarity.

× but I can say that I started to use a computer when I was a child, maybe I was 7 or 8 years old.

✓ but I can say that I started using a computer when I was a child, maybe when I was 7 or 8 years old.

The verb phrase 'started to use' is grammatically correct but 'started using' is more natural. Also, adding 'when' before 'I was 7 or 8 years old' clarifies the time reference.

× because there are a lot of information about my school, about my work on my computer,

✓ because there is a lot of information about my school, about my work on my computer,

The noun 'information' is uncountable and singular, so the verb should be 'is' instead of 'are'.

× and I don't know how I live without my computer.

✓ and I don't know how I would live without my computer.

The sentence refers to a hypothetical situation in the future or present, so the conditional 'would live' is appropriate instead of simple present 'live'.

× I can say that it would be difficult for me to use a computer in on the night because there are there is a poor lighting.

✓ I can say that it would be difficult for me to use a computer at night because there is poor lighting.

The preposition 'in on the night' is incorrect; 'at night' is the correct expression. Also, 'there are there is' is redundant; only 'there is' is needed. 'Poor lighting' does not require 'a' because 'lighting' is uncountable.

× Also maybe when I use computer without an Internet.

✓ Also, maybe when I use a computer without the Internet.

The noun 'computer' is countable and singular, so it needs the article 'a'. 'Internet' is a unique entity and requires the definite article 'the'.