Computers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không tự nhiên như "umm" và cấu trúc câu nên rõ ràng hơn. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, tránh lặp lại ý và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn để diễn đạt ý tưởng một cách hiệu quả.

例: I usually use my computer for studying because it helps me access information quickly and organize my notes better than using books or notebooks.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời trở nên chính xác và tự nhiên hơn. Ngoài ra, nên thêm liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như thiếu từ hoặc sai thì.

例: I don't remember exactly, but I think I first used a computer when I was five years old. It was my dad's computer, and I borrowed it to play games.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không tự nhiên như "Uh" và chú ý ngữ pháp để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn về ảnh hưởng của việc không có máy tính.

例: Life without a computer would be very difficult for me because I rely on it for both work and study. Without it, I couldn't search for information or complete my tasks quickly and efficiently.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không tự nhiên như "uh" và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và diễn đạt rõ ràng hơn về cảm xúc và lý do của bạn.

例: I find it difficult to use a computer when people are watching me because it makes me feel uncomfortable and distracted. Therefore, I prefer to work on my tasks when I am alone.

× I think that my first time used a computer was when I five years old.

✓ I think that my first time using a computer was when I was five years old.

The phrase 'my first time used a computer' is incorrect because 'used' is a simple past verb, but here a past participle or gerund form is needed after 'my first time'. The correct form is 'my first time using a computer'. Also, the sentence lacks the verb 'was' before 'five years old'. The correct sentence is 'I think that my first time using a computer was when I was five years old.' This corrects the verb form and adds the missing verb for proper sentence structure.

× It is my dad computers and I borrowed him for playing games.

✓ They are my dad's computers and I borrowed one from him for playing games.

The original sentence has a singular/plural mismatch and incorrect possessive form. 'It is my dad computers' is incorrect because 'computers' is plural but 'it is' is singular. Also, 'my dad computers' lacks the possessive apostrophe. The correct form is 'They are my dad's computers'. Additionally, 'I borrowed him' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'I borrowed one from him' to indicate borrowing a computer. This correction fixes plural agreement, possessive form, and proper verb usage.

× I think it is really hard for me because of my work and study are in my computer and if I don't have a computer I cannot search. Uh, doing my task instantly and efficient.

✓ I think it would be really hard for me because my work and study are on my computer, and if I don't have a computer, I cannot search or do my tasks instantly and efficiently.

The original sentence has several structural issues: 'because of my work and study are in my computer' is incorrect; 'because' should be followed by a clause without 'of', and 'in my computer' should be 'on my computer'. The sentence 'I cannot search. Uh, doing my task instantly and efficient.' is fragmented and lacks proper verb forms and conjunctions. The corrected sentence combines ideas properly, uses correct prepositions, and corrects adverb forms ('efficient' to 'efficiently').

× I think that I can also study on my book or notebook, but it is better to do it in the computer rather than those.

✓ I think that I can also study with my book or notebook, but it is better to do it on the computer rather than with those.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with 'my book or notebook'; the correct preposition is 'with' to indicate using the book as a tool for study. Also, 'in the computer' should be 'on the computer' because we use 'on' for devices like computers. The phrase 'rather than those' is vague; 'with those' clarifies the comparison. This correction fixes preposition usage for clarity and correctness.

× I borrowed him for playing games.

✓ I borrowed it from him for playing games.

The pronoun 'him' is incorrectly used as the object of 'borrowed'. The correct structure is 'borrow something from someone'. Therefore, 'I borrowed it from him' is correct, where 'it' refers to the computer and 'him' is the person from whom the item is borrowed.

× I feel like uh is is really annoying and I cannot do my task efficiently so that's why I would like to do it when there are no people around.

✓ I feel like it is really annoying, and I cannot do my tasks efficiently, so that's why I would like to do it when there are no people around.

The sentence has a repeated word 'is is' which is a typographical error. Also, the sentence lacks commas to separate clauses properly. Adding commas improves readability and correctness. The phrase 'my task' is better as 'my tasks' to indicate multiple tasks. This correction addresses conjunction use and sentence clarity.